Kill This Time Traveler

Are the utensils tied badly? There is also the unknowable divine system. Isn't it good for the mysterious system? Don't make up words casually, especially those that are not of sufficient quality.

At the beginning, it was not as exciting as directly killing the time traveler! It's a bit boring to watch other people kill, but I don't like it if I don't like it.

This introduction really makes you feel that if you kill the panda, you will become a national treasure.

Some of the superiority is forced by the system, such as various pretending systems? Moreover, normal people hope to have a better life after time travel, right?

I'm personally curious as to why there is such a cheating profession as a melee mage? When it comes to style, in terms of close combat ability, it can be compared to the sword masters and warriors who only rely on close combat. Note that the extra thing is the ability to cast spells. It's so stupid, it's like those powerful melee professions that don't have the ability to release energy. Really talking about close combat, take the dungeon as an analogy, you are a squishy mage with average operation, Berserker, Asura, they will get close enough to kill you. , A set of combos will beat you like a dog, why bother? Long-range, ordinary ones can't be hit at all, but you still have to chant to be powerful, and you will die after you finish chanting. Is it possible that I still have to wait for you to cast a forbidden spell, so I can't fight you. When it comes to average, average means mean. Being good at everything means being good at nothing. It's a simple truth. Everyone knows the theory of bottled water, but life is life and not a barrel

Ever-changing baby, ever-changing baby, ever-changing baby, ever-changing baby

"A Different History of the Human Race" looks at how the down-and-out human race [breaks free] from the enslavement of the elves? How to crush the former mortal enemy, the Orc Alliance? How to stand out in a continent full of hundreds of ethnic groups? How to stand up against the Orc Empire and the Elf Royal Court? How to break through the three-legged confrontation and become the hegemon? The fusion of hope and persistence, the collision of wisdom and strength...

The introduction looks good, I'll read it after I finish it.

If you are the protagonist, even if you are an indigenous person, you will still have special abilities and you will still be superior.

Chapter 1: At the very beginning, the article commits one of the most common problems of time-travel novels: being too calm. From being killed on the edge of a steep cliff to waking up, the protagonist has no sense of panic at all. In fact, you can use a few simple words to polish it very well. For example, "suddenly awakened" and other such modifiers, using 1-2 can make it very comfortable. I don't know whether the author wants to show Brian (Chen Dong)'s natural sense of calmness or what. The lack of emotional modification and description will make readers feel that your protagonist has no "human touch". At the first moment of reading, Brian gave me the impression that he was just a paper person, rather than a human being with flesh and blood. I hope the author can think more about it. What will your emotions be like when you really travel through time? The second issue is environmental description. The first chapter should try your best to show the reader the world view in every word. How can the worldview quickly come into readers' minds? Environmental description is a very good starting point. The author should have thought about this aspect, but the writing was not good enough. The description of clothing is one of the simple and direct descriptions of the environment. It should also be the first thing that catches Brian's eyes when he wakes up from the disaster. In the article, the author only used the word "weirdly dressed" without any description. And there is no description of the protagonist Brian's clothes, which are just "waiter's clothes". I think it's a pity that such a convenient entry point was wasted. The third issue is the difference between the narrator and the protagonist's self-narration. Some things, such as the background setting, are not suitable to be explained from the protagonist's perspective. It can be more appropriate to use narration. The fourth problem is also the most fatal one: ruthlessness. If I read it correctly, Chen Dong should be a good young man living in the 21st century and growing up under the red flag. Does Chen Dong have any relatives? Do you have parents? Have children? Are there any brothers or sisters? Have any friends? The author gives no explanation at all. Even if it is an orphan with no worries, I think it should be given the most basic setting. Judging from the first chapter, Chen Dong completed the transition from a time-traveler to an indigenous person in just a few conversations with his boss and other employees. And he immediately accepted his new life without any nostalgia for the past. The confession in the last paragraph of the first chapter is a huge failure. Brief review of Chapter 1: The formulaic time-travel opening explains the most basic elements and lacks emotional description. The male protagonist Brian in the novel gives people the intuitive feeling that he is a set puppet, not the author's biological son, without flesh and blood. I hope that future writing can reduce mistakes in this area and improve them.

The beginning of the second chapter is very good, setting up Brian as a "taciturn and lonely academic master". But there's a problem: names. There is a saying called the "3-episode rule", which means that you need to watch the third episode to make a more pertinent comment on the quality of a new animation. However, the second chapter is over, and the first three chapters are already 2/3. Where is the male protagonist's last name? Just one name: Brian? The boss Claude in Chapter 1 also has no surname, only Claude. I don't know whether this is a surname or a given name. Name is the most basic thing in the setting. There are so many articles that can be used for surname and first name. Often a simple surname can run through the entire main line of many novels. After reading the second chapter, I only saw the word "Brian" on the protagonist. In the second chapter, we get right to the point of killing the time traveler. We can get a lot of information from Chapter 2. 1: On the continent of Brian, time travelers are not rare people. It seems that the general public can get this kind of information about "some people from what ball." 2: Introducing the system, host, rewards, and mental power. Mental power is a key for the time traveler Chen Dong to fill the weakness of the native Brian. The spiritual power of a soul that can travel through time and space allows Brian, a top academic with no theoretical knowledge, to gain the capital to climb up. As the "protagonist's hook" pointed out in the second chapter, this hook is neither too excessive nor too low, but just right. The emotional description in the second chapter is much better than that in the first chapter, and the author's intention is clearly felt.

The introduction is very contradictory, isn't the protagonist a time traveler emm?

This book still has great potential. I read a previous book review saying that the power system is not right. I haven't read much about Xixuan, but now there are many fairy-tale works that have their own systems. My opinion is that it can be justified. The second is character creation. At present, it can only be said that the villain is not too mentally retarded. But after the protagonist killed Locke, didn't Rex's family have even the slightest concern? Didn't they worry about other trump cards at all? In short, the current highlight is that in terms of world view, local forces can understand and accept the existence of time travellers, unlike previous books where no one noticed anything wrong until the protagonist rose to become a god. I hope the author can stick to it and write an impressive story.

But the writing is not strong enough, the plot is not reasonable enough, and the character of the protagonist is also very bad. As mentioned before, he is a taciturn academic master. When someone knows about the existence of time travellers, he still pretends to be cowardly and hides his strength. Do you really think that those predators are vegetarians? Also, don't mess with your own magic system and create your own words. And do all mages in this world rely on mental power? A mage who fights in close quarters... And the elements are not mentioned in the whole process. All spells rely on mental power. Doesn't everyone rely on mental power to achieve the effects of spells? Your magic system is broken, your mental power is omnipotent, and regular mages can commit collective suicide. A conventional mage's spell release is composed by locking the target with mental power and outlining the spell model, and then guiding the elements through gestures and spells. The magic net ring mage relies on mental power to communicate with the magic net, and then selects a spell model, and the mental power guides the release. Therefore, the magic net ring is convenient, but it is not conducive to the development of the mage himself. The mage you wrote, the author, has nothing wrong with being directly inserted into a fighting spirit fighter, an intermediate star fighter! Elementary skill: petrification! This guy is so scary

It varies from person to person, but it is true that many time travelers have the posture of Long Aotian, which makes people really uncomfortable.

It's like the protagonist is not a time traveler