Dark Millennium

The author seems to be willing to accept suggestions humbly and write the book seriously. As an old bookworm, he also took the time to patiently give suggestions 🪖 After casual reading, the author is good, but he clearly spent his energy in the wrong place. The writing style is too showy, and the overall situation is too unreal and too flamboyant. Coupled with the relatively chaotic world setting, people have little expectation for the development of the plot 😥 As for the issue of whether it's fun to abuse the master after reading the comments (I only read the first few chapters, so I don't know what happens next), I don't think it's the key. Many people read the master abuse stories like "Extraordinary Noble" and "Kingdom Bloodline" with gusto (including me 🤭). I think the most important key is to have something interesting overall that makes people motivated to read and can naturally attract readers. To achieve this, the world setting, character creation, and plot development are the most important, and the writing style is secondary. The author invests a lot of energy in this aspect, and the energy investment in other aspects will naturally decrease, and to be honest, this kind of writing style will still deduct points for the novel (it seems that a small number of readers have unique tastes and like this very much 🤤) It feels like it's rare for someone like Tomato to use simple writing to express what he thinks well.

When I saw the introduction, I wanted to say, is there a 41st millennium...

Watching this should be partly Bloodborne and Dark Souls fans, partly Kesou fans, and the rest should be some literary and rigorous people who love various settings. This kind of subject matter is actually not easy to write online novels. If the author pursues those novel masters, the author should change the subject matter as soon as possible. After all, this kind of subject is considered a niche, but I hope the author can continue to write it.

Is the protagonist a person who didn't exist in the first place? I don't know what is put into the body of Usserys, a bit like the incarnation of Yogurt?

Author, do you know that your book has been printed and distributed? It is a big book with very small fonts and very thick text. My high school classmate tore up the book and gave it to me to read. I originally wanted to ease my mood but showed a depressing batch to me. I still remember it to this day. I really don't understand why pirates would print your book

Comrade author, I like your work very much. The world view of Dark Souls: Fire Passion + Cthulhu + Bloodborne is perfectly integrated. But your book is not just for money. According to the general formula, it has not been fun, slapped in the face, or pretentious until now. Although the foreshadowing of the explosion was laid in the early stage. Both parents died, there was a sister, and there was a big secret in the body. But generally speaking, every 20,000 words should give the protagonist an explosive conflict to improve the protagonist's character. Just like the early stage of "The Devil of the Way" written by Comrade Go Away, the whole world view is also very depressing, but through the protagonist's crushing of monsters, it comes out in a flash. Although you said in the first few chapters that the subscription was poor, you have no problem with your writing style. It's just that the plot structure is not marketable enough. I won't give you suggestions here. I can only hope that more and more people will discover your book, which is really good. Finally, sometimes it is necessary to reveal the secrets of fire and the Code of Hammurabi to let readers know that the protagonist must be awesome in the future in order to attract a large enough readership.

The "Soul of Burning Steel" next door has beaten out the Chaos God's daddy╮(╯▽╰)╭ You can't do this!

There are both middle two and literary youth, and the main plot is there. Although it revolves around the protagonist, it gives the impression that the protagonist basically relies on talent to survive, and then calls people. You clearly stated the talents of others. The protagonist... Is written in such a way that I can't understand it. It's also like the guy below who talks about regret medicine, and he seems to be able to foresee the future. Then several plots unfolded, which was a bit much. How should I put it? The writing is very good and the writing style is good (somewhat verbose), but there is no need to write it like a classic Western fantasy novel. The market for literary youth and middle-2 students is not very big, and I personally think that literary youth is a disease. For example, the protagonist is always thinking about something, and the conversation with Lolita is unfolding in various ways. This is an online novel after all, and it is best to give people the impression that the protagonist is a combination of knowledge and action, with a moderate personality and quick practicality. When I saw the chapters on the shelf, everything the protagonist did was driven by invisible forces (yes, that is you), and he was passive throughout the whole process. I want to be a strong person, and then I will get into all kinds of trouble. I didn't read the rest of it, but judging from this trajectory, I guess I'm still passive throughout. After all, the author emphasized fate, and the so-called becoming a strong man only relies on talent, or swordsmanship relies on souls that have traveled through the past, or something else. If that were the case, it would be boring. The most boring thing about the novel is that it emphasizes fate, and then always follows fate, and then, fate is fate. . . . A little superficial opinion.

As far as I personally feel, the protagonist's Glory One ability is the real version of the regret medicine!

Is the author still alive? I'm lucky enough to have read your book. I'm really excited about it.

Because the protagonist's ability involves time, the plot may be a little obscure. If you don't understand it or think it has flaws, you are welcome to discuss and complain here. (Although with the desertedness of book reviews... Looking at the sky...)

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I'm lucky enough to read it, but I don't know if the author, Da Da, is still alive. . I really want your contact information

Seeing Chapter 93, the battle lines are too dense, right? Is it like this later? 😰

After reading the first few pictures, I felt quite boring. How should I put it? There were a lot of explanations, mixed with a bunch of meaningless and gorgeous words. This way of describing it greatly hindered my ability to experience the world. Also, I was a little strange as to what the descriptive word was for blindness and stupidity. Could it be that chaos can still appear as crazy, stupid, stupid, stupid? I kept reading for a while but still didn't see any reasonable interpretation from your explanation of the words in the book.

The protagonist's ability suddenly reminded me of the effect of Wittgenstein's Eyes (Gods). As long as I don't succeed, I will commit suicide. If you can force yourself to read files, can you find the future you want?

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It's a good novel The writing is not sophisticated, but at least it is not new. The lack of popularity is probably because I read too many fast food articles. This kind of depressive feeling is relatively strong, and some slow-burning ones are unbearable. But if you read it carefully, you will feel like you are really reading a person's long story. Very good (*๓´╰╯`๓)♡

Come and have a look, I hope it's this food

Don't say anything, just one sentence, brother, do you want to spread the flames?

I want to ask... What happened between Chapter 57 and Chapter 58. . . . It's been restarted... I can't understand it. Although I can guess a little bit, it feels very vague...

Just reading the title of the book subconsciously reminded me of The Dark Apprentice and The Millennium Festival. Although I haven't read it, are you... Huanyue Canghun? The light of the end is gone

Is the author still here? Let me ask a few questions 1. This world is an electronic world, and the Witch and her gang are trapped in it and cannot get out? 2. What the High Priest and the others know is that the world has been restarted repeatedly, and there is little hope that order will last forever? 3. Whose chess piece is the male protagonist? Did someone in the real world fail to reincarnate? 4. Is there an outline of the original seven volumes? What is the ending of the sister? 5. What is the relationship between the ancestors and the witch? Which group of people did the ancestors reincarnate into? 6. Why was the Knights' line broken? . .

The Cthulhu-style text is really touching. It makes despair even more desperate. This is the price of exploring the unknown. It always feels like a dark soul passing fire, waiting for a blood source to counterattack, and entering the beautiful and peaceful Canaan.

It was painful for Patience to see Chapter 64 disappear. I suggest that the author review The Amber Sword. It is not impossible to describe the darkness at the beginning of the novel, but it is best to write about hope as soon as possible, or to make it "cool". Moreover, the writing was so obscure and annoying at the beginning. If you have time, I suggest you rewrite it, otherwise some people like me who can't stand dull novels will really not be able to survive the first part. Good luck

I just read five chapters. The first sense of déjà vu was the Great Ice Wall and the White Walkers beyond the Wall in A Song of Ice and Fire - I have been waiting for the wall to collapse for several years. The second sense of déjà vu is the Spark of Order and the Invasion of Chaos in The Amber Sword - this book is as exciting as Amber, but also equally boring. The third déjà vu is Bloodborne and The Order 1886 - these are two of my absolute loves. The fourth déjà vu is Dark Souls - it seems that apart from Chuanhuo and Xinwang, it has little to do with it. It just so happens that I don't like Dark Souls either. The fifth sense of déjà vu is that there are many such novels - the themes are generally similar, but the differences lie in the writing style, the rhythm of the plot, and the control of the readers' mentality. Let me express my opinion based on the five chapters I read. The first chapter is very good, I am almost full of praises. The atmosphere and picture are strong, the background story is capable and not procrastinating, the characters are powerful and clear, and the sentence "Ulysses" that introduces the protagonist's surname and life experience is simply wonderful! And it doesn't have the usual stinky, annoyingly long bunch of names of people and places. It's a textbook example of success. This is one of the best openings I've seen this year. The second chapter is much more procrastinating. It seems like a lot of words have been said. In fact, the reader has not gotten any information and knows that the protagonist seems to be very good. However, this comparison is very low to the reader and ridiculous to the villain, so the pretense becomes S-level. It also vaguely revealed the cliché setting of the mystery of the parents, so that you know the ending when you see the beginning. Chapter 3 talks about a lot of settings, and even prophecies, something that was out of date ten years ago - if you are a writer of Rosen's era, this is a wonderful highlight, but how many old gunners now care about the opening words of Black Wing Arrivals? Readers don't want to read this. The shaking setting should appear in a puzzle-solving manner when the reader is getting better and curious about the truth of the matter, rather than cramming in the beginning when the reader is still confused. Chapter 4 There are too many words to describe the old man, and why do they have to be repeated, and why are they different every time they are repeated? Readers have no idea how great and thoughtful he is. In the eyes of readers, he is just a bad old man, and it is not worth wasting so many words. In addition, the concept of a big sword-wielding person is inexplicable here. Even the sword-wielding person is not explained clearly, which only makes people more confused. Chapter 5 This one is pretty good. The narrator starts talking. This is when the setting should be changed, but the meaningfulness should be felt by the readers themselves, rather than you telling the readers: "Hey, you should be meaningful at this time!" Other than that, this chapter is pretty good, above the standard! In general, there are two main problems. The first and most important thing is not to talk about the setting anymore, let the protagonist move, not think, no narration, but time, place and characters, the cause, process and result, and it should be grounded and exciting instead of the sentimentality and sadness in the protagonist's mind. The second, less important, is that the dialogue between the characters is too dramatic, almost like reciting lines. Normally, no one would speak like that, no one would use so many particles and adjectives, and no one would be like an opera singer who has to desperately express his "character attributes" in every sentence.

Personal opinion: There are too many embellishments in the text. The language is indeed quite gorgeous, but it is easy for people to not distinguish the importance of each part of a chapter. Some parts of the content may be easier to understand if they are simply described. In addition, Internet readers read very quickly but not carefully. Excessive modification will cause readers who read at a glance (a derogatory meaning here) to miss a lot of information, resulting in insufficient reading and insufficient understanding of the Fire Team plot. Of course, I also like to use rhetoric when I write essays, and I have been criticized several times by my classmates. 🤫

The chapters are okay. I quite like the worldview constructed by the author, but the most revealed content in the chapter about the old traveler ascending to heaven makes me worry that the story structure will collapse. For example, this world is just a collapsed plot within someone's delusion. That would be very disappointing in Hanoi style.

So confused. . Are Chapters 55 to 57 a parallel world, just to show off a glimpse of the protagonist's abilities? Is 58 after 54 the correct timeline? Could it be that the reason why Mia didn't die was because the protagonist said something about releasing the restraints? It's painful, don't you have any tips_(:з∠)_

Personal references always feel too weird... It's fine to just use "he", "she" or names directly. In some paragraphs, "Glory One" and "Sword Bearer" are always used as pronouns, which always feels a bit weird. Some of the battle plots seem to be very high-level, but they are a bit vague... Maybe it would be better to be more straightforward. Anyway, it's really well written. Come on, author ヽ(≧Д≦)ノ I tried to recommend it on Longkong, I hope it can be of some help.