Harry Potter: Book of Sins

I'm really tired after seeing Chapter 1200. Let me tell you something bad. The supporting characters are disgusting. They are obviously not capable enough and they have to improve in various ways. It's like unlimited gifts for rookies in the game. Can't you level up first? I always feel that the next second the villain will arrest these rookies and threaten the protagonist There are often many chapters where the protagonist just says one or two words and then disappears. They are all about supporting characters, and the plot is too weak The villain has all kinds of clues and plans, and the protagonist looks like he is well prepared for victory. In fact, he has done nothing, and what he has done is of no use. He is still very calm after being plotted against. In the end, I have to lament that the villain is too powerful and the protagonist is helpless All kinds of digging holes, dozens of chapters and hundreds of chapters are not filled in, the main plot The plot unfolds too slowly, just like a river, flowing all the way to its tributaries. A large number of main plots are mentioned in one stroke, such as how to get the gold cup, just one or two sentences in the memory are perfunctory The emotional line is too complicated, the author's control of emotions is really better than not writing, and it feels like the description of Luna is getting wider and wider than the original image, and there is a sense of overexertion. A strong feeling The protagonist has less and less ability to grow, and I don't know if his strength has improved. The feeling of gaining strength for farming is gone forever after Lao Deng's death. At most, before the fight, he starts to recall and explain what the protagonist has seen and knows, so he is a little bit better, commonly known as cleverness

The original work of Harry Potter only has 5.14 Million words in total. I won't go into details. You can complain about the rest by yourself~(￣▽￣~)~

I saw many book friends talking about poison, but I actually think the author really wrote it very well. Such a grand world view and rigorous plot cannot be written without good writing skills. The constantly intertwined strategic chess game, which lasts for thousands of years; the logical paradoxes of several time resurgences, involving the past and the future; the contrast between ancient and modern magic; and the detailed characterization of each character. . . However, the author should reorganize the emotional line and support Luna shares. It's not easy for the author to write more than 2,000 chapters, and everyone is being criticized again and again. . . The important thing is to say again, the time turner (the protagonist crosses time multiple times) is really awesome, with detailed foreshadowing and the final enlightenment! ! ! Come on, Ollie!

I have read Chapter 800 from 270. I have some new ideas, so I will briefly update it. To be honest, after reading the time travel part, I was impressed by the reasonable and tight story structure and the unexpected and wonderful plot twists. At the same time, I also applauded the author for advancing the plot through time and space twists and turns. After that, the story turns to daily life. Whether it is the warmth and joy in the ordinary, or the approaching shadows in the tranquility, the whole story becomes fuller, and it really brings the readers into a new magical world that is far away from the original work. Perhaps from the perspective of fan works, this book is indeed drifting away from the world of the original work; perhaps it can be regarded as a new "Maka Biography" born out of the HP world? White jade has flaws. In a previous book review, I thought that this book's "language has declined towards mass-produced online writing." The most uncomfortable thing for me is the author's habitual sentence patterns: "What is he (so-and-so) like" and "The identity of (so-and-so)...". In my concept, this kind of sentence pattern that deliberately uses (personal) pronouns is to express emphasis or specific emotions (such as self-deprecation), but the author repeatedly uses this sentence pattern in many neutral or descriptive contexts (I have not listed them all due to time constraints, but there are definitely quite a few), which I have to say is particularly surprising. From another perspective, this is also related to the unity of language. In this book, in order to respect the original work, the relevant plots mostly use the tone of the translated product; after the transition to the original plot, because the plot itself has moved towards a traditional Internet novel, many half-literary and half-white expressions similar to "How prominent the Malfoy family are" are used (this can be considered a classic sentence pattern of a large number of Internet articles). These two language styles with completely different connotations appear repeatedly and irregularly in the text, which destroys the smoothness and coherence of the reading experience. In my opinion, it is unnecessary. In the process of reading the first 800 chapters, every time I had to pause, except for sleeping, it was mostly because of such abrupt sentence patterns or language style switches. Looking forward to the climax that is coming soon. ----- Original book review (first 270 chapters) ----- After reading the first 270 chapters, I felt that the first 150-200 chapters were amazing. Both the plot design and the writing style found a new way while inheriting the original charm of HP. The characters not only fit the original work but also were explored. However, after the 200th chapter, the writing style suddenly changed, and the plot and language plummeted towards the "pretend to be a pig and eat the tiger" Internet writing routine of 10 years ago. I don't know if it's because of the change from the original plot to the original plot, but this transition always feels sorry for the "tiger head" mentioned earlier. I'm currently reading Chapter 270, and I don't know if there will be any adjustments.

Lots of highlights. What's a pity is that like most HP fans in Qidian, HP and even the Iron Triangle have been distorted in order to compete for HP. From the perspective of HP fans, this is very sad. In fact, the author has found his own main line, and it is a very outstanding main line. There is no need to overlap too much with the HP line on the main line to bring down the original character. Just write it in parallel.

I hope the author will persevere and write real masterpieces

Seriously. . . What I wrote before is really good. . . But, but, but. . . The emotional line issue is really a huge failure. . . Especially when I found that there was still no progress in the later chapters, the protagonist just dragged on. . . Well. . . Never mind. . .

Author, I have been following you since you wrote hundreds of thousands of words, but the plot is too long and I really can't follow you 😒 But I really admire the author's perseverance. It's not easy to write until now. I hope you can continue. I don't have much money, so I can only reward you a lot. It's not enough to make up for the author's efforts, but it's all a little thoughtful 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍

Very suitable for passing time, the content is quite innovative. Except for a few chapters, the other chapters are quite enjoyable.

I have read 1,000 chapters in ten breaths, and I have only read a few Harry novels. This book expands the world view of the original plot through non-main characters in the original work and a few words from myths and legends. From the hints left by Ravenclaw to the real reason for Slytherin's escape, all the foreshadowings are laid, turning the world view of fighting only one big devil, Voldemort, into fighting more big devils. From the perspective of the plot progress, it is not a problem to serialize to 2000 chapters, but from the perspective of emotional progress, it is not a problem to serialize to 3000 chapters. However, this is mainly due to the author's "inaction" in describing the relationship. The relationship progress is slow. It seems to be a natural progression and then blocked. The subtle relationship between the male protagonist and the two female protagonists has led to this situation. Overall, this is a fan fiction that I personally feel is good.

This book is a rare masterpiece of HP fan fiction. I'm afraid it's impossible to say it's the best, after all, everyone has their own favorite genre. But as for me, who has caught up to chapter 700, I am already worrying about the days of waiting for the update after finishing the game. My original intention of reading HP fanfiction is because the original work left too many regrets. Let every beautiful or kind soul in the HP world have a better ending. I believe everyone who has read the original book or movie will have this idea. And this book fulfills my wish. Whether it is the protagonists like the Gryffindor trio and Dumbledore, or the supporting characters like Snape and Hagrid, or even the minor characters mentioned briefly in the original work, they all have a better life of their own. If you have ever experienced the indescribable complex emotions that linger in your heart after closing the Deathly Hallows, then this book will satisfy you. The author's writing style is impeccable, the plot is compact, major events are almost one after another, and leisurely daily life is interspersed in the middle. Sometimes it is simply impossible to stop. But what I like most is not the grandeur of the main plot, nor the extension of the HP world, but the many small details. While reading, I would sometimes giggle because of a very magical joke (I was scolded by my roommate, "Anyone who is always holding a cell phone and giggling is either a wretched man or a fat nerd!" I can't bear this blame.) Sometimes, because of the author's ingenious and immersive narration, I would be involved in the mood of the protagonist or other people, making people feel emotional. And there is another point, while reading this book, I will also think about it. I even think that in some plots, the author used the plot and the protagonist's words to write part of his feelings about life into this book. There are definitely flaws, but they cannot hide the flaws. Some flaws cannot prevent it from becoming an absolute masterpiece for HP fans. Maybe this book is just a fan derivative work, a niche reading. But let me say, it is definitely suitable for you to be patient, read slowly, and immerse yourself in the different HP world presented to us by the author.

The author should note that Merlin lived more than two thousand years ago, and Hogwarts was founded by the four wizards more than a thousand years ago, so Merlin could not have gone to school there. The author's creativity and writing style are still very good, I hope you will continue to work hard!

After reading more than 200 chapters, can anyone tell me how the emotional line develops later on. . . The emotional line of this book is simply poisonous in just these two hundred chapters. . . The single female protagonist is not like the single female protagonist, the harem is not like the harem, nor is it like the Shura field, the whole thing is different. The author decided that Luna is the heroine, which I don't think is a problem, but! Since you recognize Luna as the heroine, please don't write about the emotional lines of Hermione and Vitti, especially Hermione. You have been hanging on this emotional line for two hundred chapters. On the contrary, in these two hundred chapters, Hermione's psychological activities are described a lot. As the designated heroine, Luna is just like the background every day. There is no psychological activity and no large amount of description. The interaction with the male protagonist is to be around the male protagonist every day. . . There is almost no detailed National Day interaction. The characters are very dull. . . In addition to the emotional line, the plot line lacks a lot of description when the male protagonist is making his so-called plan. As a result, I often look at it without knowing what the male protagonist is doing. . . The perspective is often on others. Today we can't find the male lead, tomorrow we can't find the male lead, this month we can't find the male lead again. . . Even the reader doesn't know what the protagonist is up to. 😅

1. The protagonist likes Luna, and Hermione has an unrequited love 2. The style of this book is dark and depressing 3. It complements the world view of the original work very well 4. The supporting characters in this book are quite brilliant, depicting people's personality changes and growth after a series of things Personally, I like the protagonist's character very much. The only thing that makes me uncomfortable is that I prefer to endure suffering and any uncertainty by myself. As a bystander, I am always anxious and worried for the protagonist, especially I feel sorry for the protagonist's strength. If this story is true, I especially hope that the protagonist can live a happy and quiet life, free from these sufferings. After Lao Deng left, Maka was really tired. It seemed that she didn't sleep well a few times, but she always showed her confidence in front of others and kept forcing herself to grow. She didn't care about the damage caused to her soul by using the time and space converter many times. I can't accurately describe Maka's tiredness, but I always feel heartbroken when I look at his hard work in the book

Throughout this book, I feel unworthy of Hermione! Personal sense: Of the three girls, Hermione is the only one who is worried about the protagonist and wants to share some of the work with the protagonist! But what about the other two girls? Although the two characters are entertaining themselves and have no other ideas, the protagonist intentionally does not want them to know about the battle related to Voldemort. This is a fact! In this case, you clearly know that Hermione likes you, but you just look at this situation without any explanation of good or bad! This is a failure, both for the protagonist and the author! For the protagonist, I hope the heroine beside him will be like Hermione! But for excellent works, looking at the current situation, I will also say sadly: Either Hermione looks away and gives up, or the protagonist needs to show me a little bit, Because as mentioned before, the protagonist's senses are quite good and he has a favorable impression of Hermione. But later they became very ordinary friends, not even as good as that Willy!

Why not write an ending to the emotional line? In the original timeline, Hermione and Luna will never meet the protagonist again In the new timeline, the protagonist is an aborigine and no longer a time traveler. In other words, the entire emotional line has almost been reshuffled! In other words, this is an emotional line without an ending,

The writing is pretty good, and the description of the environment is particularly good. It's just that a lot of the plot is very baffling. After seeing about three hundred chapters, there are many poisonous points: 1. Adopting werewolf sisters, a pair of sisters who cannibalize human flesh. Can't accept it. 2. Dumbledore's death was inexplicable. Even if he was pursuing a higher realm, he shouldn't have died at that time. At least the protagonist didn't have to worry about Hogwarts. It also destroyed the military morale that had been stable during the previous live broadcast. It felt like it was forcibly following the plot of the original work. 3. The protagonist releases the prisoners of Azkaban to help the enemy. Knowing that no one under Voldemort could use him anymore, he forcibly sent Little Brother Bo away. After doing this, when he met an Auror again, he was still fine. If that crazy Moody doesn't catch him, will Voldemort believe the protagonist? It's also a stupid thing to forcefully follow the plot of the original work. 4, Willie. Such a big thing happened to Willy, and the protagonist rushed back from the future. Didn't the diary given to the protagonist contain any content? The logic of the plot before and after is wrong.

I think this novel is generally well written. I think the author's completion of the world view is very reasonable. I was a little confused in the second half, but after the ending, I suddenly realized it. Wen Feng tended to be dark and depressive in his later period, which is my favorite type (you ask what made me become like this? Of course it's Jiangnan's old thief Qi Bai Qi!). It's just that the protagonist was wavering emotionally in the early stage, and then was delayed due to various things in the later stage. As a result, in the end, we didn't even know who the heroine was? For many people, this may be a poisonous point, but I think this only enhances the authenticity of the story. After all, the protagonist is just an ordinary person! A coward - he said so himself. Overall, I enjoyed this novel.

Let's put it this way, this book I read in my freshman year of high school is almost over. When can you finish it?

There are too many poisonous points. Before the first grade was completed, because of my good relationship with Snape, I prepared a Fuling potion and gave it to him. Let's not talk about whether you are worthy of it or not. Where did you get the materials? A Muggle-born student can earn up to 100 gold per year, which is simply unaffordable, not to mention that many materials are controlled. And gave Harry a copy of Occlumency? ? ? ? ? This is a banned book. You can't borrow it without a note. Where did you get the book? And then first grade develops a new potion? Also, don't call people senior and underclassmen at Hogwarts, okay?

It was okay in the beginning, but it started to falter after Chapter 200, especially when Hermione danced with Krum even after she had confirmed that she had a crush on the protagonist, which really depressed me. Then I started reading Turtle. It has more than 2,000 chapters. In the end, I haven't confirmed my relationship yet. Why are you torturing Hermione like this?

This book is about the protagonist playing a cool trick, which resulted in the novice-level copy being upgraded to hell level, and the village-level terrorist becoming a world-level terrorist.

Let me remind new book friends that the protagonist will lose his feelings around chapter sixty or seventy, and it is said that he does not recover until chapter 196. And it is said that he has lost his feelings, but it seems that he has lost his IQ and become a fool. In my opinion, the viewing experience plummeted. So, let's see if you can withstand this wave.

Someone told me in the later chapters whether it was Hermione or Luna. . . If it's Luna, I'll give up the book because I can't bear it

There are already children next door, family development, promotion of family members, education reform, Brexit and the British wizarding world... There are so many chapters here that your relationship is not confirmed? Some people say that the owner will be abused later? Is the boss at the back a Cthulhu type? I saw that the female companion at the ball was Professor McGonagall, and I was a little afraid to continue watching...

Luna is a terrible heroine. She is my least favorite heroine so far. . .

These people have such big hearts (laughs) This is a world of good looks, as long as you're cute it's no problem (laughs But has anyone thought about it? Let's not talk about the werewolf identity that may be racially discriminatory. Before they were taken in by Maka, they were villains with subjective intentions and clearly committed [murder and cannibalism]. This is not the cliché of those female characters in graphic novels who do bad things and are taken away by the protagonist. All of them have "extenuating circumstances (laughs)" and are either deceived or naive and don't understand anything. I haven't named any specific characters. As long as you think about it carefully, you will always think of these typical characters in the things you have seen. Ahem... Far away. Speaking of the werewolf sisters, from a human standpoint or from a legal perspective, do they deserve death? Kill human beings and eat human corpses, don't judge the victims! Don't criticize the victim! ! Regardless of whether the victims had bad intentions towards the murderer, in terms of results and motives, the werewolf sisters committed a crime. As long as we live in a world dominated by humans, no matter what, we cannot avoid their crimes. And then~~ But now their friends and "mother" accept them. I really don't think that sister will be so strict that she won't tell the bad things she did in the past. And what did the people next to me do when they found out? Those who are friends are friends, and those who are mothers are mothers. Everyone is harmonious and happy. So great (great reading) So these people are as big-hearted as his grandmother! ! Professor Lupine, an innocent and good man, suffered so much because of his status as a "werewolf", but in the end, nothing happened to two murderous and cannibalistic sisters! ! I think it's impossible to keep secrets. Think about it. Where are they now? The Order of the Phoenix, an underground association engaged in anti-terrorism. Would such an organization not investigate the identity and background of the insider? Of course it will. Result (show hands) That's it~ Because the big shot above (@马卡) said he wanted to protect them, they were saved. The disgust and fear towards criminals, aliens, and cannibals that they should have... Didn't show it at all. What a united and loving underground organization (Applause, how could it not accomplish something great with such a style! If we tell the story about the wonderful treatment the werewolf sisters received here, many "good people" who live on the dark side will be moved to tears and want to join this big family to be loyal to their families~~ Then the noseless one can no longer absorb any "bad elements", because everyone has joined the Order of the Phoenix family. Happy end, sprinkle flowers ps. If you are not a female, not good-looking, have no boss or a sponsor, would I tell you that someone who came into contact with the Order of the Phoenix was "purged" as soon as they said they wanted to join (laughing)

How did you manage to only use more than forty chapters, and push it to the third part before the main text has even reached the plot? What are there more than two thousand chapters to write about 😵

Let me tell you the ending. At the beginning of the chapter "Sands of Time", Maka said that she has two souls, which should be the protagonist, the time traveler Maka, and the aboriginal Maka who has been hiding. Based on the analysis of the words before being beheaded, in this story line of the book, the demon who was beheaded is the soul A of the protagonist Maka from other times. He will be hacked to death in this timeline. The one who will be revived in the original body in the future will be the aboriginal Maka. He is no longer the same person as the protagonist of this book, so he will say "Although it is not me." The protagonist Maka in the story line of this book, the one who came out of the ice coffin, let's call it Maka b, is the soul of Maka who entered the turbulence of time with the witch Kern. It is also the protagonist we saw in the last chapter who went to the past timeline. Due to the balance of time, He stopped "rejuvenating", so his body ended up being shorter than his past timeline self and he forgot his name and identity. Finally, because the photo had the pseudonym "Mello" from when he was rescued, he finally became the owner of "Mello's Treasure House" and sold things to his past timeline self. Finally, to summarize, two timelines and three protagonists appear in the last three chapters, which are the timeline in which the story of this book takes place and the past timeline in which Luna's mother is not dead. The story line of this book ends in the chapter "Sands of Time". The demon Maka A from other timelines was beheaded and died, while the protagonist Maka B traveled to the past line and finally became "Mello", and met his own Maka C in the past line.

Before reading this book, I never thought that the world of Harry Potter could be so depressing. It's a good book, but it's not recommended for those who can't accept the depressive style and hidden sadism.