The Interstellar Age's First Debt Repayment Diary [Mecha]

The male protagonist's early behavior was unpleasant! Fortunately, there is no emotional drama! ! Everything else is pretty good!

I've finished chasing it, it's quite interesting, but unfortunately there are a lot of typos that I have to guess. I also feel that there are many characters that I thought would have story lines, but I didn't expect them all. Author, keep up the good work

The ending is very rushed and the plot seems very bland.

The pacing was a bit off, and the ending was rushed. I skipped through a few chapters. I didn't see much of the emotional drama of the protagonist, but I felt the emotional drama of the supporting characters. There were also many scenes that were forced to happen for the sake of the plot. I won't go into them one by one. Is it because the outline was not done well, or did I get tired of writing at the end and just end it? I understand. Generally speaking, the writing is good and it is very interesting. You can read it when you are bored, just don't use your brain.

? Ah? Then what? Where did everyone go after that? The Zerg won't be killed either? The master didn't explain anything at the end? Is this the end? Ah? Cheating your feelings, huh? I thought it was all foreshadowing, but you told me it was all a trap? Is that too much? If this is not bad, what is bad?

A little advice! 1. The plot is more logical (the heroine's explanation to the master about what the federation has done is forcing a happy reunion, completely ignoring the master's feelings) 2. Establish the character by describing actions and expressions instead of using a lot of other people's psychological activities (I feel so embarrassed every time I see other people slandering Zhao Yunming. A little of this kind of slander is enough, but too much will be weird) 5. It's still a matter of personality. The personality should be consistent and not change all the time. This refers specifically to Principal Long. To be honest, I don't know what kind of positive image Principal Long is now (I feel like the author may want to write that Principal Long is inactive and seems to care about nothing, but still cares about the students. But only one of them asks the Seventh Army to save people. Emm... How about normal times?). On the contrary, the other two leading teachers have more distinctive and likable personalities. The other is a doctor. What kind of doctor can give a heroine a medical device without telling the federation but can't detect inhibitors? Such a doctor doesn't know the federation's research on mental shielding? Why don't you try to find out the truth when something happens to your friend? It feels like the doctor is just an injection tool, completely outside the plot. There is also the master, such an amazing and talented person, he should be very proud even if something happens. I can't see such a person thinking that he is taking advantage when the junior books a hotel for him, so I hate the heroine even more to forgive the master for the federation as if nothing happened. 4. When writing a game, you can practice it on paper in advance (the last few games are too childish and look like primary school students fighting) Come on! Hope my humble opinion helps you.

? ? ? ? ? I thought the incident was over, but I didn't expect that the whole story was over? ? ? Ah? ? ?

It's a bit unfinished. At the 100th chapter, it felt like the story had just begun, but it ended all at once...

? ? ? ? Where are the insects? ? No more killing? ?

Ahem, I don't like older men. So, I am very satisfied with the handling of this emotional line. I am very satisfied and can ignore it. I really don't want to see the emotional line between the two of them. Thank you, madam. Thank you for handling the line very well. It's just that the ending was too hasty. I thought I could see the development of the stars.