Spring Mountain Lost in the Clouds

Many comments pointed out problems with the article. The emotional scenes are really well written, and the descriptions are very graphic and make people sympathize. The biggest problem with the novel is the plot. A lot of it is not explained clearly, and there is almost no mention of it in one or two strokes, and there are no side effects. It seems that the whole world is what the protagonist needs, so other people/things appear/happen suddenly, and the supporting characters are very tool-like. For example, Luo, initially wrote this to introduce Mrs. Huan Ping and her tiger, and then the protagonist investigated the tiger, but what role does this incident play? The first is to warm up the protagonist's emotions, and the second is to highlight Liang's curious and bold character and emphasize some of Jiang's previous characteristics. But the reader feels the same after reading it, because none of it is very obvious, there is a little bit but not much. This incident seems to have happened like this. We don't know anything about Huan Ping, we only know that she left the capital. This creates a very inexplicable event that adds very little to the plot and emotion. This is just one example. Several of the supporting characters and stories written by the author are dispensable and inexplicable, so they look confusing because the readers don't know what this supporting character does or why this event happened. There is another problem, which someone also pointed out in the comment area. All the story developments are only mentioned a little bit, and then it falls apart. For example, why did the emperor like Liang so much and even indulged him? Why is Liang anorexic? Normally, it's just picky eating and irregular meals, far from being unable to eat. Why is he like this? What was the incident between Xi and his wife in his previous life? How did they end? As a young man from a rich family, why are Xiaogu being ridiculed around him? Is he having nothing to do, is he stupid, or is he interested? Etc., These issues are not explained clearly, there is almost no logic and story to be explored, the author just wrote this. Finally, there are errors in the application of some words by the author, and the original meaning of some words is relatively ambiguous and should not be used. For example, after the death of Liang in the previous life, Jiang and Wang got acquainted and used the idiom "a match made in heaven." Therefore, the world would not use this idiom for Jiang and Wang, even if it later came to mean a naturally formed partner. I understand that the author may want to write about the plot that Jiang and Wang got acquainted and then Jiang thought about the deceased Liang and was in pain so he could not accept any new emotions. After reading the description of Wang, he did not seem to have any thoughts about Jiang other than friendship. So when using such ambiguous words, it is best to check the meaning first. It is really easy to cause misunderstandings. If the reader is reading well and suddenly says that there is a match made in heaven, won't the reader be shocked? This is like a quick blind date right after the death of your wife. In short, this emotional book is far more beautiful than the plot. The description of emotions is very easy to empathize with. It will be better to practice the plot again. I would rather exchange two meaningless events for one meaningful event.

At the end, I found out that my wife didn't tell me the Jiang family's life card. Jiang Shuzhi must have carved Liang Youjin's name religiously many times.

When I was a child, I wanted to be a horse for my wife, but when I grew up, I forgot about my wife and fell in love with someone else??

The writing of this book is really good, but it feels like a fishbone stuck in the book. There are too many regrets, especially this life card. It feels really uncomfortable for the reader. Can't you just throw it away and burn it? Or seal it up to commemorate your former love. Moreover, Gong describes Bai Yueguang's feelings too much. No matter how sweet he is later, he always subconsciously thinks that being good to Gong does not mean he is in love with Shou. He will also love Bai Yueguang like this when he loves her.

Watch it again, it's not a wasted life if you are your wife's dog

I like this book very much. I read it every time when I am in a book shortage. I have read it several times.

I feel like the latter part and the earlier part are more like two stories. The relationship between the characters is a bit messy. I also feel that there are some problems with Liang's character. There is no explanation as to why he became the way he was in the previous part. Moreover, it is also somewhat inconsistent with his later character design. There are also some minor supporting characters' characters and their relationships with each other. I thought it was a bit confusing at first. How could a book boy (?) Be so arrogant? Although there is no identity in the academy, under the background of ancient imperial power, it is impossible for them to be neither big nor small. This is where I feel most inconsistent. The other questions are too trivial. Generally speaking, you can just take a look at them without thinking.

I feel like it was written too hastily later. It would be fuller if I added a complete story line, and the emotional line is particularly delicate... Teacher, please update the text TT

It's well written. Although the plot has a lot of bugs and a lot of things that haven't been explained clearly, the character design and emotional lines of Gong Shou are really great!

A year later, I will write more of this kind of good article. I will write a series. Lu Kuan can write another one.