Senior Brother Is a High-Risk Occupation Too

After reading it in one go, there are only four words: It was written in a hurry. There are some areas that can be expanded upon, such as emotional scenes and the like that are a little more delicate and can be written in a few chapters. Hey () Flaws are still the "Two Hundred Years" problem that I want to complain about the most. What I thought at first was: After the Battle of Wuli Mountain, Xie Changqing took Zhou Yan to the Tongguang Sect in body. At this time, a so-called "chief disciple" who has been in seclusion for two hundred years has been arranged, just waiting for Zhou Yan to pass the test and directly take over the fake identity. Later it was discovered that this was not the case. The soul of the senior sister had actually been waiting on the mountain for two hundred years. If this is the case, it is equivalent to the day when the master and the disciple arrived at the sect, and their bodies were put away for two hundred years to wait for the completed soul to enter the body, and the story line of this book begins. But if this was the case, it would be impossible for the waiter whom Zhou Yanchen met when he first came here to see them and still say they looked familiar... It has been two hundred years and all mortals must be dead. . Also, after they went up the mountain, there was an extra senior sister. The senior sister kept saying things like "You are all my junior brothers" and "I have seen Shen Wan before." Let's call it two hundred years later. The God of Heaven fell into reincarnation two hundred years ago, and Shen Huan, who was born in this life, was brutally wiped out, and he is only twenty-six or seven now. I heard that I was Junior Brother Zhou Yan two hundred years ago. Are you a little surprised... Also, although, how could Zhou Yan be able to conclude that "you are the ancient god" after hearing that the divine bones protect Shen Wu... SOS, I haven't seen you show much wisdom in seeing through the traps of modern people. Now, although it is reasonable to directly guess like this, it is too bold. The image of the master was almost boring in the early stage. It would have been better if he could have given him some warmth in the early stage and made Zhou Yan think, "Although my soul from another world has replaced someone else's body, I am still moved by the master's concern for his apprentice." Say something like "No matter what, I am your master, and I will do my best to protect you." If you reveal your identity later, everyone will say "Master is so kind." Anyway, I was really moved after watching Wuli Mountain. This master is like a master, a father, a master, and a father. Who wouldn't want this? In the early stage, my impression of the master was that he was "infinitely doting on Liu Sanmian" and "the eldest disciple arranged in his mind that he would be a perfect match for his little disciple." I feel like Zongmen doesn't write enough. I still don't quite understand how this sect is like a contemporary society where everyone does their own thing and everyone's status is not much different. What is the identity of the chief Zhou Yan? At first, I thought he was the next chief. The peach blossom branch is so handsome. But it was really demeaning for him to dare to provoke a common man from the Criminal Law Hall, and when he said, "Elder brother and I are Taoist companions," others really looked at Zhou Yan with strange eyes, uh, can such a rumor be spread? Later, I wondered if I should inherit Evergreen Peak... What kind of existence is the peak of this sect. There are forty-nine peaks at the inner gate. And it seems that the top position of the inner gate is also different. For example, when someone from Qingliang Peak bullied Spirit Beast Peak, the latter's peak leader did not dare to say anything due to the pressure from Qingliang Peak's leader, Zhao Wang. . Doesn't the leader care about this?? Moreover, the fact that the chief disciple can occupy a peak can certainly be explained by his superior status, but I think I understand the peak as a "small unit divided into sect techniques." For example, the Spirit Beast Peak raises a pet Qingliang Peak to use sword skills, and the Evergreen Peak is from Xie Changqing's lineage. So is the chief disciple's exclusive use of a peak equivalent to establishing his own school? Or this peak is where the next leader will live. . In short, it's still because the sect didn't introduce enough. In my opinion, it seems like a large tribe with no cohesion. It seems that everyone is doing their own thing and living a good life. I don't know what the leader should do, and there is no possibility that the whole sect can work together to resist foreign enemies. Also, uh, the story of the small unit is not bad, I can't say it is particularly good, but the core is not bad. The main thing is that it's too hasty. Even if it is slightly expanded, it will not be like this. For example, how the wife of the demon cultivator (someone who practices spiritual medicine, Qingzhou, Manyinghua) became famous in the Thirteen Continents, and how the head of Tongguang Sect admired her. Writing it out and then echoing her, wouldn't it be fascinating, wouldn't it be there, wouldn't it be such a sense of completion. Zhou Yan is miserable, Chen Wan is miserable, Sister Rabbit is miserable, Brother Rabbit is miserable, Senior Sister is miserable, Jiang Huai is miserable (but he can't see his Senior Sister for two hundred years, what happened when Zhou Yan and Chen Huan came later, why there was no surprise at all and tears like "It turns out she is still here, it turns out she hasn't been reincarnated yet", I thought he could always see Senior Sister...) Yunwu gets annoyed just looking at him, there must be something wrong with him, Yunshan gets annoyed just looking at him, maybe there is something wrong with him. These two things are too difficult to explain in one word. Die too easily... And what exactly is the way of heaven. . The protagonist really ascended as soon as he said he could ascend, and there was no mention of their cultivation level in the previous article. . When I saw Senior Sister Jiang Huailuo in the extra story (I forgot which Luo he was reporting to) saying that he "will be the golden elixir when he leaves seclusion", I realized that this setting is also about Qi training and foundation elixir Yuan Ying... You can go to heaven by being struck by thunder. Is the way of heaven equivalent to the fairy world? It is too filthy... What is the status of the ancient gods? Are they stronger? The innate gods crush the acquired immortals, so why do they "kill immortals to gain the status of gods (I don't see anyone having titles)". Shen Wan went through endless reincarnations, but at the end I realized that love can only be overcome by losing the person you love. . Good guy, what I should mention is that the sentence "mei" made me think of SOS. Above. This is not a writing guide, just some thoughts and questions. I am not scolding or criticizing anyone. I respect the author very much and look forward to a better next book. Here are some complaints about Shit Yunwu: I can't stand it anymore. Except for Wuli Mountain, I didn't enjoy it at all. I'm so angry that Zhou Yan, the purest form of weathering in the world, let this disgusting thing fool me. It's disgusting to be turned into a humanoid weapon. He was confused and confused, but he couldn't afford to be defeated like this whenever there was a turning point. Relatives, friends, and lovers in Wulu Mountain have been living a good life for more than ten years, but they have not had enough bad things to do again. Who cares about you fighting for power and profit? Can't you use such vicious thoughts on your own brother... I'm really convinced that I can't help but say "Ayan, I like you", that's it, I can't beat you with my brothers, you're a disgusting person. I'm so angry. Why can't they stay in Wuli Mountain forever?

I still have a sequel I haven't ordered yet, but I read the ending first. I was recommended by others. I think the plot is very good, that is, everyone has his own personality and characteristics. I thought it was a systematic article at first, and the length is really not long, so I just read it. In fact, the whole article has a sour and sweet tone, and everyone in the article is going around in circles. When we meet again, Yun and his wife are selfish and sad, but our master and disciple are warm. Anyway, after reading this article, I feel that it is really good. At least it makes me feel that the current character design is really good. Xiao Zhou just has a kind of woozy feeling (my own opinion), and I saw my wife saying that she is a newbie and cheering, but I think it is really good. Come on, Mrs.

The ending is full of flowers. Although it's he, I'm still a little bit upset. I haven't come across any article in a long time that can make me cry so truly.

Congratulations on the completion! The ordinary and warm daily life and the natural feelings are all very good. Senior brother, he has experienced a lot of malice, but he was lucky to meet his master, senior sister, Shen Wang who was willing to dig out his bones, and one or two friends. The spirit transformed by the breeze between heaven and earth is unique and nurtured by the glaciers of heaven and earth. The whole person is clean and beautiful. As a result, these gods looked down upon him. In my opinion, these gods were not as clean as Zhou Yan. I hope that Master, Liu Sanmian, Senior Sister and the demon-killing disciple will all be fine. They are all so gentle and deserve the most sincere affection.

In fact, I think the master's emotional line would be less abrupt when everything is over, but it just deviates a bit from the character.

I finished reading it at three in the morning, and now I am in a trance state... I thought about it and decided to write down my thoughts on this book ( ´▽` ) When I first read the text, I thought it was just a story about someone traveling through a book and becoming a villain, but it didn't match the original plot and was noticed by a junior brother and fell in love with him. I thought it was another cookie-cutter story (although that's what I thought before I clicked on it. I'm a local dog hh.) I think the beginning of this book is quite good and quite attractive. Anyway, it attracted me. When Shen Wan first appeared on the stage, I thought he would be the kind of sullen and arrogant bking () and then paired with the ignorant and innocent senior brother Zhou Yan. I didn't expect the attack to be a bit boring, but it's still pretty good. The most handsome one at the beginning is when Zhou Yan slaps someone with a peach blossom branch. It's so cool that it makes me want to slap someone like that too (bs. There are a few points in this book that I don't understand. 1. Was it mentioned later that the system was a demon set by Yunwu for Xiao Yan, but it had the language of modern people?? For example, the original novel also has the concept of attack and suffering (?. But I just read the comments, and it seems that someone has the same doubts as me, so it makes sense a little bit (I suggest you write down such an important thing!) But I still don't understand it, no Does it mean that the inner demon is controlled by the person who possessed it? The inner demon followed Xiao Yan to modern times and had modern memories, but the inner demon should still be controlled and guided by Yun Wu. I know that this is a bit strange just reading the article. 2. At the beginning, when Xiao Yan didn't know his past story and still believed what the system said and thought he was a villain, were some of his behaviors a bit too kind? ) For example, knowing that Shen Juan was being bullied, he immediately went to find someone to cause trouble, without changing his body shape to show off his identity or taking on the identity of the master. Afterwards, he did not block the news from Shen Juan, for fear that his husband would not know that she had stood up for him, right? 🐶🌹 3. The emotional writing in this book is a bit light, which makes it a bit uncomfortable to read. I'm a little confused that Shen Wan fell in love with Xiao Yan in his last reincarnation, but it seems understandable. After all, you have been called a bastard and bullied since you were born. There is a person who is as innocent as the sun and says that he wants to be friends with you and even pretends to be a monster to drive away those who bully you. Wow, it is so cute. And Zhou Yan fell in love with Xiao Wang. Why did he fall in love with Xiao Wang? Could it be because of what Shen Wan said casually when he was in the fairy world? Or because I have been in love for a long time, I feel that it is more likely to have both. But the writing is very bland, and the description of inner emotions is relatively sparse. The most obvious point of this book is that the supporting characters in it are basically tool people, especially the character of Master, who is like a background beauty from beginning to end. His role is pitiful. He is used to promote the plot, and the promotion is quite blunt. Moreover, after Xiao Yan came out of isolation, his attitude has been cold and indifferent. Is this because of having a junior brother? 🐶🌹) But to be honest, for such a small-sized article, it is enough to focus on the main character. The weak supporting characters do not matter. After all, the author does not seem to intend to write group portraits. But! Yes! I have to mention that I really like Chi Ying's character. I feel so handsome, and I only care about my younger sister, and I keep what I say ww Although I don't have a lot of roles, I feel so charming 😭 It's a pity that we didn't get to see Sister Chi as we wished in the end. EmIn terms of plot rhythm, the daily drama in the first half is more relaxed and interesting than the main plot progression in the second half. For example, the daily life of the sect, the training episode, and some inexplicable interactions between Xiao Wang and Xiao Yan, all have a faint sense of absurdity, like a light comedy. In the later stage, the author obviously wanted to open up the situation. There were more things involving world setting and destiny theory? ), But the connection between these serious topics and the light style of the early stage is not very good, and it will feel a little jumping when you read it. However, after all, it was many years ago when I read it, and the author at that time was probably still a young author hh(◔◡◔). One thing I want to praise most is that Zhou Yan did not suddenly become smarter when faced with the truth. Nowadays, when many novels reach the stage of revealing the secret, the protagonist seems to have been turned on, and his IQ increases overnight... But Zhou Yan is still the same Zhou Yan in the end, and he is still stupid when he should be stupid (bs, but he feels a little more calm after being stupid). This persistence of being stupid but not stupid is very interesting, and it also maintains the realism of this character until the ending. I looked at the time and it was already past four in the morning. My mind was a little unclear. Maybe the language was not well organized. I didn't mean to criticize you. Www. I was just expressing my feelings out of boredom. ​All in all, this article is very good. There are not many words but the plot is novel. Everything that needs to be introduced is also introduced. I can pretty much figure out the rest, and the writing is already amazing! Best wishes. ( ´▽` )

Wow, I just saw such a good article now. Have you ever thought about writing about senior sister and Jiang Huailuo? Although this article is several years old, I really want to read it. ૮ O̴̶̷᷄ ·̫ o̴̶̷̥᷅ ა

Finished spreading flowers! A very gentle article

I just think that Xiaoyan and senior sister are so good, it would be great to live a lifetime in the mountains, but life is always so hard, and only one or two wishful things can happen

If you keep writing, I will always be with you! Author, the ancient novels you wrote are so beautiful. I kneel down and beg you to write more ancient novels in the future, preferably those written by senior fellow students.