After Redeeming the Demon Lord's Freedom

After reading it, although it is a little bit cruel, xql is still very sweet. Thanks for free

Ah, that little snake is also sealed in the cave. Woohoo, I like that snake so much.

Finished with flowers ~ Congratulations to my wife!! Although it was originally an article I picked up from Seedling Cultivation, and I read several of them, the copywriting and character design of this one are very, very, very attractive to me. The first few chapters are also very attractive, and there is also my favorite dog blood! It prompted me to keep reading, and it was really tiring to write different comments to cultivate Kuhaha (God knows what good comments I can write as a haha ​​weirdo). But suddenly I feel that it is a good thing to support newcomers and feel the growth of an article or an author (if my wife becomes a god in the future, I will be a discerning person, hahahahahahahahahahaha cough cough). My wife's article gave me a big surprise at first, but it really lacks stamina. The first half of the article is very bright, and the direction of the article is also light and heavy. The second half seems to have accelerated. I'll stop here and I personally put forward a few shortcomings: ① Ruoxia Valley is like a tool. Generally speaking, except for the two sides of good and evil, I had very high expectations for this mysterious sect that has always remained neutral. Except that Xiao Xiao's identity was set as a disciple of Ruoxia Valley at the beginning, Mrs. Yin and the valley owner were good friends, and a Xueqing grass that saved people's lives disappeared. I thought there would be at least one copy of Ruoxia Valley, otherwise such a high-level setting would be in vain. (Unless there is a series of articles, Ruoxiagu is the protagonist) ②The final boss is Junior Brother. The acting role is really not as good as that of Yue Buqun, the apparent leader of the Canglang Sect. It lacks how he counterattacks his master step by step to achieve his own goals, and the boss appearance is not good at all. Also, his feelings for Xiao Xiao were so inexplicable, and he was possessive for no reason. Although I like yandere very much, but a yandere suddenly chooses to give up to fulfill his true love. I think the character change is too fast, and I don't understand why the junior brother's scene suddenly speeds up a lot and disappears all of a sudden. I thought that after the leader of the Canglang Sect took the lead, Ruoxiagu and the real mastermind behind the story would gradually be revealed, making the whole story more attractive. (Representing only personal views) ③Some characters are too empty and lack plot and rich characters. For example, Mrs. Yin, Xiao Xiao's father, and Yan Wuzhao. The character of Seventeen could have been better developed, but the wife didn't put too much emphasis on it. I think the story line between him and Thirteen could have been more detailed to contrast his tragic life. ④My wife's description of the duel is too general. The key climax fight scene is like child's play. The two boss battles gave me the feeling of "That's it? That's it? It ended suddenly before I even started to enjoy it?". I personally think that the peak of the showdown in the whole story is the escape of Yun Wumeng and Gong Shou at the beginning, and then they are gone. ⑤ Attack and receive the emotional line. It's barely okay, and I can understand that it's a short story, so it's inevitable that it will progress a little too fast. In fact, when they first met when they were children, they could write more ink. There is no way to describe their emotional changes. It is better to let "young Bai Yueguang" be the cornerstone of their emotional sublimation from the beginning. But as a newcomer, the basic flow of the article has been completed, and there is still a lot of room for improvement. Maybe she will add some of the points I mentioned above in the extra chapter, hahaha. I hope that my wife can grasp the gentleness of the writing better, and I look forward to better performance in the next book. Come on, madam. Ps: What impressed me most about the whole article was Biwei : D

Finished reading! [Spreading Flowers] Thanks for free!

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Sky!!! It's a wolf killer!!!!

Throw flowers!!!! Treasure article!

What you wrote is really great! I'm glad I found this treasure. It's so beautiful and adorable. Especially the Demon King and Xiao Xiao. Mr. Shiliuhe is also so sweet. Mrs. Treasure's treasure article.

Nice!! Thanks for the limited fee!!

It's so good, I didn't expect to finish it in half a day.