[Western Crossover] Taking Down Bosses and Causing Trouble

It's too strong, but the Laughing Robin is also too scary, it's like a nightmare.

Emmmmm read the full text. Let's talk about the well-written aspects first: First of all, the early plot arrangement is quite good, especially the first and second volumes. Jiansan and this comprehensive British and American integration are very good. The second is the character description. Perhaps because of the length, the writing is complete enough and the characters are still very full. Finally, there is the setting and plot. I have to say that the imagination is beyond imagination. The cheating is justified. It's a good article based on cause and effect. Regarding the bad aspect of writing: The first is the issue of writing style. You can see several points where the entire article has a particularly abrupt transition. The first place is the second half of Volume 2, where Alyssa fights the ghost clown. You can roughly understand the author's purpose and reason for describing this battle: to enrich Alyssa's personality, to prove Ba Dao's emotional awakening, and to provide an opportunity for the three of them to go their separate ways. But in this place, the description of Ba Dao and Alyssa is insufficient, giving people a feeling that Ba Dao's transformation is sudden. After all, the first half of this volume is described from a first-person perspective like a "robot", and he is "afraid" of ghosts inexplicably. And Alyssa's combat power and bravery were not fully demonstrated. Looking back now, she only remembers "the powerful sword around the pillar". Including why the ghost clown exists and why it kills children? Why is there still people living in this town after so many children were lost before the protagonist arrived? Why are there no superheroes to solve this problem? It leaves a lot of mysteries (or foreshadowing that was originally going to be described later), which is not very enjoyable to watch. Moreover, the writing style has begun to take its first abrupt turn, with more cumbersome descriptions, but the main plot is left to the readers to guess as if to bury hidden clues. The second place is when Ba Dao died for the first time. It is explained at the beginning of this volume that Ba Dao is actually an extremely calm and restrained way of existence. He learned the style of Baby Bruce to reduce his danger in the minds of others, so he disguised himself as a sand marten. And this time, after he killed Jack (the original killer of Alyssa) and went to court, the storyline suddenly began to accelerate. That is, the writing style of the previous stage is in a state of compression. Redundant descriptions are reduced, the plot line approaches a main line, and the writing speed is accelerated. A "World of the Dead" setting has been added, and the existence of this world is actually just a false world created by those behind the scenes who want to meet the best swordsman. It's more like a world that was deliberately inserted in order to give him the "immunity to mental attacks". The writing style here is very "magic", as if it was written to give people a sense of fog. But in fact, I just felt like someone was holding a handful of cotton and covering my face. I couldn't see anything and was a little suffocated. The third change in writing style begins when Ba Dao returns to his original world and admits that darkness does have an impact on him. From a fight of courage to a fight of wits. There are more and more descriptions of various arrangements for the sake of arrangement. In other words, the description is changed from the main perspective of Ba Dao to the description from the perspective of a third-party spectator who is not from God's perspective. You can neither see the overall situation nor what Ba Dao did until the final incident ends. [That is to say, there is no description of the overall situation and no description of details, resulting in the whole incident having no highlights. It is confusing to watch, and the plot is like running water. For example, the part where "Shazam Family" defeats the Doctor] This part also has some well-written parts, such as the scene in Beach City. The cooperation and ideas between Connor, Tyrannosaurus, and Annihilus, the exchanges between characters, and the last laugh of Green Lantern. It can be considered a good state of writing from the perspective of a third party watching the game from a non-God perspective. ) The above three issues are not major problems and fall into the category of "it's fine as long as the plot is clear". They are all minor matters. The main problem is the fourth and last paragraph of the article. A careful summary is from Chapter 193 to Chapter 273. I didn't have any thoughts after reading it. The analogy is: when you are eating roast duck, someone puts two pieces of white bread in your mouth. The aftertaste of the roast duck was still there, and it tasted good, but what I was chewing was white bread with nothing in it, which was not only choking but tasteless. After reading the whole article, I re-read this paragraph. I found that it was OK to cut out this plot. After turning into ashes, I met the goddess of revenge "Alyssa" and understood everything. She made a wish. Alyssa gave Ba Dao a relaxing journey. The end is the original world. The next chapter is directly about Ba Dao who can bear everything after returning from the trip. The travel process can be written as a side story. Or go back to the original world without traveling. I don't think the author, who has written 200 chapters before, can't afford all this. As I commented before, he went through a lot, and his choice was not to be a hero and save everything. In the middle of the Revenge Knight, Bai Chao and the main world, I didn't see where Ba Dao had grown, nor what made him feel like he could take on everything. If we talk about the revenge knight part, it can be said that Ba Dao meets his grandparents and relaxes; going to Bai Chao can be said to save Bruce, who is about to become the ravager, and I don't understand the rest. My direct impression is that the author may have changed this part. The writing about the protagonist is contradictory, but what about the promised tyrant sword? What about pushing the boss to cause trouble? Is this part of the writing no different from a youth pain novel? While saying "I don't want to think about memories and want to stay in the main world", at the same time saying "Leo is telling him that it will be too late to think about it again"? ? Isn't this just as contradictory as saying "I want to abandon this scumbag who trashed me" while saying "This child is the fruit of my love with him (the scumbag) and should be protected and not aborted"? I read this part again later and guessed what the author probably meant: (The following is purely a personal guess) Leo meets Alyssa and understands the existence of the "mastermind" and discovers that he has to return to the original world if he is not dead. (Note: The result of going back is not necessary, it's just Ba Dao's personality.) Then Alyssa said that if you don't want to go back now, you can go through a journey before going back. Ba Dao chose to accept. Then in the world of Revenge Knight, I met Thomas and Martha, and helped them alleviate the pain of losing their loved ones to a certain extent. Then I went to Flashpoint World (that is, the original world of Revenge Knight World if Shining had not changed) to have a silly meal and let off steam. At the same time, I found "Leo" living with Lar in this world's Rockstar. I felt that I needed to live a normal life to calm down, so I asked Lar to help blur the coordinates and blocked the Lightning World. The jump after he left told the Night Demon not to follow him. He went to the main world to live an ordinary life. If he erased his memory and created a new goal before the Night Demon found him, he would continue to live in the main world. If the Night Demon found him before he formed a new goal. , He unlocked the memory blocked by Lal and returned to the original world to save it; Ba Dao, who had lived an ordinary life in the main world, decided to listen to Night Demon to restore his memory and go to save the original world, taking Bat, Jin Shining and others from the main world to rescue it. The main problem in the original world is that the big bosses on both sides of the Avengers and the Zhenglian came to fight the earth together, so the Zhenglian was responsible for the "Figure Mania" of the Zhenglian, and the Avengers were responsible for the Purple Potato Demon. As a result, the Avengers did not fight the Purple Potato Demon, and the Purple Potato Demon snapped his fingers, and half of the people were gone, including part of the Zhenglian. Therefore, the Zhenglian could not defeat the "Figure Maniac", who also instigated Superman after the bat turned into gray. To save the original world, we have Wei Leng lead some people from the Main World to fight the "figure maniacs", and other people from the Avengers to lead the Purple Sweet Potato Spirit who will make a comeback after Earth Defense changes the timeline. [Of course, there is a big, big time paradox here. Press and talk later] Ba Dao took Connor to find the Purple Sweet Potato Spirit who had no troops but had six stones at some time before. He snatched the gloves back and asked Connor to snap his fingers and revive everyone. Incident resolved. So the above is my understanding and analysis of the plot of this paragraph. Even after I forcibly straightened out the plot, there were still many contradictions: Regarding the time paradox, Ba Dao took Connor to a certain point in time before everyone turned into ashes (because the Purple Potato Spirit destroyed all the stones after snapping his fingers and everyone turned into ashes, so he could only snatch the Purple Potato Spirit before it turned into ashes). While the Purple Potato Spirit had no soldiers or stones, he grabbed the gloves. That's why Purple Sweet Potato Spirit will send all the troops to Earth to get the gloves back. So speaking of this time period, the Purple Sweet Potato Spirit was robbed of his gloves and didn't have time to put them on before snapping his fingers, so everyone didn't turn into ashes. So the Purple Sweet Potato Spirit came to grab the gloves in order to turn everyone into ashes. At this time, everyone has not turned into ashes, so there is no question of resurrection or not. [It is also said that the person who grabbed the glove was after snapping his fingers to ashes and before destroying the stone. Then there is another paradox. It is now the fourth year after turning into ashes. Why did the Purple Sweet Potato Spirit, whose gloves were robbed four years ago, come to attack the earth now? The second conflict, in the end, Ba Dao made a wish to the goddess of revenge Alyssa for the sake of Bat Mama, and brought the dead back to life. So why did you have to fight to the death with the "figure maniac" and the purple sweet potato spirit before? ? The reason why the wish was not granted in the early stage of the article is that the goddess of revenge cannot be allowed to go to the goddess of death to steal the soul. However, the goddess of revenge itself is a higher than this dimension. The status of the two goddesses is inherently different, so there is no question of whether they can steal it or not. Besides, after making the wish in the end, wouldn't you still go and steal the soul? Such as Lar, Thomas, Martha, Jack, Elisa, Howard Stark and so on. So why not just make a wish in the first place? Also, I said this was a problem with the description of the writing style. Especially in this section, there were several problems such as incorrect labeling of the main world and the original world, and forgetting the early settings. Secondly, in addition to the issue of writing style, there is also the issue of the rhythm of the article. There is a problem with the balance between heavy main plot and lighthearted comedy. In the originally deep part, a lively atmosphere such as "the sword is awesome" must be forced to be added. That's not to say it's not good to be light-hearted and funny, but the article needs to be relaxed and relaxed, rather than adding a few jokes to liven up the atmosphere if it feels too heavy. I have played Jiansan before (afk for three or four years) and I have always liked watching Jiansan fandoms. I find it very interesting. After all, I have feelings about the games I have played. I think the first and second volumes are both okay, light and funny yet a little depressing, and the pace is pretty good. Or in other words, does the author want to write "The Tyrant Sword in the DC Marvel world" or "the DC Marvel world with the Tyrant Sword"? Does the author want to write a sad and depressing plot line, or does he want to write a daily fan fiction that breaks the original atmosphere of joy and joy. There always needs to be a trade-off, rather than just simmering everything in one pot. (And later, especially in the main world, Ye Lan is described in a large way? The main character is Leo, why is Ye Lan described in a large scale?? They also forcibly collected the CP and paired him with the Kang in the main world. The agreed contin??) Finally, there is the emotional issue. Personally, I am very open to the emotional line. Generally, all sentimental stocks are invested, and if there is sugar, then there is no taboo. The problem is, after reading this article, I just can't find where the emotional line is? Inexplicably, the two people fell in love with each other. It is said that Ba Dao likes his blind young lawyer, not because he has a face that resembles his father. The problem is that there is not much description about the blind young lawyer. The most description is about "blameless light-colored eyes". So you fell in love with him because of his looks? I remember one explanation: I like Night Devil because, like bats, Night Devil will sacrifice himself for society and the world. Not willing to regain his sight, he just wants to protect Hell's Kitchen. But you didn't write about how he protected Hell's Kitchen? Readers can't figure it out. If it were just for this reason, wouldn't Superman, Iron Man, and Captain America all like it? ? Iron Man stopped making weapons for the sake of world peace (sacrifice himself to benefit the world); Captain America chose to crash and die in order to destroy the Red Skull (sacrifice himself to benefit the world); Superman chose to destroy his kind for the sake of the world (sacrifice himself to benefit the world). You have to write down the difference between the Night Stalkers and them. Back to the question itself, the difference is that they don't have a face and bat horns that resemble his father Bruce? ? ? Moreover, in the later plots, Night Stalker often has no description of his appearance at all, and the descriptions he does have are just like "touching the hair". So the function of two people turning into gray together is to give Ba Dao an extra human body pendant? ? The whole article can be considered a medium-length article, with 1 million words. My senior VIP bought it for about 25rmb. If you ask me if it's worth it, I'd say it was worth it until Chapter 193. The hilarious extras are also great to watch. Overall it's okay. The main reason for the excitement in the previous review was the dozens of chapters at the end, which successfully transformed the satisfaction and okay feeling of the previous nearly 200 chapters into anger. Especially the wrong home and original world many times. In this paragraph, I just feel that the author's attitude towards this article has changed drastically. Moreover, the comments in this paragraph became fewer and fewer, and the big jokes disappeared. I don't know how to summarize it in the end, so I'll just write it here.

So the real Liu Nan died in the explosion long ago, and the one who cooperated with the Injustice Bat was always just a clone controlled by Diao.

The number of chapters is two hundred and fifty, and the number of words is one million words, neatly

Madam, why have you become so dark? My little heart can't stand this plot.

I just want to say: Fuck [beep—]

So, didn't Dawn's Creepy Light go to the main world to arrest people? Why did he settle there? He didn't want to work on reuniting the original world? They're not temporary workers either. Haven't we ever described the camaraderie of the original World Avengers team before?

Suddenly I discovered that the cover is an animated picture! ! ! ! It's amazing! !

Big change of cover! Still an animated picture!

After reading the full text, Dog Day is so beautiful! The sword is awesome! ! !