[Crossover] The Detective's Code

I have some thoughts after seeing this. I will not hesitate to say it, but the author will listen to it. First of all, I want to give the author a thumbs up. The ideas are great and the plot is quite interesting. As for the heroine, the rudeness that others say is acceptable. After all, the world in animation is full of people who casually call others scum and hit others. The two-dimensional world is inherently inconsistent and uncoordinated. As long as there are no issues of principle, this setting of the heroine is relatively novel, not to mention that the heroine is actually a good child. I don't think it's a good thing to be able to see spirits, not to mention that what the heroine always sees is the bloody appearance of the victim, and there is also the danger of being possessed. However, after being forced to have this ability, she chose to use it to solve crimes. Although it was ostensibly for fame, she still chose to help the spirit find the truth even after being possessed and hurt. This is because her heart is kind and she wants to help those who died in vain. I like this kind of heroine very much. However, I feel very sorry for this article. Ignoring some bugs and focusing only on the description of the article itself, I had a vague feeling that something was wrong from the beginning, but the contradiction was not very prominent, so I was not sure. It was not until I passed through Atobu ten years later that I realized the biggest flaw in this article, which led to the failure of this article. What the author lacks is the description of the characters' emotions and the grasp of the climax of the conflict. Does the uncle love the heroine? Logically speaking, he saved the heroine time and time again, got engaged to her on Akashi's behalf, indulged her behavior and occasional impulses, and even came ten years ago to change her fate. He should have loved her, but unfortunately I couldn't feel his love for her from the author's description. At the beginning, this contradiction was not obvious, but until the uncle came over ten years later, this part of the plot can be said to be the climax of the emotional conflict of the characters, and the shortcomings were completely exposed. First of all, no matter how busy I am at work, I still can't quite understand the prelude to finding out that my wife has taken the dog with me when I come back, even though I have a deep relationship with him. This is not a sign of deep affection. It is clear that the relationship between husband and wife is extremely cold and does not care about each other. Secondly, ten years later, the uncle lost his daughter and then the heroine. In order to change his destiny, he even tried his best to return to the present. It should be said that it should be a fierce emotion of suppressing despair and putting everything into action. However, from the author's description, I only felt that the uncle blamed himself for the death of the heroine. There was only self-blame and nothing else. This was self-blame for not fulfilling his obligations, and because of the exhaustion after having to bear all this, it seemed that he was forced to have no choice but to fulfill his obligations. The emotional description of the character is very problematic. To be specific, for example, these chapters are undoubtedly a climax. However, I did not feel the despair and collapse of the uncle. On the contrary, from the details of some descriptions, it seems that he is just an ordinary friend of the heroine, which is very inconsistent, and these descriptions are inherently contradictory. When the heroine's heart stopped, his reaction was like this: "His breathing was slightly out of rhythm... The volume gradually changed from a suppressed murmur to a tearing cry... It was so good... Keigo Atobe took a long breath... Looking a little slumped... Coughed... Slightly sad." The heroine's heart stopped and her breathing was only slightly out of rhythm, (but the screams were inconsistent later) and the heroine escaped. His subsequent reaction was like that of a friend who just breathed a sigh of relief. The heroine had just wandered around the gate of hell and he was only "slightly sad" after seeing a ghost. Thinking about the self-blame before, this was probably just the performance of a person who had an ordinary relationship with the heroine who blamed himself for the death of his friend, rather than the performance of a deeply loved person who had lost hope and was now even more broken. Whether it is the uncle now or ten years later, the author may be very careful to express a kind of pampering, but I only see indifference, just a forced and accustomed responsibility. The overall idea and structure of the author's writing are pretty good, but the description of emotions really made me not feel that the male protagonist cares about the female protagonist, or that they have feelings for each other. If the author can pay more attention to the emotional description in the future, I believe there will be great progress.

I read it in one go, it was so well written, I like mystery stories the most =￣ω￣= I was really tortured by the extras. However, the ending of the text is that it is difficult to get rid of being targeted by the organization. The future is still very dangerous╮(╯▽╰)╭

Mist grass! Why should I buy them all! I don't want to see this be at all!

Although I think it's a bit unsatisfactory, I think this way of writing that is full of meaning is more beautiful.

After finishing it, I still feel that the one from 10 years ago was a bit lacking, so I'll continue after replacing it!

I really like Limiao (><)

Is it almost over? . . I was just about to say that I could write about other schools. . . .

I bought v and watched it silently! Silly and awesome! As expected, I can't write suspense (

Why did it end? QAQ

Forehead. . . Finished?