A Huge Wave of Short Stories Is Approaching

Hello, author, since this is Xiaoyu's first time accepting an order, I will tell you what should be said and what should not be said~ Let's talk about the title first. Xiaoyu's first impression when seeing this title was that it's so long! Such a long title, if there is no link address, would make lazy people ignore it (such as Xiaoyu). Later, when I clicked in, I realized that this is the chapter name. Well, it's a very cute name. The poor little boy who was waiting for someone was created at the beginning, [He came dressed in the sun and stayed there for half an afternoon... With an inexplicable coldness. ] By the way, Xiaoyu also felt an inexplicable coldness after seeing these sentences. The author could try to write a horror novel. The style of writing is relatively similar, and the wording is slightly inappropriate. The first one or two sentences in brackets can explain it. [The little boy finally looked away from the end of the road and said to the man... The little boy's eyes became hesitant. The author's descriptive ability needs to be improved. The little boy finally moved his eyes away from the end of the road, looked at the man and said, wouldn't this be better? Because the little boy was not at the end of the road, he was under the streetlight in the park. By the way, the little boy's eyes gradually became hesitant. In another way, the number of words was increased and the description was detailed. Wouldn't it be great? Ahem, the author's writing actually has a certain foundation. Some parts are very touching, very close to people's hearts, and have a touch of warmth. However, inappropriate wording is also common. There are typos and missing words, such as: [In my memory, there is such a big boy. She is very slender and warm, with a soothing smile on her lips. She holds his hand tightly on days when dark clouds accumulate. Very slender and warm, this is indeed describing the fingers, but it is in the wrong position, and this big boy can heal the second boy at first glance. The second boy and the first boy's brother are good friends, and they also like cute little boys. The second boy left for various reasons, and the first boy takes advantage of it. Does this plot look like the author's outline? It is not clearly stated who this brother is. Is he the little boy's biological brother or an older boy? Or both? Personally, I prefer the second one. It is also suggested that some words should be clearly marked as to who said it. The third person was originally used and then suddenly switched, which will make the readers confused and do not understand who is speaking. But the author really has the potential to write a horror novel. This Qingshui novel also gives people a very weird and erratic feeling, but it also creates suspense, attracting readers to continue reading to find out the facts. Overall, it is a good and refreshing novel. Finally, is this really a 3P? Even 2p feel that they are not old enough. Even though this is just a short story, it should not be so obscure! The above is a comment from [Shicheng Studio] Xiaoyu. Please go to the main store to receive a review: □//www. Jjwxc. Net/onebook. Php? Novelid=1911465

Cute~da~da~ Come on, work hard!

So short...>\\\\\\\\< But still want to like it!

O(*////▽////*)q Brother is tsundere and cute