CEO, Please Wait! (GL)

Finished. . Something will happen after drinking

In fact, two chapters ago, I thought Yaoyao was a good child. She was just a little willful and lonely. She couldn't express herself and was too good at hiding herself. She would correct her mistakes when she realized her mistakes. She would see Liang Bowei's true face and change her mind. She would seriously consider her life again. But the author, Nen actually wrote her into colluding with desperadoes, and classified her family into a murderous gangster crime. She also killed people and silenced them without repentance. A person who would be in fear all day long because she treated people like water, would actually murder and silence her because her boyfriend ran away? Haha, should I say Yao Yao is too cruel, or should I say the author, your queen mother? This is the huge difference between the protagonist and the supporting role,,,,, poor kid, admit it...

What is peace? Let the beautiful woman rescue you more fiercely\\(^o^)/~

The part about killing people... Is better off. What a great atmosphere up front!

Kidnapping! So scary! Hope you are safe

Isn't this the plot of "Girls We Chased All Those Years"...

"President Yu Jie, please stay (gl)" BY Ah Shen Ah Shen wants to say that everyone's writing style is different. Different writing styles create different charms in everyone's articles. Da Da's writing style follows Xiaobai's cute line, and carries this line through to the end. So the whole article is very relaxing and enjoyable to read Adhering to the tradition of promoting before suppressing, let's first talk about Ah Shen's opinions and suggestions on the entire article. Please rest assured that Ah Chen's suggestions are very pertinent. After reading them, you can ignore them or choose to adopt them. Ah Shen left the choice in Da Da's hands. First let's talk about the title. Ah Shen didn't want to make too many comments about the topic. It was concise and clear enough for everyone to understand at a glance. I believe that many readers who like to read CEO articles will not miss it. The copywriting is clearly written without any sloppiness, which is worthy of praise and learning. Some online articles often pile up a bunch of gorgeous rhetoric without knowing what the whole article is trying to express. When A Shen wrote long reviews for others, he emphasized one point more than once - the success or failure of an article largely depends on the first three chapters. To be honest, after reading the big first chapter, Ah Shen, I felt it was too scattered. Many background explanations can obviously be interspersed in the plot, so it would be a bit procrastinating to write half of the chapter separately. The connection between sentences was also a bit stiff, like here - so he helped her up and said coldly: "You don't know how to drink, but you still have the courage to drink so much. You are really asking for trouble." She then turned around and left. This was the first time she preached to others like this. Looking at Mo Xiaowei, she must still be a college student. ←Isn't it a little inconsistent for her to appear three times in a row? Or do you feel that something is not smooth enough? Ah Chen felt that it was not because of his insufficient writing skills. As the following chapters unfolded, Ah Chen saw great progress and considerable writing skills in terms of processing some words. The reason why there was such a problem in the first chapter, Ah Shen felt that he did not read it carefully after writing it once, but sent it out in a hurry. The same situation occurs in Chapters 2 and 3. Chapter 2 - A Lamborghini aventador LP700 silver sports car ran past her at high speed. The person in the car was Xu Ziyan, who was wearing sunglasses, her long black straight hair hanging around her shoulders, and wearing a black business suit. She grabbed the steering wheel in her hand and slowed down two gears. She looked at the person sitting on the bridge in front of her. How could this figure look like the person who bumped into her at the bar that day? ← Her long, straight black hair hangs loosely on her shoulders... This is obviously a sick sentence. Then the previous problem appeared again. She grabbed the steering wheel in her hand and slowed down two gears. She looked at the person sitting on the bridge in front of her. ←If two words for her appear in a sentence, the second word for her can obviously be omitted to reduce the repetition of words. And the following sentence, "She looked at someone sitting by the bridge" is another wrong sentence. At the beginning of the third chapter - Xu Ziyan opened the schedule with her slender fingers, and she said calmly... We don't talk like this, and this way of expression seems strange. It can be said that, 1, Xu Ziyan read the schedule opened with slender fingers and said calmly. 2. Xu Ziyan read the schedule that was opened by slender fingers and spoke calmly. The first three chapters are often the key to determining whether the article will be read by readers. If there are a large number of incorrect sentences filled in, it is easy to cause dyslexia and make it too difficult for readers to read. It is also easy for readers who are attracted by the copy to abandon the article. In Chapter 5, the words 'reported by a reporter from CCTV 3' appear twice in a row. This is actually explained at the beginning of the chapter, or there is no need to explain it at all. If it appears twice in a row, it will just seem a bit chatty. Moreover, the appearance of such words seems to require some effort in the transition and connection of scenes. Such a writing method will make the readers unable to smoothly move on to the next scene after reading one scene, or they will be confused, or they will simply jump out of the atmosphere created by the entire story. Let's talk about the emotional line of the two protagonists in the story. When we were in school, when we were writing essays, the teachers would definitely tell us that the details should be appropriate. This is also very useful in writing articles. When writing an article, you need to make an outline. The outline is clear, and the emotional line of the two protagonists is clear. As the emotional line slowly unfolds, the story also advances step by step. How Mo Xiaowei met Xu Ziyan can be described in detail. Qin Shan helped Mo Xiaowei back to the dormitory and answered with the guard aunt. (It is said that a guard is a guard, and an aunt is an aunt. We usually call that position a dormitory manager. Please forgive Chen's ignorance. This is really the first time I have heard of such a name as a guard aunt QAQ) OK, there is a particularly effective way to correct this aspect of detailing - making an outline. The outline lists the main plots involved in the story, and other auxiliary plots or background explanations are interspersed with them, so that the detailed parts can be well arranged. The several encounters between Mo Xiaowei and Sister Bingshan need to be more emphasized, and the CCTV 3 broadcast can be abbreviated (there is no need to write CCTV 3's broadcast in such detail) and the interaction between friends in the bar does not show the progress of the story. However, the encounter with Sister Bingshan again in the dream bar should still be given extra points. The interaction here is obviously more delicate than the previous chapters and can bring the reader into the atmosphere of the whole story. Later, the frequent interactions between Mo Xiaowei and Sister Bingshan gradually deepened and deepened the relationship between the two people. Readers will have a warm and sweet feeling filling the big words. Including Ling Da's writing about Mo Xiaowei's psychology when she saw Xu Ziyan's 34D bra, it was very real and natural. Here again I need a thumbs up~~~You must know that no emotion in this world happens for no reason. Unlike some online articles where the two protagonists are inexplicably together, as if they were forcefully brought together for the sake of writing an article, the process of injecting emotions is not visible at all, and it feels very abrupt. Let's talk about the detailed description below. In fact, when we write articles, sometimes we can use some descriptions of scenery or characters' expressions to better and more euphemistically highlight the inner world of the characters. Part of the writing skills are used here. Many things are not described straightforwardly, but are perfectly presented with the help of detailed narration. I found that there are obviously some shortcomings and deficiencies in this aspect, and I need to practice more in future writing. To give a few examples: 1. Mo Xiaowei was walking from a distance holding the dress she designed, her expression not very good. 2. "How could this happen! Who did this? How despicable!" Xu Jingjing said angrily. 3. President Xu finished speaking to her in a very cold tone. 4. At the end of Chapter 11, I first wrote about Mo Xiaowei's thoughts, and then wrote about Xu Ziyan's thoughts. When we write, we can keep the words from being too tight and spread them out as much as possible. Your face doesn't look good. How is it that you don't look good? Some anger, how to express this anger (eyes? Expression? Demeanor?) "Very cool and cold" is too stiff and stiff. As for the two thoughts, one can only perceive the psychology of the two people through the author's psychological description of them. This way of expression is too single, especially when it is expressed in a continuous paragraph. Why should we be more euphemistic when writing? It can bring the whole article to a higher level, and readers will have a sense of unfinished aftertaste while reading. Don't think that this is not important. In fact, many great masters are very good at using writing techniques and grasping the rhythm of the plot. Only by fully interpreting the inner emotions of the characters can the readers be led into the story blueprint you have drawn. Wherever there is suppression, there is elevation. In his comments throughout the review, Ah Shen also believes that DaDa has done a better job in the following points. First, the correspondence between the title and the copy, as well as the simplicity of the copy, clearly state the theme of the story. Second, the frequent interactions between Mo Xiaowei and Xu Ziyan laid a good foundation for the development of the entire story and the direction of their relationship. There are also some advantages that A Shen did not mention. The writing is smooth and the storyline has its ups and downs. Yao Yao's design of the villain is very successful. In a few words, a girl with envy, jealousy, hatred, and princess syndrome appears vividly in the text. Later on, the character Lu Lu's heart is dealt with in a very real and down-to-earth manner. After reading it, I feel that we do meet this or that kind of scumbag in real life, and the change in Lu Lu's mentality is also very brilliantly written. It can be seen that the overall character and personality of the characters can be considered relatively clear. After Mo Xiaowei came out as gay, Mo's mother was shocked and didn't understand at first, then sad and heartbroken, and then unwilling to accept it. Finally, she slowly passed this hurdle in her heart and accepted the fact that her child came out as gay. The whole process is written in a true and complete way, showing the protective and possessive nature of contemporary parents (many domestic parents believe that their children should listen to them and live according to the established route they have planned. In fact, this is wrong. Children have children in their lives, and no one should live for others. Life belongs to oneself.) Although Mother Mo's acceptance later is too idealistic, it is more of a hope for a better life. Judging from the update time of Dada, Dada is very diligent. Diligence is a good thing, and I hope you can continue to maintain this momentum and work hard. There is no word "perfect" in this world. Ah Shen saw that Dada said in his author's message that this article was Dada's first novel. In Ah Shen's opinion, it is worthy of recognition that it can be written as it is now. Please work hard and strive to write more exciting articles. Ah Chen is optimistic about you, Meiqin, come on, okay~~~~^_* Well, Ah Chen has just written it here. If there are any inappropriate words, I hope you can forgive me~~ The above only represents Ah Chen's personal remarks, and Ah Chen has the exclusive right of interpretation. Ink dyes a thousand cities, A Shen sincerely presents

The reader is a night owl, and just grabbed the sofa

Confession!!!!!!!!

The president attacks, Xiaowei receives. . Uh-huh, that's it