Liang Yun Xian Yu (Prince of Tennis)

Come after it is over, I commit seppuku... =. = Speaking of Mao Shou, you actually opened the insect master, no one has ever seen it!!!!

In fact, this is very good. No matter how legendary they are on the tennis court, they are just a group of teenagers, experiencing what teenagers should experience. Compared with the original work and plot, the simple and sincere feelings resonate more. Compared with Li Hai, I personally prefer Qing Xue and Hyokui, but this ending does not exclude it at all ~ the beauty related to youth and growth, no bugs, haha.

By the way, after waiting for so long and coming back to see the end... I'm a little bit dissatisfied...

Congratulations on the completion~~Spread the flowers, shower the flowers!! What a heartwarming ending!

It's finally finished!! Congratulations!! Yukimura and Aka too... (Bad smile)

Before starting the long comment, Xiaoduo will stop talking nonsense. It has been many days since I wrote this article, but in the graduation season, recently, when facing the people around me, I am always suddenly speechless. The things I have always insisted on seem to be beyond recognition. I then indulge myself, but there is nowhere to be hysterical. Okay, that's how I feel really depressed, but I will respect the article, don't worry Mao Tuo! I remember that when I was stuck in writing, I was frantically looking for articles from Internet King. I read this article, but in the end I didn't follow up on updates for some reason. I'll tell you in detail below. The first thing readers see in an article is the copy, and the importance of copy goes without saying. [Hey, you incompetent copywriter, shut up] The first sentence in the copy of "Liang Yun Xian Yu" is "In her previous life, she was full of talent but shy and timid." How to say it? This makes me think that the female protagonist is at least not a Byakugan, and the male protagonist is clearly written to be Sanada. [Besides Mr. Atobe among Internet kings, Sanada is my second favorite, although I already love him overwhelmingly.] So, the article attracted me, so I clicked on it decisively. Mao Tuo, what you wrote earlier, said that you received guidance from editors and seniors, and you were filled with envy, jealousy, and hatred! To be honest, in the "Preface", at the end, "Liangyi is a timid and cowardly girl," OK, she likes to quietly indulge in her own world, which can be said to be in line with the copywriting's "brilliant talent", but what about being timid, cowardly, and cowardly? Um, I feel like the characters here are a bit confusing. Is it the fault of the copywriter or the writing? When I write my own articles, I also like to write a short so-and-so sentence before the chapter. However, I think, Mao Tuo, your synopsis is too long, and the first chapter actually comes twice. Although these two times are different worlds, this will make people feel that the author's scene switching is not smooth. Here's a small suggestion: It's best to describe one thing clearly in each chapter of the article, because fan fiction really doesn't have high requirements, and it's good if the author can explain it clearly. The first scene where Liang Yi and Sanada appear together is because I am used to reading the entire article and then turning back to write a review, so when I see this, I feel it is inappropriate. I always feel that Mao Tuo is trying to portray a calm, "good-natured and calm girl". In this case, this scene seems a little far-fetched. Would such two people talk about their hearts like this? Comfort each other? After all, the relationship or relationship between the two has not reached this level yet! As Atobe's young fiancée, Ryoi told Atobe that she would give her a chance. She told Sanada that she liked Atobe Keigo. Seeing this, I knew that the uncle might be cannon fodder, but because of the male protagonist Sanada, I stabilized myself at the time and wanted to say, as long as Sanada is happy, it doesn't matter how much you torture the uncle and make me cry during the process. However, in the end it was because of the past life. Since there is no way to go back, why not forget it? If Lin Chen and Xiang Yibu want to give opportunities to be strong, it seems to be more in line with the "brilliance" in the copywriting! Then, Liangyi was bullied and framed by Takahashi in Hyotei, but she went straight to the cheerleading team and wrote "Sunflower Life" for her. Although this description is super touching, I pray that you will give your uncle to Takahashi! However, as a time-traveling woman, as an indifferent woman you want to portray, something is slightly wrong here! At Tatekai University, Ryoi was looked down upon by Ikeda. What she did at that time was really refreshing to see, but how did the two compete with each other? Seeing the appearance of Mr. 151, I understood that Li Hai Da really would not succeed in winning the title three times in a row! To be honest, I don't like fans who tamper with the plot. Otherwise, don't limit the time to junior high school. You can play freely in high school and college! By the way, there is also the relationship between Kitsune and Takeuchi Asakawa. I think it should be marked as a side story. It will be a little confusing if another person suddenly starts to be the main line. All in all, I think the writing style of this Maotaku is very good, and the description is not bad, but the control of the characters is not comprehensive enough. For example, 151-kun is seriously out of shape. He only sees tennis, but he actually talks to Ryoi about Kirihara's brave pursuit of Seigaku. Mao Tuo needs to think carefully about the princes, because when writing a fanfic, you can't just write about the ones you love, and you still have to follow the plot. Mao Tuo can make an outline before writing a new article, such as the direction of things and roughly what is described in each chapter. It always feels a little unclear and the chapters are confusing. Forgive me for being blunt, but the author's text is too long! I don't know how long the article was stuck in the middle of last October. This makes readers feel so embarrassed and how to continue! Internet King fandoms will have a certain audience. The article lasted for more than 7 months and the word count is less than 12,000 words. I hope you will update it quickly! ——This review is produced by Qianse Xiaozhu|Changpingpu BY Xiaoduo Mo Doudou.

It was the final of the Kanto Tournament between Rikkai University and Aigaku when the master was undergoing surgery. Sanada did not catch up with the master and entered the operating room. In the end, Sanada lost to Ryoma and Rikkai University lost to Seigaku. Later, the master thought that he could no longer play tennis, so he lost his temper and lost his temper. In the end, Sanada slapped him to wake him up. For a master who plays tennis for himself, it is impossible for him to be as calm as the author writes. Even if there are teammates, he will not be like this. The author should finish reading Tennis King before writing. There are many bugs.

Looks good~~~Keep up the good work

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I even want to move my family directly to Russia... It's so hot!!!