I Told You to Go Undercover, Not Turn into a Magical Girl

The indenture is just a setting, but it is indeed a flaw. The flaw is not in the fact that the indenture was signed, but in the fact that the protagonist did not show any will to resist. There is no description of the protagonist's behavior or thoughts in secretly trying to break the indenture. And the undercover agent's salary is directly taken away by the organization?

The indenture is insane! I won't change the star rating until the protagonist is freed from this predicament.

There are many problematic aspects, one of which is the indenture. II. The protagonist's mindset Third, the plot's progression, and the fact that the characters are hiding their identities is truly unsettling to read; well-written versions of this are extremely rare, requiring a very high level of technical skill.

This is the first time I've seen a working person lose money at work in a novel, and the reason is that their boss used the money to buy a handbag. Would the protagonist die if he didn't fawn over her?

Hilarious! The protagonist is so unlucky; even joining a villainous organization can bankrupt him.

It's so good! I'm really afraid it will get banned. Can the author finish it without a bad ending? That's my only request.

Red Stone 😄 Shennong Notes (see follow-up comments) 1. The early scenes involving healing the patient are filled with clichéd lines, many of which are essentially just repackaged versions of the same story. The so-called Magical Girl Association is portrayed as incredibly powerful in the early stages, but a mission requires a newly recruited psychologist, who is just an ordinary person, to…

Something feels off, but it's barely readable. I'll take a closer look once it gets going.

A perfect score! The writing and narration flow smoothly without feeling awkward, and the language is natural yet natural, surpassing 95% of Tomato's books. The pacing is a bit fast, and the emotional development feels somewhat lacking in buildup, but these are minor issues.

The magical girl organization feels too fragmented. First of all, didn't they give out over 500,000? Gu Bingling is too much of a bot. The protagonist couldn't even come up with a good reason to lie to her. Don't they know the various magical girl groups within the organization? How come Gu Bingling doesn't know anyone?