I Told You to Go Undercover, Not Turn into a Magical Girl

The betrayal contract is actually just a setting, but the betrayal contract is indeed the poisonous point. The poison is not in the signing of the betrayal contract, but in the fact that the protagonist does not show the will to resist, even if he secretly searches for the behavioral description or psychological description to cancel the betrayal contract. Or are the wages paid to undercover agents taken away directly by the organization? So I'm working two jobs for nothing? Just accept it? There are also great inconsistencies in behavior and personality. Purely male thinking, purely female thinking, pure male thinking transitioning to female thinking, pure female thinking? Male mind transition. But that's not the case in the book. It's a very vague and awkward way of thinking, with men and women occasionally. In the early stage, most of the male thinking should be retained, but more female thinking is shown. Later, when the female thinking should be more female, male thinking rises.

The betrayal contract is so poisonous, I won't change the star until the protagonist of the betrayal contract is removed and out of trouble.

There are many poisonous points. First, the contract of betrayal 2. The protagonist's mentality 3. The advancement of the plot, and this kind of hidden identity is really uncomfortable to watch. Basically, there are very few good ones. This requires too much technology.

This is the first time in a novel that I see a worker paying for work, and the reason is that his boss used it to buy a bag. Will the protagonist die if he doesn't lick her?

It's so funny, the protagonist is also unlucky, even joining a villain organization can lead to bankruptcy.

It's so good to read, and I'm very afraid of being banned. Can the author finish the book without it being a mess? This is my only request. .

Akaishi [laughs] Watch and comment on Shen Nong's Notes 1. The clichés of the treatment plots in the early stage are repeated, and many of them are basically replaced with new shells; the so-called Magical Girl Association created in the early stage is very naughty, but one task actually depends on the psychiatrist who is a new ordinary person in the team to complete the mission. Gu Geng, who was molded to be the king of strength, fell asleep throughout the whole process and finally vomited blood after using a skill. The protagonist only came back to life after kissing him. After the character was solved, Xia also appeared at a stuck point. How is this different from the police in Long Aotian's script? 2. Gu immediately became a yandere after being untied by the protagonist. According to the previous description, this psychological problem has carried her sister's life and is deeply rooted in her heart. No matter how good the treatment effect and psychological counseling are, it cannot be eradicated immediately. It cannot be solved without leaving any traces. Even if there is a relationship, there must be a buffer period after the cure. However, after this is written, the emotional drama directly enters, making Gu's character look very separated. 3. The setting of the mentor female ghost is acceptable, and the Goblins and Cow Brothers in the original small organization are also acceptable. However, the setting of the succubus chief is really unpalatable. Whether it is the misappropriation of public funds at the beginning or the extortion of money later on, coaxing the protagonist to continue to work as a coolie. On the surface, it seems that he wants to shape her into a woman who loves to tease people and has evil intentions, but now it seems that he can't even tell whether she is good or bad. In essence, it is to use a black contract to threaten employees to go to a strange and dangerous environment to fend for themselves, and perform PUA in the middle to let them continue to work, etc. The author's idea seems to be that this person can be regarded as a positive character, but at present, there is no trace of positive character in him, only the pure bad qualities. If it is whitewashed in the middle and later stages, such as the difficulty of being involuntarily, then I will really laugh with relief [awkward laugh] 4. Continuing from 3. If you are taking the strategy route, you should add some good impressions of it, otherwise there will be many poisonous points in the later development of the emotional line. For example, she knows that the association is a place with many dangers and still threatens the protagonist to go undercover, especially Especially if he is an ordinary person, not to mention the mission, it will be difficult to survive if he is discovered. This is actually not much different from sending him to die, plus the selling contract and becoming a hundred, if it is not a plot line, what a normal person can endure when encountering such a person is this [Like]

I always feel like something is weird, but I can barely read it. I'll take a look again when the length of the article is longer.

Full marks, the writing and narration are smooth without being awkward, and the language is life-like without being awkward. It already exceeds 95% of Tomato books. The pace is faster, and the emotional development is a bit lacking in foreshadowing, but these are minor issues. In books like Tomato, the characters say, "The food you cook is delicious." I really can't stand the tone of voice. Anyway, the writing is smooth, the rhythm, and the plot are not too problematic. As for the subject matter and my own appetite, I think it can get full marks on Tomato.

The sense of fragmentation in the Magical Girl organization is too strong. First of all, didn't I give out more than 500,000? Gu Bingling is too human and the protagonist doesn't find a good reason to lie to her. Don't the various Magical Girl groups in the organization know each other? Why doesn't Gu Bingling know anyone?