This Was Supposed to Be Journey to the West, So How Did It Turn into Type-Moon?

If you're going to write, write properly. Focus on the main plot and the protagonist's growth, and stop dragging in reality, okay? I just couldn't stand the part where the protagonist wanted to give "Brother Zheng" a world map so the whole world would speak Chinese.

Those who cultivate immortality can't beat those who practice martial arts. The protagonist just finished boasting in the first chapter, and then he loses in the next. This protagonist is a bit clownish.

It has too much personal bias, and doesn't feel like a proper Type-Moon fanfiction. The author seems to be indulging in self-gratification.

I always end up expressing my own views on history while I'm writing. #(Sweat)

The biggest problem with this book is the inclusion of personal opinions. It jumps in with whatever comes to mind, and instead of writing about what the protagonist would do, the author writes about what the author would do, causing the protagonist's character to collapse and become intellectually deficient. The original premise was quite good.

There's too much science popularization and humor, which is affecting the reading experience. At this rate, it'll take at least a hundred chapters to get to the synopsis.

Essentially, the Type-Moon universe, having two cosmic-level mythologies, has suppressed the mythological power of other worlds. Forget about the bizarre and fantastical elements of Indian mythology; even our own mythologies are at most Earth-level, and we might even need a subsequent science fiction universe like Cthulhu to represent a cosmic-level mythology (you know what I mean). That's the main point of contention.

You call Qin Shi Huang "Brother Zheng," my charming ancestor, but you suspect Zhang Jiao of having ulterior motives for his rebellion? Have you lost your mind? Having completed nine years of compulsory education, how could you write something like this? You praise Qin Shi Huang, I won't comment, but you say Zhang Jiao is bad? Then I have to stand up and argue with you.

Just focus on writing your book and don't try to insert your own personal opinions.

I wonder if other people can accept these plot points in this book. 1. The Greek gods in pan-human history are not machine gods, but native gods of Earth. 2. The glittering EA wasn't created by a god or a planet. This thing can be built and mass-produced as long as there are blueprints and materials. 3. Sesshouin Kiara's emotions couldn't hold up after absorbing some of the protagonist's power; well, she suffered a backlash. 4. He personally killed Tokiomi Tohsaka, then adopted Rin Tohsaka. Rin, unaware of her father's killer, was tricked into believing that someone else had done it. Rin vowed to take revenge later. The 5th side story depicts Hinakagi's obsession with Xiang Yu within the Lostbelt, culminating in a scene where Hinakagi and Xiang Yu embrace. It's unclear whether other characters can accept this, given that the human-like Hinakagi is the protagonist's wife. The faction the protagonist ultimately created, despite its immense power, feels strangely incongruous. It seems to have little impact on history, more like those lofty, powerful factions in fantasy novels who avoid trouble, as if they possess clairvoyance (past, future, and present vision). They seem to lack basic human decency, focusing solely on results, ignoring the process.