There's Something Wrong with My Apprentice

Sometimes I don't understand why good books are not on the recommendation list, and there are not many good books on the recommendation list.

Poison Road - The poison will not kill you, come and test the poison. If you don't return, you will be poisoned and die.

Too poisonous. If you don't accept the girl, please don't be ambiguous, okay? This kind of thing is the most annoying. That Nandou Palace surnamed Jiang, Xiao Qingling, Fox Girl, Mulin Xue, etc., Like the male protagonist, but they will not accept him, leaving only regrets. If not, don't write a lot of ink. The plot is too bland, and the map keeps changing afterward. The plot is not new and attractive, and it is difficult for people to read it with interest. In addition, it is not impossible to be plain, but the love between the male and female protagonists is not sweet yet. The male protagonist Xiaoyao is actually Xiaoyao. You are so happy. Where is your disciple? He was forced to hide in the world for hundreds of years and was not allowed to go out under the excuse of cause and effect. Others don't have so much trouble with cause and effect. But for an invincible person like you, this will be a problem? After his ascension, Gu Qingying You are being abused, Yue Youruo is running a brothel, Lin Shuyao is having an affair with others, joking with others in the carriage (you are actually very good, that's about it), you are already with the male protagonist, and you still don't feel at ease? You know that the other person is interested, but you still do this. And the fairy world is so open? Aren't the people who get along with Lin Shuyao still ordinary people from the academy? A lonely man and a widow riding in a carriage? You are already a male protagonist, and you still don't know how to keep a distance from people with evil intentions? Can you have a sense of boundaries? Idiot passerby A has evil intentions, shakes hands with Ling Miaosong, touches the back of her hand with his thumb, Miao Song is disgusted, you are so calm as the male protagonist, are you a man? How disgusting! It's because of your sister. Every day you think of all kinds of ways to abuse your apprentice, who is also your wife after all. You just let her go for decades, hundreds of years, without caring at all. You are so happy. In order to create a happy image, you do something very awkward, and the plot will be very awkward. Don't portray for the sake of portraying! Also, the male protagonist gives people the feeling that it is completely unimportant because his wife ran away with someone else. Not to mention the front, we will return to the mortal world later, seal the memories of the other six disciples, and put them in various places. Can you please stop doing such disgusting things? Are you not afraid of running away with others? Yun Muling almost married someone else! There are also some words that the male protagonist said, which express that the female protagonist can be with others as long as she wants to, which is a bit toxic for you. Overall, my feeling is that the love between the male and female protagonists is not that deep, and the author's writing skills are still not good enough. Don't keep mentioning that most of your former confidantes have turned into pink skeletons. This is quite sad. It's okay if you want to write it, but this is a daily article, so try to write it as relaxed as possible. The male protagonist should not keep pinching his brows. If you want to do a unique action, there is no need to do this, just change it. Qiu Mingyue accepted it and ignored it, letting her cultivate on her own. This male protagonist was also speechless. The same goes for his own child, who is simply not his biological child. The male protagonist is really too cold. He no longer has the passion and impulse of his youth, nor does he have the spirit of awe. The edges in his heart have been smoothed by time. It is too boring (at least I don't like it as I have accepted traditional ideas since I was a child). In the face of injustice, if you have the ability but do nothing, you just watch silently, your disciples feel bad, but it is still the same, even though you are invincible, you still don't help, you are just afraid of being contaminated by the cause and effect. Other immortals are not afraid, so what are you afraid of? The so-called carefreeness of the male protagonist. It's still too selfish. Even if you don't care about others, why don't you care about your apprentice? In my opinion, the male protagonist rarely cares about his apprentice's feelings and thoughts. He just lets it go and lets him do whatever he wants. He never takes the initiative to pay attention to his apprentice's heart. Love requires mutual support. (This is just my personal opinion on the male protagonist's character) To be honest, your book should have been finished earlier. It's written too much, and the science and technology style in the back is too inconsistent. Try to maintain a consistent style in the novel, otherwise there will always be a sense of fragmentation, which is incompatible with the style of cultivating immortality. When you get to the end of writing, it feels very messy, as if it has lost its main thread. It is better to finish it as soon as possible. There is no freshness anymore. Anyway, I was poisoned by your book. Maybe the review was a bit emotional, and my head was swollen when I wrote it. In short, it was too poisonous.

Is this used to wake up a person in a dream and make things worse? The subject matter is good, but there is still a lot of room for improvement in Chinese proficiency.

Why are all the women accepted? Isn't it just harem stories? Don't be caught in the trap of master and disciple.

I have only read 5 chapters. So far, I feel that the plot is relatively bland and the routines are still the same. However, I personally feel that the writing is too bland. There is no emotion and it is a bit rushed. I didn't recognize all the names. Almost all the apprentices appeared at once. (Personally, if I'm wrong, kick me)( '-ωก̀ )

It's hard to tell, but I was originally a bit slow at cultivating immortals, but the pace turned out to be surprisingly fast. The protagonist seems to never stop, either looking for that apprentice or this apprentice. It's weird to read, there is no design, just these 7 people in the whole world (more than 10 chapters)

Why not add a label harem? Very very very very

Come on, author! Don't give up. It's very well written. I read it for two or three hours at a time.

Poison Trail: Poison Trail, come and try the poison. Please enlighten me!