Mortals, Explode the Sky Palm Bottle at the Beginning!

1. Can the ultra-long-distance teleportation array be moved at will? Doesn't it need to be positioned and built on spiritual veins? Can it really be activated by a few spirit stones? If so, can I take it with me so that I can run home with it? 2. You force Han Li to give you 5 millennium elixirs a year. If you count 7 50 weeks in a year, it is equivalent to 50 drops a year. One drop is a hundred years, and 50 drops is 5 thousand years. The capitalists are not evil to you, which means Han Li is completely working for you. 3. Lei directly asked you if you have any elixir to save Li Huayuan's wife. You just took out two thousand-year-old plants. Do you think it's appropriate? Whether his wife dies or not is none of your business. In addition, if you contribute one plant to the master, your wealth will make Yuanying jealous. Is there something better? Put yourself in danger. 4. You led Han Li to kill the Black Evil Cult. It was completely childish and the writing was a mess. He knew that the opponent's methods relied on life-saving measures, but he was still stupid enough to take your elixir. 5. Xin Ruyin is very talented, but you, a small foundation-building monk, can't save her. Otherwise, would Han Li still need to find Bingfeng? 6. It ruined a lot of the plot as a whole. Han Li's Qingyuan Sword Technique is gone. How do you reconcile Han Li's elixir formation in the later stage? 4.

What kind of hook and eight things are you writing? The timeline is too xxx. My writing skills are terrible. If it doesn't work, don't write it.

I didn't understand it at the beginning. When he was brought to his cave, Han Li knew that his secret was exposed? Do you treat readers as a force?

Your writing is poor and very verbose. Do you usually talk in such a roundabout way?

The protagonist is like an idiot and doesn't know how to hide his clumsiness

The whole book is full of nonsense, going around and around 😐

The Bloody Forbidden Land is open for only five days

Take a good look at the structure of your writing. Repeated statements that expose negative statements in a way that expresses your opinions seriously affect reading. Do you want to write in a polished way or is your writing style just like that?

The main reason is that my writing style is so poor. I repeat one sentence over and over again and I can't stick to it.

It's well written, but it's very wordy. The author needs to practice his writing skills.