Are You a Druid Who Went to Cultivate Immortality?

First of all, the innovative idea of combining immortality with druidry is very good, and I am quite interested in it. I read it in two days, but there are also many problems: For example, how to harmoniously integrate the two systems? How to explain the existence of the system in the world of cultivating immortals? How to cultivate spiritual pets without becoming popular and Pokémon-like? This is actually the first question. Regarding the issue of world setting and the degree of system integration, after reading this, I felt that this was actually not done well. I also commented on the article and then deleted it. . . I am interested in this article. I spent money to give my opinion that I think is not appropriate. Why should I delete the comment? I have always believed that good authors can identify and absorb readers' opinions. I have read many novels, and I have read many newcomer novels that are now highly rated but were not very popular before. Most of their newcomer novels are not only popular because of their writing and plot, but also their ability to absorb opinions. This is my first book review and the last one. I certainly hope that the author can absorb good suggestions, but in the end it depends on you. I will go on to talk about my ideas that I think can be further improved. Regarding the writing style, I think many of the wordings are too modern, and there are not many descriptions about cultivating immortality. It is like an empty shelf, and the world of cultivating immortality does not have a strong sense of existence. If you change your article to a world view, such as a modern one, you can still write it. Therefore, the basic foundation of the world view has not been laid firmly. You must know that although you have DNF ability settings, you are still cultivating the world of immortality. It's easier for me to imagine the picture after reading a novel, but your description doesn't feel very ancient to me. So I think we can improve the text description and replace some modern words with more oriental mythological descriptions. Then there is the monster pet. It feels like it is really out of the context of the myth of cultivating immortals. It is very Pokémon-like. Look at the skill descriptions. Yes, if you notice, I started to say "skills" instead of "talents and magical powers." What I saw in the article was a bunch of cute pets, such as "Fox me" and "Crow me". . Don't you think it's a very, very Pokémon? It's a kind of intelligent but not too much. I won't wait until the end of writing to form a bond with the mythical beast. By then, the dragon and Kirin will also start to act cute. . Including about formations, realms, common knowledge of cultivating immortals, etc., I think the writing is very general, and it is actually broad and profound. I don't know much about it, but I can understand it, rather than attaching great importance to this ability. However, it is written like a running account, and it is very superficial and contentless. Regarding this point, you can really do more background research, list out the worldview you want in detail, and make it refined and rigorous. Good articles can always withstand scrutiny. I hope you can do better and better. If you won't delete this post of mine.

For a skill, first warm up a wave of super, draw two waves, and say what it is for. After upgrading, each skill must be fully explained, and then continue to talk about its future function. Then for a skill that has not been selected before, you must explain why every time it is upgraded. Why don't you choose? After choosing, the next chapter is the first experience of writing skills, and then how awesome the future will be. I repeatedly muttered to myself, this is just a point, the other plots are almost the same. The only interesting thing may be that the battle has already interacted with pets.

Just saw it on the shelves, it's good. I have seen three books on Druidry and Immortal Cultivation. One is too stupid and was criticized by eunuchs. The other two books are about the two realms and are related to the heavens. They do not conform to the traditional tone of Cultivation of Immortality, and the results are not very good. Your book about the daily life of cultivating immortals and the farming aspect can attract many elderly readers. It feels pretty good, and it would be even better if monastic elements were added. Nowadays, people are practicing the Dharma and not the Tao. They are all underworld cultivators. There are fights and fights in underworld enclosure societies that all revolve around high-level spiritual veins. If you have advanced points in Taoism, you will be able to join in the training of the mind in the world of mortals, natural enlightenment, discussions among Taoist friends, and other Taoism activities. Thereby reducing the demand for spiritual veins. An orderly society evolved from the underworld to cultivate immortality.

It's getting more and more confusing. I didn't expect that the question of why the tree shepherd was chosen lasted almost 5 chapters😥. It's okay to skip and read. I read one chapter every 5 chapters and it doesn't affect the plot.

Druid is the highlight, but the writing is too sincere and contains a lot of psychological activities.

Buzz buzz... (Boss, it's too watery!) Buzz buzz... (Boss, the plot is too dry!) Buzz buzz... (Boss, the writing style is too ordinary!) Buzz buzz... (Boss, can you stop buzzing all the time!) Don't you think it's cute? (Buzz buzz...) Author, do you think this is fun for me? Just once in a while is enough. Is it interesting that you are always like this? Low-level spiritual insects have low IQs and rely on instinct to survive. If you humanize them, what will the second-level spiritual beasts do in the future? Are they smarter than you? Stop plotting like this, and quickly write a protagonist to improve the plot. I've watched a lot of farming dramas. It's the first time I've seen you chatting with little bugs like this in the article. There's a risk of writing a breakdown later on!

The opening chapter describes the various levels of land rented by A, B, C and D. How important spiritual energy is. Without spiritual energy, even spiritual grass cannot survive. He made great determination to rent the second-class spiritual land. After reaching chapter 150, why did you just find a place with no one and no spiritual energy to build a Druid Sanctuary? Planting a lot of spiritual herbs will automatically produce spiritual energy? I look so confused

Just a reminder, I hope you can see it. Try to write as few words as possible in the text, such as "improved ten times or several times." One of the characteristics of writing is imagination. Changing it to "significantly improved" will not only improve the reading experience, but more importantly, let readers use their brains less and feel more. As soon as readers use their brains, the mistakes in the work will be magnified and they will start to find faults. I hope you can see this little trick

Before the foundation was established, the writing was very good. The lower-level monks farmed and practiced their crafts. Each had their own way of living, and overall they were prosperous. However, after the foundation was established, the top leaders began to be demonized, and conspiracy theories darkened the entire world of immortality. An organization that makes weapons with babies and collects corpses of monks is written like a big mastermind behind the scenes in some world, and the leader is called "immortal master". Isn't this just the routine operation of ordinary demon cultivator sects? Everything is done here secretly, why bother to rise to the top of the world to breed and eat people? Are you really that awesome, raising a woolly person? Are you worried that you won't be able to ascend even though you sacrificed all your blood?

Overall, the quality is okay, but it's too typical🤗