I'm in Yellow Maple Valley, and I Have an Equipment Slot!

I must take the Heaven-Building Pill, but what about the Ten Thousand Years Thunder Bamboo? You can't let Han Li give it to you, right? I personally think it's impossible for Han Li's cautious character! Confess about falling out

It looked good from the beginning, and I thought it was a high-quality mortal fanfic. Although there were some flaws, they were not major problems. However, after the 60th chapter, the flaws were a bit big. For example, the protagonist was besieged and killed by the Qianzhu Cult, and Han Li secretly watched the show to find out. Then the protagonist gave Han Li a skill because he sympathized with Han Li for being a fake spiritual root. Then he explained that it was for investment, so why don't you find some reasonable reason to give it away? Li Huayuan and Hong Fu both decided that Han Li and Dong Xuan'er would become a Taoist couple, but Han Li could directly refuse Li Huayuan and even agreed to it, and even asked the protagonist to go back to Yanjiabao and leave it to the protagonist. Is it reasonable? Moreover, the protagonist Ji Zhu had said before that he would not participate in Yanjiabao's mess. However, when Li Huayuan handed the matter over to him, he didn't refuse. Later, Han Li and Dong Xuan'er went together, and the protagonist went alone. Then the protagonist actually didn't take the opportunity to refuse, let alone go, and didn't sneak away. It was really wrong. It was ridiculous to kill Wang Chan. It wasn't like he was killed instantly by a sneak attack, but he was killed by waves of skills without using the Nascent Soul's back-up skills. When fighting the Blood Jade Spider, Han Li had just accepted the protagonist's skills without giving anything. The protagonist even vowed to have no future life due to inner demons. Here he began to have inexplicable suspicions that the protagonist would kill him and silence him. He didn't doubt it even if he didn't say it. After receiving such a huge benefit, he also eliminated the suspicion of the benefit. At least he had some trust. He really had to deepen his suspicious character!

The protagonist is a mortal, and he can enter the cave of a foundation-building monk at any time? Can you still open the storage bag? Will you practice even if you get the exercises? Even if the protagonist is a casual cultivator!

The most taboo thing for mortals to write about is a nanny, and then the nanny leaves you with exercises, etc., And there is no such thing as an old one. Unless it is a cool article, the main reason is that you are not invincible.

If you like to watch the nanny stream, you can watch it. You may not know what happened. Let me tell you briefly. The Qianzhu Sect attacked the protagonist's cave in order to chase Brother Lin (who escaped into the protagonist's cave), but Han Li watched in secret and did not help. Afterwards, Lei Wanhe They come to the rescue, and then there are these two pictures. First, he laments that both of them are fake spiritual roots, and then the protagonist says that he has empathy, so he gives Han Li all the skills and stuff. The key is that Han Li has always been vigilant and guarded against the protagonist. Isn't this licking? I have no problem with you and Han Li being on good terms, but it's really unbearable to rush to lick him very suddenly. To be honest, even if you don't do anything, with Han Li's luck and character, he can achieve great success. I came to see the protagonist of the fanfic, not to see the protagonist of the original work, Han Li. Unless you write in the introduction that the nanny licks the dog, insisting on writing such a plot is disgusting to readers, bad review! Moreover, the author's word count behavior in the first few chapters was too serious. He had to re-write the titles of the first few chapters. It was very painful to listen to the book. The reason for the high score is probably because mortals really have nothing to write about.

Why does it get a score of 8.6? The author feels that he has no outline of his own and keeps following the main line, and the writing is particularly disgusting. As a time-traveler, the protagonist knows the plot, and what to do after various analyses, but he just doesn't do it or prepare, and he doesn't know whether he's missing the word count or what.

Not ruthless enough, you can't be ruthless in cultivating immortality. The Holy Mother is always sick, and others forcefully threaten you for your alchemy skills. The male protagonist said that his deeds do not matter his heart. Although he was threatened, people cared about me anyway, and I owed him a favor. I vomited when I saw it. The Mu Zhen Sixian Palace all use each other to threaten the male protagonist. The male protagonist said that he gives more benefits to others. This is his character. He gives more to others for his own character. He is not a cheap person, so every time he threatens to use himself to make elixirs, he must give more to others. Some, others were threatened by others, and others saw themselves as being threatened. They asked the male protagonist to be careful when refining the elixir, and the male protagonist had to help refine the elixir. They lacked their own interests and "cared" about the male protagonist. The male protagonist was moved, saying that he did not care about his deeds, and he was moved😭😭😭😭. Remember this favor! ! ! How disgusting. Can't these threats be written in my notebook? Looking for an opportunity to kill Fu Yibo, Mu Zhenren forcibly threatened the male protagonist to make alchemy. The male protagonist took it like a dog and then refined seven pills and took one? Why doesn't the male protagonist package the system and give it away? "They are just threatening the male protagonist" "How about the author give the system away" "I don't care about my deeds, my character is like this" "Threat me, I treat you politely, and I owe you a favor"

Half of the chapter contains repeated equipment attributes. It doesn't matter if it's written like this before it's put on the shelves. But it's disgusting if it's written like this after it's put on the shelves.

The author doesn't have much new stuff. He studied Qingyuan Dayan, came into contact with Nangong Wan, entered Yellow Maple Valley, and paid homage to Li Huayuan. He will probably follow the original work in the future. This is a low-level writing method for a fan.

Good-looking, very good-looking, super good-looking