The Wizard Begins with Occlumency

First point, if the protagonist's aristocratic fellow countryman is not the future heroine, to be honest, it would be very boring to write about her teasing the protagonist in various ways! Second point, since Goldfinger is so powerful, the protagonist is really not in a hurry to develop it, but is really focused on independent learning. Is this appropriate? I sincerely advise the author to change a few sentences in the two chapters and change the first lottery to a welfare gift experience, so only one gold coin is needed. From the second lottery, only energy currencies (such as magic stones) are recognized, so the protagonist cannot quickly develop cheats and can only study hard. This makes sense. Otherwise, when the protagonist is selected as an apprentice, it would be easy to borrow some gold coins from the viscount, right? That nobleman must also be happy to make some investment in connections! After all, there was only one apprentice in his territory, and he was a highly qualified apprentice.

It's so watery that there's no ups and downs at all when reading it, and it doesn't affect you when you skip it. What attracts readers to this book is that it has two golden fingers and a wizard theme. Goldfinger cannot appear frequently, but you have no sense of existence at all. The cards you draw do not directly improve your strength, which cannot lead to rhythm and enjoyment. It's also boring to have a wizard write it. You can only be said to be a scholar and researcher but not a wizard. It can only be said that it is mediocre and has no characteristics. The imitation fails to imitate the essence and does not write anything new.

I just know what readers don't like, so I insist on writing something, and then I say that new people will change it when they get started, but they don't know what they are changing...

Originally, the subject matter, plot, and character settings were all very good, but as a result, the world view became bigger and bigger, and the author couldn't control it. The more I look at it, the more awkward it becomes. The stand-up and the handling of the relationships between many characters made me feel really speechless. The protagonist was very serious in the early stage, but later he started to make jokes, especially the name of the team organized by the school, "Freedom to Do Anything", which was really ridiculous and very annoying. Your style of painting has changed so quickly, why don't you think about the readers? If you fucking want freedom, just choose "freedom", and also choose "freedom to do anything". To sum up, the author's writing skills are not good enough and he can't control it.

The character is very toxic. If you want to write scientific research articles, you should focus on scientific research articles. Some disgusting conflicts that are forced into the mix are really annoying. Let the girl from the same hometown die, okay?

I really like wizarding novels, they are sensible, mysterious, weird, and proceed with caution. In the end, if we don't explore the truth, what kind of heroine will we have? It's also very annoying. The most taboo thing in wizard-style novels is women's nonsense. You are here to explore and climb. The world is dangerous and strange, and various methods are endless. Do you want to die on a woman's belly? Can't you control your sperm?

If Occlumency allows reason to gain the upper hand in thinking, it won't be like playing house with a group of little trash. Why are the protagonists in other books arrogant but not dead? Background. We are willing to supply only when there is demand. From the previous dozens of chapters, it is obvious that the wizarding world is cultivating talents for invasion? Or resist another world? There is a demand for talents. The more talented you are, the more talents will invest in you. Are the bosses in the wizarding world not as good as the bosses in the real world? Don't be ridiculous. With the same conscious thinking and the powerful computing power provided by mental power, hundreds of years of achievements in the real world are just the results of decades of research in the eyes of others. After so many years of development, do you still regard them as old-fashioned things? With great talent, there are so many provocative scenes with Pepper? And everyone knows that the more exposed you are to the public eye, the harder it is to be targeted. The targeting methods that are exposed will only be extremely obvious, and only then can you develop better. Secondly, after so many years of memory, with Occlumency, complete memory, and a healthy body, why don't you start automating it before others understand it? To be honest, if the author is just good at writing or has not changed his thoughts, it will be fine. But for a person who has memorized for so many years, he is still being manipulated by a group of brats. Isn't it ridiculous? Since you are cautious + rational, you should also understand that every villain will waste a lot of development time. You are holding yourself back and complaining that "meditation cannot keep up with knowledge." Since you have to write a paper, you have to be slapped in the face, and you are still laughing and joking with the president on the other side... If you don't want to get into trouble, just hide in the laboratory. How much will you remember in a month or two? Also, that Jasmine is not a very talented person, right? Isn't it ridiculous to care for others when you can't take care of yourself, and even claim that Occlumency can make you sane? Complaining about progress while being half-hearted at the same time, is this very different from college students complaining about lao lao and skipping classes and sleeping at the same time? I can understand why natives behave like this when they get cheats. You, a time traveler, behave like this... It's hard to comment.

The creativity and plot description are both okay. I don't understand what the author was thinking, writing the heroine like this is too alienating. Can't you just let nature take its course? Must be forcibly suppressed.

Aren't wizards equal exchanges? Why teach others spells for free? Giving dividends to others for free is still like green tea. It looks so disgusting!

The subject matter is good, but when I saw the female protagonist, I couldn't stand it. It feels a bit frustrating to watch.