I Ascend to the Throne of God with Arcane Magic

It's not attractive, not enough fun, the plot is too slow, too suppresses the improvement of strength, and there are too many plots and introductions in the early stage where novices are pecking each other.

Generally. I can't understand why you, a noble and a mage, would go to the mercenary union. This paragraph is written inexplicably. Let's put it this way, you've skipped the entrepreneurial stage and you still have to go out and do the work yourself. It feels like a Japanese comic has entered my mind, and everything is a Japanese-style Western fantasy. If you want to gain experience, meditation may be more suitable. Maybe the protagonist is set to be a down-and-out noble, so it would be okay if you arrange for the protagonist to go to the mercenary union. There are also players. I haven't seen any mention of players coming yet. But according to some players, something invented by the Fourth Natural Disaster will be snatched away and used as a dog. You can even invent a car, and selling it to any game guild is better than being taken over by an NPC and used as a dog. Is it possible that immortal players can't defeat mortal NPCs? Of course, it also depends on how high you set the limit for players. If players will come, then it will be a failure for you to join the mercenary guild. Wouldn't it be better if you just take advantage of the players? It's not like I just started a business and don't have resources.

It's too watery. What's the plot? Let's talk about the plot first, the time travel at the beginning. After a whole chapter of the plot introduces the current situation and gives the protagonist panel data, one chapter is gone. The second chapter, after introducing the current background world and the protagonist's talents, is all useless nonsense. The second chapter is gone again. Good guy, most of the three golden chapters are wasted. The third chapter is gone. I opened a small copy without thinking and took a chance to perfect the talent golden finger. The third golden chapter was scrapped. The fourth chapter, after describing the background, introduced one or two characters, was gone again. The fifth chapter went to a copy, introduced one or two characters to show one's identity, and wrote about one's savings, but was gone again. The following plot chapters are so dull after reading several times. I am not saying that you are contradictory! What's your plot? In normal writing, contradictions appear first, making the protagonist have the desire to become stronger, and then the golden finger appears when he is most helpless. Then the plot after that is to find ways to become stronger, and then clean up the villains after becoming stronger, and then contradictions appear. The contradictions can be anything! It doesn't necessarily mean Hedong in 30 years and Hexi in 30 years! It can also be the crisis of the protagonist, the strong purpose of pursuing power, and what about you? What are you writing about? When I go up, I feel better than you

Speechless, there are four major stages in the legend of bronze, silver, and gold, and then the main character, a fallen viscount noble, and the bodyguard are golden warriors... I dare not imagine how chaotic the combat power will be later.

I have read 418 chapters so far, and I can no longer stand the 60 chapters I paid for. As a group portrait article, it is already third-rate, because I can only see the glory of the protagonist, and the other characters are basically more instrumental than independent. As a fourth natural disaster article, I didn't see any interesting players or activity designs. The players were just backgrounds and tools, and they were at the bottom of the heap. As for harem novels, they are all templates. Apart from their appearance, there is no heroine that makes people shine. They are all dependents who are strong on the outside but weak on the inside, which is very boring. In my opinion, this harem story is very obscene, a kind of arrogant obscenity. As a game adventure article, the game settings and data are very detailed, but the adventure process is very boring and has no waves at all. It is smooth and smooth all the way, but the narrative and description cannot arouse the reader's emotional fluctuations. As a business and farming article, there is no emphasis on description, it has nothing to do with it, it is purely background. A simple appraisal shows that a wave submerged in the sea of ​​books will probably be invisible soon. If the author feels that the review is just right, you can also read my suggestions and look at the emphasis of the author's description. This article is probably about the harem. As a reader, I suggest that the author improve the character of the heroine in the book. Queen, you can write about her fear and resistance, but you should also write about her responsibility and determination. As for the vampire, you can write about her laziness and absurdity, but you should also describe her growth and learning. French girls, since they are socially fearful and dependent, they should naturally be uneasy (desire to possess the protagonist) and extreme (hungry for eyes) Pirate Goose, since you are an elder, you should behave like an elder. If you are a female goose, just be a female goose. Don't engage in any nurturing system.

The male protagonist deliberately does strange things, and then he is noticed by the female protagonist who hides his identity. The female protagonist becomes interested in the male protagonist. The female protagonist's identity is not ordinary. What's particularly ridiculous is that the protagonist knows that he will be assassinated in a few months and still doesn't make the effort to upgrade. (Family members, can you recommend a book in which the protagonist concentrates on leveling up?)

The setting is good but the author is not good at it. I want to write about a harem but don't write about the emotional line. I don't want to write about the emotional line but I have to have a harem. If I don't write about the emotional line, I write the plot. However, the plot is watery and very bland. Apart from the early setting and a little emotional line, it is useless without the emotional line at the end.

Just after time travel, when he met a woman, he started to show off and show his differences. The original owner had a legendary guard, but was easily assassinated in the game background. The protagonist went to a college, and as a viscount, he was provoked and forced by commoners. Moreover, he was not a particularly talented commoner. In the mage college, some commoners with poor conditions and backgrounds dared to say that the college should not recruit nobles to rob their resources! Looking at the beginning, both the protagonist and the supporting characters are complete. However, the author's main goal is to listen to advice and not speak harshly. Some of the poisonous points mentioned in the comments were later avoided. After that, the plot became much better. There are some flaws, but I can feel that the author is getting smoother as he writes.

Even the underlying settings are full of problems and bugs. The experience of upgrading all skills to one level is doubled. How many digital writers are needed after upgrading to level ten? The author has no idea at all? Will a small fireball be able to open up the parallel universe by then? The author is also a piece of cake. The threshold for this industry is still too low.

I just can't figure it out. Why do you have to save experience? Isn't it good to upgrade level by level? You have to save it and upgrade dozens of levels at once.