Arcane Origins

I feel like the world you write about is a world where people cannibalize people, and people are not treated as human beings. You bring real democratic equality to them. I think it's a big failure. You talk to them about equality and freedom. Fair and impartial. Instead, you tied your own feet. Some of the things you want to do are constrained by your reasons and the concepts you put forward. It is a huge failure. There are also people who are shrinking from the beginning and trying to do big things. How can there be no sacrifice? Yes, you value your soldiers very much. What you mean is that your elites should not be sacrificed in some necessary wars, but baby, baby, baby, in the end, they are not willing to do anything. Baby push forward. Fight. There are sacrifices. And what I said, gentleness. As a protagonist, you should never be gentle. Those Crocodile People are too gentle. Do you think those elders are too much of a hindrance? Don't you think those smart people are too much of a hindrance? What you want is the nation of crocodiles, not those smart people. If you need some highly respected people, wouldn't you just support one? You can rest assured that it is in your own hands. However, the democracy you proposed restrains you. If you are not allowed to do this, you cannot do assassinations or anything like that. Don't always be a good person, okay?

In a large family, the only son in the family has an unknown disease. He keeps eating every day but is losing weight day by day. The parents saw that the child was losing weight, so they asked doctors everywhere to see the child, but no one could figure out why. It happened that a Taoist priest passed by and told the family that there were two worms in the child's belly, one green and one red, three feet long, with crowns on their heads. They were named Red Lady and Green Lady. Everything the child ate was taken away by these two worms. If you want to save the child, you can only feed arsenic to fight poison with poison, so that the insects can be poisoned to death. The parents think this method is outrageous. What should they do if their children are poisoned to death by feeding them arsenic? The Taoist priest replied that the heads of these two worms have reached the throat, and the poison fed to them will not enter the child's body at all, but remember not to feed the child anything else within three days, otherwise the child's life will be in danger. The parents were dubious, but felt distressed to see their child's sallow complexion, so they agreed. The Taoist priest ordered: "Find a dark room with the doors and windows closed so that no light can penetrate, and let the child not eat for a day. On the second day, make two meatballs with beef wrapped in arsenic and let him swallow them. The red lady and the green lady will definitely come after they have been hungry all day. Grab the meatballs. The next three days are the most critical, because the two bugs will be poisoned in the young master's belly, so it will be very uncomfortable. But no matter what, you can't let him out, let alone feed him, otherwise he will definitely die." The housekeeper immediately arranged for someone to find a room, and covered the door and windows with iron sheets so that no light could penetrate. The mother ordered someone to prepare a table of meals for the child. The old couple watched their son wolfing down the food and thought that this might be his last meal. They couldn't help but secretly wipe their tears while watching. After the meal, the child was put into a dark room. Just after half an hour, he started clamoring for food. The father ordered his servants not to send food under any circumstances. The child was crying and fussing in the room. He was so hungry that he just gnawed on the chair. When the servants heard the noise, they rushed in and took away everything they could chew. A whole day has passed and it's time to feed the meatballs. The father hurriedly ordered his servants to open the door. When he looked inside, his heart was broken. He saw that the child's little body was covered with bruises and his expression was haggard. He held the meatball and lingered next to his son for a long time. With one last cruel move, he put the poison-wrapped meatball into his son's mouth. When the son saw the meatballs, his eyes immediately lit up and he swallowed it in one gulp. After eating, he looked at it eagerly, hoping for something else to eat. The father stared at his son for a long time, stomped out of the room, and ordered the door to be closed immediately. He was afraid that if he looked at him any longer, he would not be able to hold on any longer. He thought to himself: In just three days, in three days, his son will be fine. As soon as the child was fed meatballs, he suffered from unbearable abdominal pain. He hit things in the house as if he were going crazy and kept shouting. The parents felt distressed, but had no other choice but to lock their child in the room and ignore him. This continued for two days. On the third day, the child's yelling suddenly disappeared. The parents were shocked and ran to the door to ask. They only heard the child weakly reply that he was hungry, which made him feel uncomfortable. At this time, the father had completely forgotten what the Taoist priest said. Looking at his son who was so angry, he immediately ordered someone to prepare food. As soon as he saw the food, there was a glint in his eyes. After taking a bite, he immediately became more energetic. After a while, the entire table of food was eaten. As a result, when the parents went to see the child the next morning, they found that the child's eyes were red, bleeding from all the orifices, and he had expired. The parents were heartbroken and took their child's body to report the Taoist priest to the county government, saying that the Taoist priest had killed their child. The Taoist priest complained that there were indeed worms in the child's stomach. The county magistrate thought that the Taoist priest was talking nonsense and asked him what evidence he had. The Taoist priest replied that if it could be proven that there were worms in the child's belly, he would be cleared. The county magistrate agreed, so the Taoist priest took out a dagger and cut the child's throat vertically. In an instant, two insect heads, one green and one red, came out. When the parents saw it, their eyes went dark and they cried out that they regretted it. The Taoist priest explained that if the bug is eaten before it is poisoned, the poison will be expelled from the body, and the child will be poisoned to death.

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Everything has to be explained once. Whether the protagonist or the supporting character does something, they have to explain it in one sentence, and explain their identity again. Then use the world view to explain the character's behavior, and then compare it with the interpersonal environment of the earth. That's not all. I also like to use "such as" to compare the protagonist or this supporting character with other characters. As a result, just explaining one action or one sentence of the protagonist or supporting character would take hundreds of words.

There is too much nonsense. As I write and write, I start to talk nonsense.

Too watery. Leave.

By Chapter 84, my IQ started to drop when I met a woman!

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Likes to stand on the moral high ground and condemn others In Chapter 48, Sir Burton said that the Andes used to burn, kill and loot, and their relatives were killed, just to kill the Andes. I originally thought it was pitiful that the Andes were captured and used as slaves, but the result was nothing more than a struggle for living space and resources between races. The protagonist said that Burton's soul was twisted by hatred. What would happen to you if it were you? Chapter 103: Solo City had a conflict with a noble heir. They tried to get the slave owner to kill the seriously injured gladiator after the competition, leaving the protagonist without treatment or autopsy. The protagonist was still asking why they had the right to do this. You have nothing to say when you save people, but why do you dissect other people's corpses for medical research, and don't let others keep the whole body after death? This is what I've seen so far. To be honest, the main character is a bit disgusting.

This book can be said to be very smooth, the author obviously has a certain literary foundation, and the events are compact. But there are some low-level mistakes: all descriptions serve the plot. For example, there is a paragraph in the article about the father who attacked the grain and grass. It's completely unnecessary. It can't replace the atmosphere. In a small-scale conflict, this kind of thing can't explain anything. It's a useless effort. (Just a chestnut... Of course, it is not unreasonable to show that someone is rich...) Although the character creation cannot be said to be top-notch, it can be said to be good in online articles. However, we must be careful not to repeat it. Each character should have an independent personality. There are certain problems at this point, and there are not many places that highlight the character, such as appearance and clothing. The worldview of this article is well shaped, and the relationships between nobles are clearly explained. Each noble has an independent background, which can be said to be very successful. And it is constantly laying the groundwork for the rest of the story. Whether it is the revival of spiritual energy or dragons and elves, they may appear later. It all depends on the author, so I won't comment too much. ----------I am the dividing line (づ ●─● )づ Let's talk about the failure. The character growth is too smooth. No matter what, the Eternal Night Army can always win. This will be a kind of fatigue and no freshness. No matter what, it is an ironclad rule that a novel protagonist always wins. But when it's time to "lose," we still have to "lose." Having too many and bloated characters is also a problem. It's not that I can't remember them, but it's still necessary to compromise high-level characters (let alone bloody). But if this is an invincible article, just pretend I didn't say it. ------That's all, personal opinion, don't criticize me if you don't like it, if you criticize me, I will criticize you to death.