One Piece: Kizaru is About to Show Off Again

The rhythm is obviously relaxed and cheerful, but since it follows the plot, it still has to occasionally restore the atmosphere of certain situations. There are a few more suggestions that I hope Chenglan will pay attention to. 1. Kizaru usually calls Akainu Sakaski, Mr. Sengoku Sengoku, and Mr. Zefa Zefa. Ordinary soldiers don't call Kizaru "General", they usually call him by his first name/code name "Mr." 2. Pay attention to restoring the personalities of other characters. It is best to do some homework on the abilities and moves to avoid making obvious mistakes. This is very important to reduce the sense of dissonance. For example, the lasers emitted by Pacifist and Kizaru are called lasers instead of auroras. Pirates have the concept of teleportation and calling flash is not very good. 3. The protagonist has traveled through time. Although he knows a lot about pirates, he has integrated into the familiar world too quickly. He must have never killed anyone in the real world, right? But what about being on behalf of Kizaru and doing something or witnessing something? Describing mood changes and changes in mentality will make the story more realistic, right?

It feels like watching the original work

Kizaru has that indifferent attitude, but the author, you are the Unkai Pirate King, right? Can you get rid of all those mindless words? You should write a story where you know everything, and then make trouble from time to time.

Are you copying the anime from Kizaru's perspective?

I don't even know what it's about. He's obviously a time traveler, but he behaves just like the real Kizaru. It's just like the original text, except that the protagonist is Kizaru.

I really don't get used to the three generals calling each other by code names. Why are they using their names?

First of all, the author is very good at writing. It is completely based on the original work. You are allowed to add some restrictions to imitate Kizaru, but you cannot be the same as the original work. This is completely imposed. Here is a reference to a novel written by Zabuza, which is indeed written according to the seventh class. The next step is that I don't want to read it at the beginning, senior All fans of One Piece know: when Roger was executed, Sengoku had not yet taken over as marshal, Ace was not yet born, and Ace and Luffy were from the same era, but the author wrote that Luffy went to sea three years after Roger was executed? You can search on Baidu and you will find that this is completely unreasonable. It is recommended to read more about One Piece.

It's the same as not writing it. It's the same as the original work. There's no sense of existence in it. Nothing has changed. The plot is just like the original work. It's better to watch anime.

Finally, someone wrote about Kizaru, but what he wrote was stupid

I can't stand the second chapter anymore, this first person interspersed