Marvel Administrative Officer

D4C JOJO Part 7: Stand-in for US President Fannie Valentine

I thought it was directly the president. By the time the protagonist becomes president, Purple Sweet Potato Spirit has already finished snapping his fingers.

Look at the picture! Come on, author, come on, come on, come on

What's the use of having no strength? Isn't it going to be gray?

Wow, such an unexpected subject matter, I hope the author can stick to it. ...Update... After reading Chapter 38, I found that the author's writing style is not very mature yet. The author has poor control over the description of his characters. For example, when Coulson first appeared, the author described him as middle-aged. Then when the protagonist met Coulson, he described him as young Coulson, which is inconsistent. Combining the movie background with the comic setting, the book is set in 2000. At that time, Coulson should be in his thirties and in his prime, which is incompatible with youth and middle age. The dialogue between the characters in the text is too "Chinese". When we watch American dramas or movies, the subtitles are very straightforward translations, without "um" or "getting to the point." American English feels very casual and straightforward. Such modal particles and too many idioms will make it difficult for readers to relate, and it will look weird anyway. Finally, there are some descriptions of the characters' actions. I cannot accept the action of "touching the nose👃" at all. It is very unhygienic and against the rules. A person who aspires to be the president must always pay attention to his own image, and a person from a big family will not be allowed to do such an action by their upbringing. So please don't imitate other novels where people of all ages and gender touch their noses. This is a very bad habit and will only make readers think that your writing is immature and monotonous without your own uniqueness. ...Update... See chapter seventy-three. Still can't avoid all the American comic book routines, although the "President" aspect is good. If you listen to "Teacher Wang" multiple times, I don't understand that you already know the plot, and you use the video of the parents being killed to trade and move the company. Don't you think it's a big deal? And then the word "lovable bastard" is very confusing. If you know someone's character in advance, and then you are teased by someone, you just let him wait for a few hours and then say to yourself, "Forget it." At this point, I really can't escape the too much description of the protagonists of the movie. First of all, it's the X-Men. I don't know much about it, so it doesn't matter. Now that Wade is here, since he can't listen to nonsense, he still pays such a high price to suffer. To be honest, with more than one million US dollars in 2004, how many people can you hire? Just to follow the plot of the movie and find fault for myself. Finally, I went to Shitadako. It was okay to watch the movie, but I didn't feel anything. Then the novel had the same character setting. Please don't kneel down and lick it when the protagonist is so rich. It's annoying to read too much! Finally, the writing seems to have improved a lot. Good luck, author!

In Marvel. Being president is a dangerous profession. Useless. Marvel President. All controlled by Hydra. You know the plot. Don't say anything else. Take advantage of family connections. Get some technology and some genes, wouldn't it be delicious? A finale like this is also cannon fodder. What did you write?

What the hell is it that shows system flow and no cheat?

I have never seen this kind of subject matter, I hope you can write it well tj

The whole person was so embarrassed. The protagonist's sister was killed by the enemy in front of the protagonist, and he was let go. He put the overall situation first. I don't know how the author's brain is. The protagonist threatened the protagonist with his sister and asked the protagonist to let him escape. The protagonist agreed to let him go. Then, when he ran away, the protagonist's sister killed him smoothly. I watched it for fun. Can you write it? Can't you find a high school student to help you write it?

It's not bad. I've read more than 300 chapters, but there are a few things I don't like. First, the protagonist is too weak. Second, there aren't many available people around the protagonist. The three protagonists' subordinates are a bit weak.