The Immortal King

It's so messy, your plot is so painful to watch.

The front is still pretty, but the back is too messy. There is also a lot of room for development in the settings of the Diode Spirit Root in the early stage. As a result, some messy settings were added and it looked very messy.

Obviously, this book has an audience. The strange world view and protagonist in the book can attract some book lovers who like to try new things. But there was a good idea, but the author failed to express it completely. The first hundred chapters I read were more like an outline than a novel! Many book friends must have also discovered that the protagonist's progress is too fast. Not long after he has just established the foundation, he can already face the remnant soul of the immortal. This is a serious collapse of combat power. And judging from the article, it doesn't necessarily take a year for the protagonist to go from Qi training to foundation building, there are only a few dozen chapters in between. Your upgrade speed can only be matched by novice protagonists like Tang San and Xiao Yan, but they created their own world, and you are a suture monster, born out of mortals and immortal cultivators. So I suggest that if this book is not very good or you can't continue writing it, please use the first hundred chapters as an outline and write a new book. You can create a different world by yourself, and the initial combat power does not need to be too high. There are only a few levels above Nascent Soul, and you are facing the Immortal directly. It's weird no matter how you look at it, right? If you can carefully polish your outline and enrich your details, you can actually write a big world like Chen Dongbi's. Even the order can be changed, for example, the attack on Xianzhou, the arrival of the fake prince, and the face of the remnant soul of the immortal are postponed to the later stage. Wouldn't it be better to face it after the protagonist becomes Yuanying, or even at a higher level?

Not bad, it's so well written! It doesn't have the ghostly or fairy-like smell of other fans, and it doesn't look like it's crazy as soon as you start it. It's good to go step by step.

The writing is not bad, but the protagonist is too stupid. The protagonist is purely subjective and idealistic, but his will is still so unstable. He is too swaying and looks stupid. People who cannot achieve a closed loop with their own logic cannot think normally at all. The author took care of him and did not go crazy and explode and die. The concept of the plot and the laughs are actually quite good, but the protagonist is a bit stupid. To be honest, the protagonist is not as good as his master in this regard, and He Niansheng is more like a protagonist.

After reading a few chapters, this sect also has indicators for gathering corpses? If the person in charge fails to meet the target, he will face punishment. Is this sect a professional wholesaler of corpses? It's funny... I don't know where the high score comes from?

If you brush the points, Shen Nong tastes all kinds of herbs. Why

It couldn't have been written by AI, it's a mess. To be honest, if you think it's good, it's just because you have a mental problem.

After being convinced, just finish the book and then become a eunuch?

When did the author change the title of the book (ง •_•)ง