The Big Brother Bit His Little Darling Until She Cried, and the Yandere Tycoons Outside Went Mad

This book is nearing its end, around 40,000 words. I might update a little more each day for the next few days.

It's absolutely awful. I'm speechless. How can the male lead be so depraved? He never treats the female lead like a human being. I want to see forced love, not female abuse. Is this even a male-oriented novel? How can someone like this be the male lead? It makes me incredibly angry. I'm truly speechless. How bizarre.

Um, I didn't quite get used to the later parts, so I gave up.

I'm out of ideas. I originally wanted to focus on the emotions in the story, but the tone has already been set and I can't change it all at once. The outline still needs to be adjusted, and I haven't even finalized the outline for the new book yet. My mind is a mess. Whatever, I'll just stay up all night working on the plot, bracing myself for the worst. If all else fails, I'll take a leave of absence and stay home to write the novel!

My darlings, first, I want to apologize for the lack of updates these past few days without explaining why. The truth is, I was a bit overwhelmed lately, dealing with a lot of things and hitting a roadblock. I've recovered a bit in the last few days, and I've seen everyone's feedback in the comments section. I've deeply reflected on this book, and indeed, there were many illogical parts and logical problems in the beginning. Plus, the constant revisions resulted in many details not being handled well. More importantly, all the plot points were driven by events rather than emotions. I've been carefully considering the difference between using events and emotions to drive the plot these past few days, and I've realized my shortcomings. Starting today, I will resume normal updates, and subsequent chapters will primarily use emotions to drive the plot. Please read carefully... Please take a look at the differences from the previous ones. If you find any problems, please provide feedback promptly. I will carefully consider everyone's thoughts and strive to improve. As for the previous content, since I'm about to reach 300,000 words, I really can't change it anymore. I need to see the data. If this doesn't work out, it might be finished, but the author will immediately start a new book. The next book will be better based on the experience of this one, still using a combination of mandatory and competitive elements. If I'm lucky enough to pass the test, I will apply to the editor again to see if I can revise the previous content. A salute to every reader who has read my book, I love you all more than you can imagine! (Because I really wanted to tell you all this, I'm posting a chapter to let you know first. The next chapter will be posted tonight. I'll start writing after posting this one!)

Chapter 42: Lin Shuyue's arm is pierced by a steel bar and she is waiting for surgery. It was already difficult to stay calm when the villain suddenly appeared and grabbed the stretcher, but then he tried to pull the steel bar out of her hand to threaten the female lead. Were all the medical staff around just going to watch? And the female lead survived 18 years in an orphanage, right? It's been mentioned before that she suffered a lot of bullying; it wouldn't make sense for her to not have any cunning. She just borrowed 200,000 yuan to save her life, and after being so easily frightened, she's about to give it to the villain? Couldn't she at least use a little bit of wit? And then there's the third brother who, when angry, attacks the police, punching them twice. Isn't that a bit too rational? Later, the eldest brother arrives to save the day and just shoots them twice. Is there no law here? (Horrified) Shen Du's feelings are also ambiguous and lack any foreshadowing. The female lead relies on him, trusts him, and then falls in love. The author's ability in this area is really weak. If they didn't know how to write emotional development, they could have written it so that the love started before the story even began. The way it's written now just makes me think that Shen Du is very casual, even a bit like a white knight. It makes me feel that this emotion has no foundation and is just a protective instinct that could dissipate at any time. The villains also made me wonder if this was a 26-year-old book. Did they really need to resort to some vulgar plot points to drive the story forward? Both the female lead and the villains loved to use the word "dirty" to describe girls' bodies, and the older brother did the same. What exactly was dirty? Does being violated automatically make someone dirty? Shouldn't the perpetrator be the one who's dirty? This constant promotion of these values ​​made me very uncomfortable. All the male protagonists here seem to have superhuman abilities, especially the third brother. I've lost count of how many punches he's given in the meager forty or so chapters I've read. The author's writing style fails to capture expressions and movements, making it a nightmare to read. When he's excited, it's described as "all the blood in my body is pumping up," and when he's scared, it's described as "all the blood is flowing backward, and my vision is going black." It makes me feel like every emotion is expressed in the same way, without any nuance. I strongly suggest she take some further studies, find some good input to hone her writing skills, and tighten up the plot. The character development is too slow and even a bit off-track. Right now, the female lead gives me the impression that she relies on others for everything. Even if she has a desire for freedom, she completely lacks the ability to achieve it. At one point, I felt that her future growth would only be a Truman Show story supported by these people. I've read plenty of stories where the most popular character forces the female lead to suffer, but I haven't read one with this pure, old-school feel in a long time. Sigh, the only two things keeping me reading are Lin Shuyue and the second brother. If the second brother is also this kind of ridiculous character, I'll seriously consider quitting. (Hopefully these words will offer the author some advice, and hopefully allow them to adjust their writing direction later.)

I don't understand why the author made the female lead suffer so much. Didn't you love her the most? Why make her suffer so much? I've really had enough. The female lead is basically always crying; it's so despairing from her perspective… How could her so-called "brothers" be so cruel? This seems even worse than bullying. Even her enemies would have to forgive her if they saw this. I beg you, please be kinder to the female lead! The female lead suffered a lot in her past life, and I feel the same way in this life… Is this really love for the female lead?

The "Wang Po's Latest Series" is late but it's here!

Gun control is off now, huh? So the world of novels is just like a monk with an umbrella – completely lawless.

He's not human, he's a real dog.