Miss Fox Is Invincible

You can do it, Baozi!

Try it

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Actually, the beginning is a bit long (it takes 20,000-30,000 words to get to the town at the ceremony location, but there's very little useful information, and it lacks development of the world and characters), but it's also a bit short (because it's not clearly explained; the world and quest lines are still shrouded in mystery). It feels like it hasn't been fully explained. However, overall it's still understandable, and it's quite well-written.

It feels like it needs more description, including the environment, background, and characters. Otherwise, while the sentences flow smoothly, it just looks strange, giving the impression that the map hasn't loaded and only the characters are floating in the sky. Also, the character models look like the hexagonal shapes from Monster Hunter. It lacks detail. Overall, the sentences are fine, but for example, in this event, the main storyline lacks rhythm (too little wealth), and without knowing what the characters might do next, there's no anticipation, and without anticipation, there's no surprise [...]

I'll give it a B- as encouragement. The main weakness is the lack of emphasis on the main and supporting characters. Characters who should have been developed are given too little screen time, while irrelevant supporting characters are given more screen time, making it difficult to identify the main characters. The plot logic is acceptable, but it feels a bit strange and disjointed. The characters are somewhat stereotypical; the police chief is a typical example of a supporting character with a masochistic tendency, which is difficult to write well and can easily be ruined if the writing isn't strong enough. I suggest focusing more on developing the two main characters. Keep it up!

Keep up the good work, author! I've already asked you to visit my book, "How Could I Be Imagined as a Savior by Female Characters?" Twice.

Author, keep up the good work! I've already asked you to visit my page twice for "From Fleeing Famine to Emperor of the Empire".