Even Reborn as a Beautiful Girl, I Must Become Number One in the World

Reading progress: Chapter 20. First of all, congratulations to the author for starting to add suitable commercial elements to the genre. "First" is a popular element in SF (street fiction), and so is the yuri (adult) genre. However, the author overlooked one point, failing to fully utilize the two commercial elements mentioned above: the bond with a beautiful girl. A well-developed beautiful girl can bring dry text to life. When the plot is dull, a beautiful girl showing some skin can greatly alleviate the tedium. Many yuri novels begin by focusing on the bond between the protagonist and a beautiful girl (and using it as one of their selling points). Someone joked in the author group: "In yuri, if you're writing about a beautiful girl, you should pull down the protagonist's pants..."

First, there are too many plot holes. Some parts of the story are driven entirely by nonsensical dialogue. In just a few dozen chapters, there are already several inconsistencies between the beginning and end of the narrative, suggesting even the author was confused about the plot. Furthermore, as a web game novel, attributes like HP and MP are practically nonexistent, and levels are almost irrelevant. The entire story relies on so-called "skills," but skills, frankly, only allow you to maximize your potential within the rules; you can't exceed the rules themselves, otherwise it wouldn't be skill but cheating. But what did the protagonist actually do? He started with a few beginner iron swords and went to the mid-game area, practically single-handedly killing the bosses...

While the beginning had some appeal, the side stories and chapters interspersed with other characters became a complete mess. The characters were poorly handled, lacking even the most basic elements like time, characters, location, and background. Furthermore, the main storyline was incoherently separated from other narratives—the author couldn't even use proper separators! Especially towards the end, with a bunch of random characters and plots constantly jumping between the main storyline, I just want to ask, author, did you even have an outline? Do you even understand how to manage so many characters? If you don't have the skill, don't write like this. Look at the garbage you've written! Who are all these people? What are their relationships? What do they say...?

Okay, so I've ranted about all these chapters [up to the day I posted this review]. Romance ≈ No yuri? Absolutely not. Former best friends and buddies? Absolutely not. Mainly, I feel the other female characters' plots are weak, their personalities aren't distinct enough to leave a lasting impression, not to mention their marginal roles. To put it bluntly, some NPCs left a stronger impression than the girls who seemed likely to have a relationship with the female lead. The most memorable female supporting character even had a boyfriend. [A plant]. [If this woman dumps her boyfriend and they get into yuri later, I apologize, okay?] She says she wants to find her former guild brothers and return to the top...

At first glance, this book seems quite good, especially the opening section. The descriptions of the game are very realistic, unlike other online game novels where a single blue piece of equipment can sell for hundreds of thousands, or a special piece for millions. Similarly, the protagonist's precognitive abilities after rebirth don't make him invincible; he doesn't instantly kill other players just by acquiring a piece of equipment. His true invincibility lies in the fact that he hasn't lost his skills. Perhaps what initially drew me in was its realism. Then comes the initial plot development, before his first encounter with Beelzebub, which feels very engaging, with its thrilling...

I'm speechless. The side stories and the main text are mixed together? The author really dares to think outside the box.

I'm extremely dissatisfied with the side stories! Just when I get to an exciting part, I'm given the next side story! The worst part is that these side stories cost money! Generally, side stories are optional, but the author keeps throwing them into the next chapter of the main story, catching readers off guard and forcing them to pay for them! Also, the chapter content is inconsistent; every now and then, there's a repetition of the first half of the previous chapter. For example, "Chapter 1 is completely new content, Chapter 2 starts with half of the previous chapter, and then the current update begins!" In other words, if I'm lucky, the new chapter I paid for only repeats one page of the previous chapter; otherwise...

This is incredibly frustrating. What exactly is your main storyline? I'm trying to decide whether to focus on the real world or the game world. You dig holes in the real world first, then switch to the game world later, which is incredibly annoying. I just want to know the real-world plot—what kind of garbage is this so-called Ye family? But instead, you've given me a huge amount of game content, with side stories in between? Don't you even have separate volumes? Is digging holes everywhere really necessary? Running two games simultaneously is fine, but you haven't done it well. Are you interweaving reality and the game, or vice versa? Many immersive games eventually merge with reality, but the focus is more on the game world...

This author has truly incredible perseverance.

Chapters 3-14. This is a reader enjoying a late-night novel. I feel the novel's structure is excellent—the first chapter explains that the protagonist died from overwork in his previous life, and after reincarnation, due to the timeline, he experienced a different unique weapon progression in the game, leading to different changes in reality. It depicts the protagonist's seemingly cautious, yet incredibly stable, path to victory. It's a simple game-plot-driven story, no problems, quite commendable. The second chapter describes the protagonist rebuilding his guild and various boss battles (the author is very skilled at boss fights), but at the same time, foreshadowing is left after each boss defeat. And in the present...