Phantoms of the Distant Island

You write so well, it's almost scary to read, haha.

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I've been following you for a while now. Your book is actually quite good, both the cover and the plot are very eye-catching. The only shortcoming is the perspective. It's easy to confuse the reader. As the saying goes, writing in the first person makes it easy for readers to immerse themselves in the story, but if it's not handled well, it can be very confusing. Why? Think about it. The first-person perspective is the protagonist's own observation and thoughts. He is a human, not a god, so it's generally difficult for beginners to handle. On the other hand, there's the third-person perspective, or God's-eye view. Many people write in the third person. Why? Because it's easy, simple, and easy to handle. However, there are also drawbacks. If the author's writing skills are not strong enough, it can be difficult for readers to distinguish who the protagonist is. Here, I will analyze a masterpiece to explain this. For example, Tianxia Bachang's "Ghost Blows Out the Light" is basically written from the first-person perspective of Hu Bayi. This makes it easy for readers to know that Hu Bayi is the protagonist. The very first sentence is "My grandfather's name is Hu Guohua," which clearly states the main character. However, "Ghost Blows Out the Light" is a masterpiece that we cannot easily reach. Moreover, "Ghost Blows Out the Light" is not entirely written in the first person. For example, "The Wrath of Xiangxi" is written in the third person. It is written by Hu Bayi and others listening to the events that happened in Xiangxi from the perspective of Chen Xiazi. It is written very well. Therefore, this book is a novel that combines two perspectives. The author's storytelling ability is quite strong. You can learn from it. I also studied some of Ba Chang's writing techniques. In my novels, my first sentence is always "My name is Li Wenguo," clearly stating my identity. Later, I discovered that first-person perspective writing has many obstacles. Once the protagonist leaves an environment, the story of that place becomes impossible to describe. My solution was to add a "soul perspective." The protagonist tells their own story, while the soul perspective narrates other places. When necessary, the soul perspective can even overshadow the first-person perspective. Of course, this method is difficult to master, and I haven't used it perfectly. But remember, if you use two perspectives in a book, the transitions between scenes and panels must be smooth. Don't be abrupt. For example, "I was knocked unconscious by the enemy and drifted off to sleep." "Zhang San pulled me up and shouted, 'Wake up, Li Wenguo!'" Haha, that's obviously not acceptable because if you were unconscious, you wouldn't know what happened, so you can't narrate it like that. This is how you should revise it. For example, "I was knocked unconscious by the enemy and drifted off to sleep in a daze." "In the darkness, the cunning enemy Li Si knocked out Li Wenguo with a stone, and then turned to slaughter Zhang San." "Seeing the situation was dire, Zhang San quickly helped the unconscious Li Wenguo up, shouting, 'Wake up, Wenguo!'" Paying attention to the shifts in point of view creates a great effect. The two perspectives can then coexist harmoniously, complementing each other's strengths and weaknesses, avoiding any awkwardness. The reader also understands that the protagonist is unconscious, and the author is now narrating the story. This is just my personal summary; I hope it helps!