Apartment No. 3

I just went peach picking with my son at the orchard. I said, "When picking peaches, you should bring a few leaves with you, so they'll stay fresh longer!" My son asked, "Why, Mom?" I said, "Because that way, the peaches will think they're still on the tree!"

Zhongyan, eager to see the exciting story, visited with "The Legend of Shennong Because of Me: The Journey of Desire," sat down, and collected the book for a quiet and peaceful experience!

The plot is quite engaging, a bit scary. It would be better if you added a powerful identity, like an exorcist or something. That's just my personal suggestion. Actually, the way you wrote it is pretty good, at least it's more realistic. Also, this paragraph is a bit long in some places; I almost misread the line. Keep it up! I've saved it.