The Mortal's Cultivation Journey

I read the first two chapters carefully. The author's writing style is excellent, giving a feeling of gentle strength, unlike my books which feel stiff and forced. Keep it up, I believe you're the best! ^0^~^0^~^0^~

Awesome! (*ˊૢᵕˋૢ*) Mm

I skimmed through a few chapters and thought it was alright, but there were a few issues. 1. The writing is somewhat like a script, mostly revolving around what the character does, but lacking in action description. (While writing, you can ask yourself more questions like "Why did he do this?", "How did he do it?", "Did he hesitate when he did it?", And "Did he experience any psychological changes when he hesitated?", And then select some to record in your expression.) 2. The lack of description of characters' inner thoughts and the environment makes it difficult to read coherently. (If you have trouble reading it, you can post the article in a thread and have someone else read it for you.) 3. Many people can be represented by the pronouns "she," "he," "the former," and "the latter." 4. There are many repetitive words. Okay, that's all, haha. 130,000 words is definitely better than mine 👍👍👍. These are just my personal opinions. Keep it up!

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