The Twin Detectives

The teacher really likes this book. Could we collaborate on an audiobook version of it?

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In short, detective stories should primarily focus on the protagonist's inner thoughts, with minimal dialogue. If dialogue makes up 80% of each chapter, that's excessive. Look at those stories about "The Seven Deadly Sins," etc. They're a team investigating a case, and they don't talk as much as you do.

I told you those people were just flattering you, but you didn't believe me. Instead, you said they were encouraging you. Do you even know what real encouragement is? They didn't dare point out your flaws, so what else could they be doing? And you actually call them encouraging you? You're so inexperienced! Humph! I'm giving you pointers, and you're getting angry?

A true detective story must have minimal dialogue. It should focus primarily on thought. Look at the Sherlock Holmes stories; do they really talk that much? They mostly engage in deep thought, rarely speaking. Yours is too verbose; it doesn't sound like a detective story, it sounds more like a song.

The problem is your writing isn't good. Do you know the British author of the "Poirot" mystery novel? She's a female writer, you know! You're a grown man, how come you can't outwrite her? Her "ABC Murders" is brilliant. Yours...