Transmigrated into Honkai: Beginning as a Deadly Soldier

Among the Seven Cats MiHoYo fanfics, it can be ranked in the top three. The plot is very good, but there are too many time and space transitions, and the perspective is weird, which makes the sense of immersion not very strong. Some common sense is also wrong

It is very well written about emotions, and expresses the changes and differences between love and liking in a very detailed and clear way. However, the focus of the male video is not fully grasped. Although emotions are very important, the description of fighting is not good. This aspect may be the author's weakness. During the fight, just shouting out the names of moves without describing the actions completely leaves readers with no room for imagination and is also very embarrassing. So try to learn more about action descriptions. In addition, the plot changes too quickly. If the extra description is too long, it is very easy for people to lose track of the rhythm. And since the action description is not good, you should try to reduce this aspect of the plot as much as possible, but you just do the opposite. This means that you can't use much brain to watch later, otherwise one: you can't keep up with the rhythm. Two: It looks weird. Three: It's too confusing if you look carefully, and you can't understand it if you don't look carefully. Many times it's not that readers want to use their brains when reading, but that if you write too carefully and don't think about it, you won't understand it, and if you think about it, it will feel strange. Also, when the plot officially begins, the protagonist's previous experiences should be slowly brought into it, instead of just pasting it in when it suddenly comes to mind. It is very immersive. Many times, a person who has a story or relationship with the protagonist suddenly appears, and is not introduced clearly, just a few inexplicable sentences and then disappears. If not, one or two extra chapters should be inserted, but no, after reading 200 chapters, the relationship with the protagonist and some characters is still inexplicable and incomprehensible. I couldn't write the main text well, so I wrote dozens of extra chapters about the Three Kingdoms. Why did I write so many chapters? To write so much you might as well just start a new book. I just became interested in the official plot and wrote such a long side story. Do you think too many people will watch it? 🤨I won't say too much, I will add more later🙃🙃

The magic modification is a mess. If you don't elaborate on the emotional aspects, you really think that the two-dimensional characters are all silly and sweet. .

Very good, but the ending is a bit abrupt

You say this novel is good-looking, and the author's writing style is indeed very good. But if you say this novel is not good-looking, it is indeed not good-looking. My left and right brains are fighting each other while reading it.

Not suitable for people who have never played Genshin Impact

Author, are you kidding me? Siegfried was cheated. This part really made me burst into tears. Your network of connections is so weird! I admire you. The person who can write this book is also a talent.

You've read too many Japanese comics! It's obvious that Beng San's every step has the shadow of Japanese comics. It has a feeling of being cheated and there are sentence patterns and dialogues. It's hard to believe that Beng San doesn't have any brains or thinking.

Epileptic Long Aotian, his head is full of yellow stuff and water

Is Siegfried so green? It's so outrageous. I wrote about my relationship with Kiana earlier, and suddenly I felt like vomiting. The description of fighting is not good either.