This Man Is from the Earth

I hope the author's attempt can bring us different expectations.

First praise: Sima Nan's name is very nice, and he has the demeanor of a great man. But in this chapter, he should be a general, like Ren Hao. Second praise: Human nature. Looking at the whole text, the cruelty of human nature and the comprehensive impact of war are particularly profound. But the disadvantage is that the title is a bit inconsistent with the article. Since it is about thinking after lying down, then throughout the whole article, the description of Ren Hao's thinking should be the focus!

Ragboard's article is indeed a bit messy, but what I want to say is that my article is an epic war work! I believe all of you readers are used to reading cool articles with the protagonist as a clue! Let me use an analogy! This kind of writing is like pouring a large amount of ink onto a piece of paper (within two or three chapters), and the traces of ink are very heavy! All of a sudden, all readers will be so happy! It piqued everyone's interest in reading! But my article is not, because it is a description of early human society! I only drew one stroke on dozens of pieces of paper, and then you put all the papers together and found that a beautiful picture formed! So I have spoilers in the previous chapters! It takes hundreds of thousands of words to show off! If you really don't want to read on! Then read it after hundreds of thousands of words! Maybe then it will catch your eye! Thanks for the rag!

I have finished reading a chapter of more than 3,000 words! Let me smooth it over! I felt that the plot was a bit cliche and uninnovative, and at the beginning Yang Guang was a subordinate of Li Longji. I was a little confused, so I quickly checked online and found that they were not from the same dynasty! Hey, it's my fault, I compared history with online articles again! Who cares? The title of this chapter is very new, but the content does not fit the title. I only added the sentence "The sun rises from the west!" At the end! A bit of a forced eviction! The leaves change to the branches too quickly, something is wrong! That's all. Come on! ! 🌹

What is the meaning of Ren Hao's name? Is it good for others? Or is it to express his desire to live together? 😃

Big rag, Huahua's chapter reviews have begun. Let me talk about the order of reviews. First, I will review the chapters, then I will finish coding the book, and then I will give the general review. Today is the first chapter review. Please don't mind if the review is not good. The eight characters sum up my feelings about this chapter - thrilling and eye-catching. As an opening chapter, whether it is a short story or a long story, it should be emphasized at the beginning that this is true, and it is true. The one I admire most is the opening chapter of Feng Jicai's "Yin Yang Bagua". This is a digression, so I won't talk about it for now. Generally speaking, articles that begin with the protagonist are neat, and the entire article is easy to write around the protagonist and is organized. The book with a big rag does not open with the protagonist, but more like the beginning of a movie. Personally, it feels like it has more of a lead-in. When I started writing, I first wrote about the location of the city wall of the Yongsheng Dynasty, introduced the defenders, and listed Zhang Sen, Li Mu, and Wang Dapang. This is how the story begins. The confrontation between the trio of defenders and Winterfell was written with great feeling. The characters of the defenders were revealed. On the one hand, the status of the defenders was also explained. I personally feel that this is like a foreshadowing. OK, keep reading. Fatty discovered something strange. The author's atmosphere is good at this point. I feel that Rags likes heavy flavors. Hahahaha. This is a great way to portray the character. It's very vivid, Fatty is timid, Zhang Sen is brave, Li Mu is more like a neutralizer, the climax of a single chapter is reached, the ghost clan appears, people with different personalities get different prices, Li Mu and Zhang Sen are dead, please be careful, you typed Zhang Sen's name wrong here, Wang Fatty escapes and falls off the cliff, the ending ends abruptly, the meaning is not finished, it makes people pay attention to the content of the next chapter, not bad. The highlight is the strong visual sense and the popular language. The disadvantage is that some descriptions need to be polished. A large book focuses on the content, and the highlights are also in the content, but don't ignore the details. As far as chapters are concerned. 🌹 Continue tomorrow.