Online Game: The God of Thieves

This is the best online game novel I've ever read! I personally think it's perfect for a comic adaptation! Looking forward to it! \(≧▽≦)/~

Chapter 1 was truly awful; the way it went off-topic was absolutely awful.

The realistic parts are described too much, and the online game is ridiculously far-fetched, somewhat like Mars Gravity. The online game structure is also incredibly illogical and confusing. The romance is overly detailed and verbose. It's not that you're writing about how good their relationship is; there are no events or conflicts to express it. The writing is dry and flat, not even at the level of a middle school student. This is a book from the last few years.

What a great start! This is all about online games, and things are moving so fast. The book title should be "Living My Life Playing Games After Rebirth."

The appearance adjustments are to prevent being recognized and harmed in the real world; the player's address is likely top secret in the game.

I'm impressed; the author managed to transfer the story from real-world crime to online games.

Aside from the beginning, it somewhat imitates the act of a thief.

It's a terrible book. Involving criminal cases The game can't even be checked. What is the police department for? Enemies are everywhere.

With your level of writing, you would definitely get a zero on the college entrance exam essay; you've gone way off-topic and even wandered into Africa.