The Chaotic Star River

Are you sure it's not bad? The ending is passed off in one stroke, and he becomes a patron saint because of his meritorious service?

But there is no way to start, because it speaks what is in my heart, I can only feel sad and keep everything silent. I hope my silence can create a calm for you, let your thoughts fly freely, and bring me a little touch.

I feel that some unnecessary descriptions by the author can actually be deleted, so that the article will not appear to progress slowly.

There are some pretty women who feel more refreshed when they kill them. Especially the kind of woman with a twitchy head and an unrefined appearance.

I feel that the description of details needs to be improved a lot. Hope to keep up the good work! We will all love your work! I also wrote a book, but I gave up because I couldn't hold on. Writing a book is really hard and not easy. Besides throwing away tickets, what else can we do? ? ? Brothers, what are you waiting for? Smash it! ! ! I'll smash it! !

Overall, the novel is very good, and the setting is relatively novel. However, I feel that the writing style still has room for improvement. It might be good to occasionally add a little description of the environment to enhance the atmosphere.

Very good writing skills, clear ideas, distinctive characters, and will not be forgotten for a long time after reading.

As a new writer, you need to understand one thing: when creating characters, you should show your distinctive character and extraordinary speaking background, so that the characters you create can be active on the paper. I really like the male protagonist created by the author now, and I quite admire the author's skill in creating characters.

Sometimes appropriate description of the environment can make the characters express their emotions more fully, so I hope the author can improve in this aspect.

Good book, keep it now, wait until you lose weight and then kill it!