Sea-Patrolling Hero, ICU Regular

It's better not to write the love line randomly 😥

The writing is average, and in some paragraphs, the fourth wall's modern perspective seems a bit dramatic or even fast food. The main reason is that writing fan fiction itself contains "original sin". The basic framework of the Mi Factory universe itself is still being built, games are updated, and characters are iterated at a rapid pace. Regardless of the upper or lower limit for writing fan fiction, it is far inferior to those of Warhammer, Warcraft, DND, Western Fantasy, and the like.

My assessment is, it's okay. At least it's not impossible to eat. But it's not refreshing enough, and it feels almost boring.

In some paragraphs, the descriptions of commenting on events and making fast-food jokes from the perspective of a time traveler are very frivolous and self-indulgent, as if the protagonist holds a unique secret book. (But it didn't happen) A sudden and poisonous point that "comes with it and makes you uneasy".