Will She Regret My Death for the Rest of Her Life?

That Feiwu thing is really disgusting, it pisses me off so much.

I didn't read much of the content, but just by scrolling to the end, I found two problems, one was the personification system, and the other was that the paragraphs were too detailed. It is meaningless to use pen and ink to create systematic emotions. If it is responsible for comfort, the male protagonist can dispel negative emotions by himself, which will increase the charm. If it is lyrical, it will be more immersive to create a vivid best friend. Then there is typesetting, Going all the way, like that modern poem, one sentence is divided into paragraphs, and one sentence of description is divided into paragraphs. It looks daunting.

Mainly because after reading that book, I felt a little bit like that when I read another book of the same genre.

🙂 Judging from the current traffic of this book, the author will most likely change his account and reopen it.

Why does it feel like I've read similar books?

Because I really like this character, I don't want to just write her as a tool responsible for regret, torture, and promoting the male protagonist's plot. She can have her own judgment and the right to refuse. Even if you really have regrets in the end, it doesn't mean that the original choice was wrong. Similarly, the male protagonist is not entirely right. He will be painful, resentful, and feel that he has given a lot, but this does not mean that others must respond to him. He will also make very selfish and hurtful choices, and he will need to re-understand himself later. So what I want to write is not "who failed whom". But both people have their own positions, they both make mistakes, and they both leave something for their own choices. Some regrets, it is difficult to simply attribute the right or wrong of a certain person. It's just that at that time, they couldn't get the answer they really needed.

I have submitted my manuscript. Before, I thought that I had failed the review twice and had to write 100,000 words before I could apply again.

You can scold me, but I won't delete the post. Just scold me gently.

As for the problem of paragraphing, when the emotion is stronger, the number of words needs to be written more and more delicately, so that it can be coherent while maintaining purity (cleanness in feeling) and appeal. If you write too much, it will be like a sudden storm, rushing into the readers. Suddenly if you write too few words, it will cause a silent thunder. In this way, the two can be coherently connected to normal sentence paragraphs, and the meaning can be expressed without being frozen or flowing. Normal sentence paragraphs use a much larger number of words than these two to complete the elaboration and narrative when the reader is not paying attention

The segments are a disaster. Normally it's okay when there's no dialogue, but once there's dialogue, this segment is unwatchable. The author really needs to change this. There is also the emotional progression that the author wants to write. I feel that what the author wants to write is the protagonist reminiscing about the past and rushing to the battlefield, but when I read it, I felt that the author gave me a lot of principles and then asked me to see how to get the results next. To tell the truth is as tough as a paper. To sum up, it is indeed a new author. (In fact, it is obvious which eunuch novel the author is talking about, and the sense of déjà vu is quite strong)