Magical Girls Don’t Lose to Electric Shocks!!!

You're an electric boy, right? I'll give you a lot of electric shocks.

I didn't know anything; I was just passing by. They said I could charge my phone there, so I came.

I won't tell you anything!

The biggest problem is the lack of coherence. The actions, inner thoughts, plot, and world-building are all disjointed. It's written haphazardly, without any discernible plot or predictable character actions, and lacks any clear logical connection between the characters' actions.

The worldview and setting have their merits, but your writing skills make up for it. The transitions and changes in perspective made me have to think about what to say next halfway through the movie 🤔 The descriptions failed to evoke vivid images in me, making it difficult to empathize with the characters' emotions, leaving me feeling nothing.

Magical girls should be male.

To be honest, I didn't understand it.

That's a great idea. The content shows that the author has a lot to say, but the transitions are not good, and sometimes it feels a bit inexplicable while reading. And what's the point of that Walkman feature? It feels like this element is unnecessary, unless it's foreshadowing later on.

I have a thing for virgins, can I watch this only? I don't want to be an NTR (Netorare, a Japanese term for a sexually transmitted disease).

Although I read twenty chapters and didn't see the protagonist transform into a magical girl, it was still a good way to recharge! I also noticed that the main plot was unclear, especially in the parts that I enjoyed reading. It mentions that the protagonist can collect magic stones, but that's all there is to it.