Hunter X Hunter: Rewrite Fate from Meteor City

The writing skills are quite good, and the writing style also has a unique charm. Overall, it is a hunter fanfic worth continuing to follow. Let's talk about the shortcomings: 1. This style of writing has a strong pretentiousness, and now it has reached the point where it is too much and not enough. After all, this is an online novel. The most important thing is to be able to narrate the story smoothly. Restraint is more rare than wantonness. 2. The protagonist now seems more and more human-like and lacks self-esteem, even to the point where I want to say to him: "turn artificial". Now he almost no longer describes the inner psychological activities of the protagonist, and he does not behave like an adult who has traveled through the modern society of the earth. It reads a bit like a tool puppet purely used to advance the plot... 3. Continuing from the previous article, it is difficult to imagine that a traveler in modern society on earth would be willing to stay in a place like Meteor Street that no dog would want to stay (not to mention not suitable for the sound development of children). Even if he develops feelings for Ma Qi and Wo Jin, the short and medium-term goal should be to pull these friends out of this ghost place of Meteor Street. However, the current goal of the protagonist is actually vague and even has localized thinking... 4. The story clearly states that the protagonist is a traveler from the modern society of the earth who has read the original work of the Hunter in detail. According to the beginning and subsequent performance, the protagonist is most likely an adult. Since he has read the original work, he should be very clear that the future Phantom Troupe will be a group of anti-human risings with distorted mental development. Since he is an adult in modern society, then he should have the values ​​of a normal adult. "Learn etiquette before learning skills. "Learn virtue before you learn martial arts." Of course, I know that in a ghost place like Meteor Street, the most important thing is to survive first. But since I have taught my friends the ability to read, I should also make up for the lessons on how to be a human being in the future; now that I have decided to form a bond and handed the gun into their hands, I must have the awareness to educate or guide the children by holding their noses. Do I still want to work with them in the future to study the Luta tribe and ordinary civilians in Tutuku...