Path to Longevity: Starting by Rescuing the Queen of the Women's Kingdom

It's well-written, but the title needs to be changed.

I think the author is a part-time writer, right? Don't worry about the author starving. I've been following this author since their last book; I think it was recommended in the daily reading guide. I'm a veteran bookworm, and I'm really afraid the author will have a mental breakdown and stop writing. It's so rare to find an author I click with.

I wonder if the author reads book reviews? The author could learn from light novel writing techniques and create a well-developed female lead with a fleshed-out character; this would attract readers. A common trope is a beautiful, strong, and tragic heroine who is saved by the male lead and still loves him. While this setup is old-fashioned, it works. The male lead's personality needs to be normal, conforming to modern values; he doesn't have to be brilliant, but he can't be stupid either.

It's Foundation Establishment Pills again; without them, one can't cultivate immortality. This rubbish is completely unnecessary. These garbage settings should have been eliminated long ago.

My grades are a bit bad, I'm a little worried I might skip it.

Another trial, another bet, and yet another one where he's the last one to emerge unscathed—at least write something different. 🙂

Regarding the supplies, the protagonist's cheat codes are information from his past life and a map. His personality seems a bit problematic; if he hadn't left, they could have been analyzed and discussed more thoroughly. There was no need for the one-year agreement; the protagonist seems a bit too impulsive. Otherwise, there are no major issues.

Those who want to write this kind of book could learn a lot from Mars Gravity. His books have clichéd plots, but for some reason, they're still readable.

3/36. Forage. It's clear that the author has learned a lot. But the end of the third chapter was a bit too sweet.

It's alright, but overall it feels a bit strange.