If a Soldier Charges, He Will Die.

At the beginning, the scene where the protagonist suddenly appeared to play cards with the mage was really inexplicable. The cloak of intelligence fell to the ground despite trying to be funny. The author gave an explanation, but in my opinion, the character image was insufficiently developed and too abrupt. It would be much better to move these two plots to the back, or add a branch line in front to shape the protagonist's gambling character. The second dungeon was much better after entering the second stage. Writing group portraits of villains on the streets is not popular in serialized novels, but I read it in one go and it felt great. The recent Western Fantasy novel is a very good one, but it has a bad start. I don't know how many readers can endure it.

I can't start with 5 chapters a day before it's released.

Don't write about such legendary events in the early stage. It feels like it's not something that the protagonist can cope with at this stage. Writing it once in a while feels good and has an epic feel, but when you write it continuously, it changes. This is not the protagonist's journey of growth but a puppet dancing on the line for people's entertainment.

At the beginning, I wrote that the protagonist is a strong man, and then I wrote that he only weighs more than 100 kilograms. Later, I wrote that the orc is half a head taller and stronger than the protagonist, but only 95kg. You know, when I lost weight at 188, I was 96kg. If you don't know how to calculate weight, just use Jackie Chan as a template. Jackie Chan weighed 155 pounds and 173 pounds at his peak. If you write a strong man character who is taller than Jackie Chan, just multiply it. For example, if you write a 190-cm strong man with a body shape similar to Jackie Chan, the height will be 173×1.1 And the weight will be 155×1. 1×1.1×1.1 Is 206 pounds and 103kg, and then add or subtract it according to the body type and body fat rate. The weight you write now is too difficult to stretch. And if you watch basketball, Flash Wade is also a good example. He is 193cm tall and weighed 101kg at his peak.

I feel there is a problem. The protagonist is said to be a time traveler, but he behaves a bit like an indigenous person.

It looked very uncomfortable. The first few chapters felt baffling, and the later ones also felt baffling. The author managed to persuade me to quit within a dozen chapters.

It was okay in the early stage. Even the gambling with the female mage that was criticized in the comment section was not that poisonous. After all, it may have a spell effect. But after that classic half-elf beauty appeared, I really couldn't hold myself any longer. I originally looked for dwarves as teammates at the beginning, and I also said that we finally have hardcore adventurers. I am fed up with 2B emotional dramas in which a naturally stupid and ignorant beauty is gradually influenced by the protagonist (who is also a drow, can you believe it)? I wrote several chapters in a row. Can't you just write an adventure and make a dungeon!

The protagonist bets on dogs, and the opening lottery does not count. Chapter 10 is really speechless when he bets with the mage. There is also a problem with IQ. Don't want to read it

You're so stupid, are you sure you don't want to use the aboriginal settings?

To be honest, the character of the protagonist is quite fun to write. This book is definitely a good book, but the author likes to write group portraits. Is this a common problem among some high-level authors? Each character takes a lot of pen and ink to write. If you write too much, it will easily reduce the protagonist's sense of existence, and the plot will also slow down. It is easy to be criticized. There are many excellent new books, but there are too few that can be completed. I hope this one will not run away because of poor results.

The author writes very warriorly, and the protagonist also appears to be a warrior, with a sense of low IQ and recklessness like a warrior barbarian, so I don't like it very much and can't stand it anymore.

Whose vest is this?

Fits my stereotype of a warrior 🙂

Fantasy is too cool. It ranks first in fantasy on the new book list with more than 100 places.

After reading the previous events, the author has the ability to control the simple linear thinking of fools and the conspiracy of villains at the same time. The supporting characters other than the protagonist have a sense of life, and the world view seems to be well established. It is a new book with great potential.

If you have any ideas, please mention them here. The author will check the replies one by one when he has time. (Also, I agree with most readers that Marcus is a fool.)

Bardeen and Marcus are here. When will the elf ranger Kerilian, the battle priest Victor, the evocation mage Siena, and the five little heroes gather in another world?

🦴Many people don't know: Birds are theropod dinosaurs that survive to this day. They have a ceiling-level respiratory system among vertebrates-double breathing (one-way air flow air bag system). The bone fossils of non-avian theropod dinosaurs (Tyrannosaurus rex, Velociraptor, etc.) Leave air cavity holes, proving that they have evolved an air sac structure and are an early version of this system. ✅Working principle: Multiple sets of air bags distributed on the body act as bellows, and the lungs themselves hardly expand or contract. When inhaling, part of the fresh air enters the lungs for exchange, and part is stored in the posterior air sac; when exhaling, the fresh air in the posterior air sac flows through the lungs again. 👉 During the two stages of inhalation and exhalation, the lungs are exchanging oxygen. The airflow flows in one direction, and the old and new exhaust gases will not mix in large quantities. 🆚Comparison with humans (mammalian tidal breathing): Our lungs are like balloons, expanding and contracting, and the air in and out takes the same path. Exhaust gas will remain in the lungs during exhalation, and new and old gases are mixed. Only the inhalation phase can efficiently absorb oxygen, and the oxygen extraction efficiency is even lower. Bonus: The airbag can also dissipate heat from the giant body and reduce the weight of the bones. This set of powerful breathing supported the high metabolic activities of dinosaurs and also allowed birds to complete high-intensity flights and fly over oxygen-deprived mountains.

Reminds me of the book "Open Your Mission Log"

The warrior is written like a warrior, but a lot of the elements of the time traveler are weakened. The dwarf is also written well, in terms of stereotypes, and there is also a neutral chaotic camp drow elf, maybe mixed with a little kindness? I hope there will be more surprises later, but the narrative technique is sometimes a bit vague and abstract. You might as well write more straightforwardly. Easy-to-understand is the only criterion for mass communication.

It has a bit of a Latin American psychedelic rainforest flavor. Although the author did not start with the classic One Hundred Years of Solitude, the plot of this riverside town and the cockfighting is too similar to Macondo, and the people in the town are in awe of the Water Ghost Queen. This unique local memory of history makes me think that in the subsequent plots, there will be plots where history is forgotten due to external impact, and those who forget history will be destroyed even if they decipher the parchments. What I'm looking forward to most now is that Marcus will have a baby soon and start growing up soon.

It feels very good, and the writing is very tasteful. It has been a long time since I have written a pure warrior article. I will invest in it.

Brother, your writing is so good. I really like the character of the protagonist

Generally speaking, it's good. There are some subtle inconsistencies in the character creation in the early stage, but it will be much better after that period. The protagonist's character is the kind of person who is both wise and foolish, and the truth can be seen in the ordinary. It is a very difficult character to shape. There was also a problem in this aspect in the early stage (it has nothing to do with being shrewd or reckless or not, it has to do with the issues considered in the mind, similar to people who do not connect the travelers to another world). But as the story gets on track, readers can feel the orc-like (laughing) wisdom and cunning of the protagonist. In terms of the plot, some people say that there are too many legendary plots, which is true, but this article feels that the focus is not on killing monsters and upgrading, but on the development and growth of the protagonist and a town. It can only be said that the author really makes it more difficult for himself The overall story is indeed a bit like One Hundred Years of Solitude, but considering that the ending will not be so nihilistic, and the author also said that this is a lord story, there should be sections where the protagonist establishes prestige during the adventure, hone his martial arts, balances the forces within the kingdom, and establishes a medieval industrial and commercial town.

I suddenly remembered when I saw the comments on the shelf. The few DNDs I have read recently are currently over 200,000 words. It seems that the dwarves I met at the beginning were either exiled or came out to look for things for similar reasons. No wonder this dwarf has such a strong sense of déjà vu 😂😂😂

It's a bad batch. The first and last words are inconsistent and I can still read it, but what age is this? I still have to spend a chapter describing how a group of female villains were oppressed and then killed the whole family. It can also be seen that the writing has been cruel and forgetful. It is completely self-indulgent and does not know what the world is...

I finished reading it in one go and cast 5 monthly votes. See you next time when the event is finished 😆

The writing is good and has a good taste. I recommend reading it.

Update soon, I can't wait

Are you the same one who wrote about barbarians before? You won't be a eunuch this time, right?