Super Psychic

I have viewed 27 pictures so far. There are some minor issues, but overall I feel good.

As long as you shout, I have the appearance of Qi Peijia, the readers in the audience will be ecstatic

Please reply in a unified manner, AI risk is detected, there will not be any major recommendations in the future, and the only option is to cut it off. The editor also tried to get the author's coding record, but there was still no way. This book has great potential, and the results are also very good. The author also wants to continue writing, but also feels it is a pity. After all, the author only has two months to write it. I'm very sorry, everyone.

I have just read about ten chapters, so I won't judge the rest for now. After all, I have read too little, but it is obvious that the author's writing style is different from that of Pi Pi Jia Old readers who have read Pi Pi Jia's books should be able to feel that Pi Pi Jia's writing style and characters are too recognizable. Now, it's the type where even if the vest is changed, as long as the writing style remains the same, old readers can recognize it at a glance To be honest, I think the success of Pi Pi Jia has a lot to do with his writing style and character design. The same plot is more interesting when played by Black Star Zhou Jinglai

The content is very good, it has the feeling of leather armor, and the writing style is not green, as if a devil from outside the world has come to the starting point to prove the truth.

The protagonist's strength develops at a very rhythmic pace. In the early days, he was small and powerful, but now the system is gradually improving, with offense, defense, blood, and long-range attack and heart control. Generally speaking, it is not overly powerful, nor is it data inflation. In the past, there was a super god fan who wrote about the newbie planet of the little alien god, and he created a lot of powerful abilities, and the result was that the fighting was not reflected at all. The character of the protagonist is not very clear at the moment. I hope the author can maintain the pace, improve the personality of the protagonist, and become the number one novel with a supernatural worldview 🤓🤓

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I feel that the plot is too urgent, the events and the actions of the protagonist are too linear, like a main line skeleton that lacks filling, and the turns are too blunt, such as the reaction of the agent chief, the protagonist's journey through the maze, and the change of attitude in the academy. The traces of target painting and archery are too obvious, and many places that should be foreshadowed and described are simply mentioned in one stroke. The character image is too mechanical, like a machine with set A to B tasks. It completes a preset appearance task. The protagonist squad leader is better. The other characters are just such a person in the main line, so I added some character descriptions.

It's quite interesting. You don't need to reach the level of a mechanic. As long as you have six or seven points of skill, the author will be satisfied.

Personally, I can accept a harem or no girls, but the harem can't have women, and the harem can't be ambiguous. These two points should be very simple. (Womenless here refers to focusing on the protagonist's own adventure, rather than just the protagonist having no women and being eaten by others 😰)

At present, it can be given to people between the master and the top. No poison, no thunder, good rhythm. The author has control and awareness. But the shortcomings are also obvious. The first is a common problem in the beginning of the academy: the plot is naive. When writing about students, it is easy to feel like you are playing house with a sense of limitation. The characteristics are that the characters are single, the villains have no game, and the confrontation is very smooth. If it were a fan drama, it would have a very good fan drama feel, but when put in a big world novel, it seems very superficial, petty, without a big boss behind the scenes, and the villain has no brains. Then there is a common problem in writing about science in non-major classes: writing about researchers doing experiments is like writing in high school students' experimental classes. The best way is to only write about the purpose of the experiment and not the experimental process. If the experiment process is not written, it is easy to see that the author's knowledge is difficult to support. At a glance, people will think: Oh, why is it all high school knowledge? Is this a top researcher from another world? You can just grab any high school student, right? Such thoughts. Finally, there is a common problem with changing pictures and texts: giving people the feeling of having an outline but no details. Just like in the article, it is easy to see that the author has a plan and a conscious plan. The general arrangement of when the protagonist will go and where to do and when a new plot line will start is planned, but the problems arise in these places: there are no details, the plot is not filled in meticulously, and the plot seems to be following an assembly line step by step. The author has arranged an overall plan of when the protagonist will go to which point and what to do, but the details of what the protagonist did and what happened at each point are very superficial, not full, and very dry, and the plot lines are switched very quickly. The problem that this kind of writing method can easily cause is that you clearly have control over the general rhythm of the book, but you get stuck as you write, and you don't know exactly how to write it, and it finally collapses. In the end, it was too fast and there was too little personal confrontation plot for the protagonist. It gives people the feeling that the protagonist is about to take off without doing anything, while others are like waste but have to follow the protagonist's development. So far, the only real development period for the protagonist is the labyrinth period, but that period is too short. You need to have a longer plot line to write about the development and take-off of the protagonist, such as the plot line in The Mechanic where Black Star becomes a mercenary killer. There are too many characters appearing in the college. The progress of the protagonist cannot be described by following the characters in the college. I am becoming more and more cheating. Why am I still playing house with college students? Acting together is very abrupt. Only acting alone can there be a plot that surpasses others and takes off directly.

You shouldn't be the author of the Super Mechanic fanfic who has been reported many times, right?

It's a bit boring. The plot is not attractive at all. You won't be able to read it like this. Every time you click on it and scan it a few times, you won't get a single impression.

The author has ideas, the writing is quite interesting, and the plot setting is good. Nowadays, leather armor cannot be used, and scarlet is weak. A man was born in heaven and earth. How can he live in depression for a long time? He may not be able to replace him😋😋😋👊👊👊

I don't know if it's useful or not. Anyway, I won't write it anymore, just tell the truth.

There are some flaws in the first few chapters, but after reading the subsequent plot, I can see that it is still of a certain level, and overall it can be ranked between the top and the best. It can be clearly seen from the introduction and the first few chapters that it borrows many settings from the Super Mechanic. The difference is that when the soul travels, it retains a large number of top-level abilities that were awakened with krypton gold before traveling. You can customize multiple combinations of abilities, and you can save and load your own status. The original identity is an orphan. He was selected by the intelligence agency of another country. He sneaked into the country's supernatural academy and went to the academy's laboratory to collect information. It was basically equivalent to talent for both parties. However, after quickly upgrading through a small hidden copy, he suddenly became a talented student who attracted attention, which temporarily alleviated the crisis. After that, he would probably take advantage of and break away from these two parties. However, there is one thing I hope can be adjusted. It is best to describe the protagonist's arrangements for subsequent actions more clearly. As the original player, the protagonist can make many actions beyond his current identity with the help of his understanding of the game. This is also one of the core joys of this type of work. However, this article either does not describe it, or it only explains it as the action progresses, which makes it not very good. For example, going to the hidden store to buy signal shielding tools and being locked into a maze copy on your own initiative. These actions are completely fine in terms of ideas, but when reading, I always feel that some links are missing and seem a bit abrupt. If some foreshadowing can be added appropriately so that readers can roughly anticipate the protagonist's recent actions, the reading will be smoother and they will be more willing to follow. Of course, it's okay to leave some suspense or intrigue in the core content.

Author. Is this a joke? Is the update really suspended, or is it a fake update? Or is it going to be put on the shelves?

Even that copy of God of Copy has been on the shelves several times. Yours is definitely far better than that one. It's a pity that I have exhausted my investment times this month.

The rhythm is not interesting, the characters are good, and the plot is not interesting It is neither a cool novel nor a pretense of being deep, you can watch it

After Super God, Qi Peijia is withered, and the second half of Deep Crimson from Star Abyss is boring. Author, you need to write well.

Come on, author, you look like an old friend.

It's strange. I can't see your main line. It's a little confusing.

Come on, how can we go to Sanjiang Qianjun without more updates!

I see this book is still recommended.

It feels like it's just too fun, but the climax of the plot can't be reached, it's not attractive, and the golden finger restrictions are too restrictive.

6. After raising it for three days, I came back and saw that everything was fine 🙂

Come on, it's on the shelves, I'll give you a monthly pass

Is it so strict now? Even if you have good grades, you won't be recommended?

No, it looks familiar even before I start watching it. Do you feel it?

If others are like you, I will panic and be in a panic!