Tai Lao Usurping the Sky

I read the first 2 chapters yesterday, and then I decided to invest in this book. I spent some time later and read Chapter 14 in one go. I woke up this morning and thought about it, wrote something, and polished it with the assistance of AI. It may not be correct, but it is just some thoughts on this novel. I hope the author will consider it as appropriate. If it is suitable, change it. If it is not suitable, just treat it as a communication. The following are the advantages and disadvantages of this novel in my opinion: Advantages: the scarce "mysterious cultivation of immortality" atmosphere and high-concept game The biggest core competitiveness of this book lies in the ultimate atmosphere creation. From the "karma leeches" parasitic on the jade slips to the sound of "hundreds of kilograms of wet rotten meat dragged across the bricks" of the punishment, the author successfully constructed a Cthulhu world full of moisture and oppression. This method of merging immortality with unspeakable horror is a rare category in online literature and has a strong differentiated selling point. At the same time, the novel abandons the traditional way of fighting monsters and upgrading, and the cool points are based on "rule utilization" (such as using rusty swords and broken iron to transfer account cause and effect). The high-intelligence cause and effect game is refreshing. Disadvantages: the omniscient and omnipotent protagonist and the sense of ineffective crisis This book has three fatal logical flaws that are interrelated, which seriously weaken the sense of substitution of the work: The protagonist's "God's perspective" lacks logical support: The protagonist Ji Yuan has only traveled for a month, but he is able to skillfully use advanced methods such as "grafting cause and effect" and "spiritual scalpel". The source of knowledge (system, memory or mentor) is never explained in the article. This setting of "full level at the beginning" without any trial and error cost makes the battle of wits look like a "standard answer" forced by the author rather than the real game of the protagonist. Golden Finger has no boundaries and leads to "deus ex machina": from flicking iron filings to rewrite cause and effect to remotely borrowing elixir energy, the protagonist's operation gradually goes beyond the scope of "fighting of wits" and becomes "following the rules". Due to the lack of distance restrictions and the risk of failure, and the highly repetitive "crisis-resolution" mode (find props-bounce-perfect solution), the sense of oppression in the desperate situation disappears, and the sense of refreshment becomes extremely cheap. The "superhumanization" of physiological cost and psychological defense: Facing close-range tentacle sniffing, the protagonist is as calm as a machine; facing the continuous burning of the soul and the cost of blood and tears, he can forcefully suppress it with willpower alone, without any signs of physiological loss of control (such as convulsions, temporary blindness). The "diminishing marginal effect" of this cost makes readers turn from initial distress to numbness, completely eliminating the thrill of "dancing on the tip of a knife". This is a work with stunning settings but unstable logical foundation. If the protagonist's "cheating" omniscience and lack of sense of crisis are not resolved, the logical loopholes will only get bigger as the plot unfolds. The summary is: the protagonist lacks a sense of being alive, has no trial and error, no fear, no partners, and no feelings. The results of the behavior are too perfect. The whole process lacks white space, one step is done, the process is too fast, and the information is dense. I hope the author will make adjustments later, and the writing will become smoother and smoother. 😁😁😁 Come on, come on ✊

I was actually quite surprised to see the author reply to me this morning. No. 1 Left a message, No. 10 Replied, there is a problem with the title of Chapter 1, it has not been changed since it was raised, there are also typos, the ground has always been written as jade surface, and now Chapter 14 is still jade surface. Anyway, the author can't see any questions raised. It seems to have been written long ago and uploaded directly. You can read it or not. You don't follow the comments or the book circle. There is no feedback and no communication... Looking at it now, it is still there, once every 10 days. Writing is a very good hobby. As long as you are happy with this hobby, there is no need to force any results. I was very optimistic about this book at first and read it carefully, but I really couldn't read it. It's a pity that I have limited abilities after all. It's really difficult for a book like this that has a lot of information and is like guessing riddles. There is no communication and adjustment that I expected. Neither of us needs it, so let's find our own arms. I ran away with a bucket a week ago, and I was very touched to get a reply from the author. I solemnly say that although I won't read this book, I still wish the author will put it on the shelves as soon as possible and the book will sell well. 🌹