Hollow Out

Although the opening chapter is dull, after careful reading, you can appreciate the author's profound knowledge and his ability to see the truth in ordinary life. At least it is a rare science fiction article and is worth reading.

It seems that what you write is not a web article. Let me talk about what I saw first: In the future, AI controls, human beings are immortal, and work is just to have a sense of survival. Advantages: Just by reading the first chapter, you can see that you have a complete worldview structure behind you. Disadvantages: 1. Explanatory text You only did one thing in the first chapter, explaining what the world is like now. Dialogue brings out memories, or dialogue leads to legal provisions, or dialogue leads to survival motivations, etc. Continuously supplement the world view. Using this method once in a while will give people a smooth and natural feeling. But after using it, it turned into an explanatory text and forced setting. As a result, the dialogue between the protagonist and the AI ​​seems very deliberate. 2. Passive protagonist In online novels, the protagonist must have internal drive. Even if you are passive, you must be active while being passive. For example, in "Infinite Horror", the protagonist group is pushed by the main god space and is very passive, but they actively adjust. Like "The Watcher", Xu Qi'an doesn't have much choice. Others arranged for him to investigate the case, but his personal behavior was proactive. In your article, the protagonist takes the initiative to change jobs, but in the overall atmosphere he is passive throughout the whole process, with a sense of helplessness and powerlessness. Perhaps you want to say that the world will be like this under the control of AI. But the protagonist can choose a job, at least you can let him take the initiative. 3. The missing protagonist The above two points are combined, plus your psychological description of the protagonist is almost pure memory. Let the protagonist have a very low sense of existence. Functionalization. A tool that exists to elicit settings. Above.