Advent

The author's writing skills are acceptable. But The setting of the world view at the beginning is not in-depth and straightforward enough, the transition between multiple narrative lines is relatively blunt, there are too many ineffective descriptions that are too wordy, and the picture quality is slightly lacking.

After reading it, I feel that the idea is OK, but the writing is a bit sluggish Anyway, let me support it first.

After the changes to the article, the complicated parts have been streamlined, and the description of the environment is also very good. Chapter 7 is very comfortable to read. But there is a problem, author, your update is too slow 😭

After reading it, I have a general understanding of the worldview. The writing is good, and I can feel that the author has pen and ink. However, the previous description is a bit repetitive, and the large amount of language dialogue is a bit delayed. However, based on the initial establishment of the worldview and the determination of the character theme, it is understandable. Come on, I look forward to your updates.