Don't Panic! I Can Still Transform

The writing is okay, but the texture is rough. Let me talk about what I saw in the first chapter: A photo triggers memories, interspersed with bits and pieces of the world view, and finally a conflict that no one cares about. Advantages: emmmm, moderate length. Disadvantages: 1. Try to empathize with the reader in the first chapter. Don't say you don't have it. What would you remember without you? Does the reader have an emotional basis? Do you want him to share the photos with you? If you are not for empathy, then why are you writing about him? Please help me find an article, just one, that starts with a memory and is very popular. Don't say they can't do it, it doesn't mean you can't do it. If you can do it, why don't you send the title of the book to my topic? 2. I don't know what to say Do you know what you should do in the first chapter? Who is he? Did you write it clearly? Where is he? Did you write it clearly? What is he going to do? Did you write it clearly? Why did he do this? You wrote it clearly, you wrote a photo that no one wants to see 3. Grinding your teeth Does it take a back and forth between caring and not caring? It's not that you can't pull, it's that you can't pull in the first chapter. No matter how good the setting or plot is, it will be worn away by this kind of pull. 4. Swearing If you don't write swearing, you will get fewer readers, as long as you have the emotion. But in the first chapter, the readers have no emotional basis. That is not a dirty word, it is a low quality. Some readers will abandon the article directly. Because there is no emotional basis. They don't know the cause and effect, they only know the first chapter of an indifferent author who doesn't write anything and directly curses, taking low quality as his personality. 5. Low information content. If you look closely, the amount of information is not low. You have to write about the world view and current dilemma. (I read the text more carefully) You didn't write a direct explanatory text about your world view and setting, but all the content that was consumed by you has no texture at all. This is an advantage in itself, but in your article = not. Above.