The Stars, Players, and Immortals

As far as the content is concerned, there are currently less than 30 chapters. After so many years, I finally saw a book that fills the gap left after the completion of "The Super Mechanic". Some people have been waiting for it.

Live broadcast article, the protagonist is an NPC guiding the live broadcast players

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The overall style is serious, and there are many plots without players. What are the players doing in a serious farming story? Players and indigenous people develop together, which is neither fish nor fowl. While initiating action seriously, at the same time attacking playfully...

After seeing the cooperation between Fire and Moon, this book still gives me a mixed feeling. On the one hand, the setting is good. I think the integration and reconstruction of the stars and Warhammer is relatively successful. It not only retains the interesting parts of the respective world view settings, but also uses the subtle relationship between the stars and the warhammer to appropriately remove the cesspool part of Warhammer. I think it is a relatively subtle integration. On the other hand, although the plot is relatively steady and there are no objectionable plots at present, the author was obviously anxious in the early stage and the plot moved too fast. I think this point should actually refer to the rhythm of Super Mechanic and focus on describing the unification war on Mars. First of all, this is the opening plot of the novel, which serves as a foundation. As a leader in this genre, Super Mechanic did a good job. It focused on describing the big plot of Aquamarine in the opening chapter. It not only created a series of distinctive NPC and player characters (most of which are used throughout the book), but also made Aquamarine a complete plot in the first stage, covering all aspects of succession and transition, laying a solid foundation for the tone of the book. Looking back at this book, the unification war on Mars is undoubtedly the main plot of the first phase, and should be written about in a special way. Not only is it a good opportunity to leave a deep impression on readers and shape the arc of important characters, but it is also a good time to explain the tone of the novel. But how is this book made? A big problem is that the plot drives the characters. Frequent jumps in time nodes, from one preset scene to the next, and the character also enters the preset state, giving the reader the feeling of taking over a game character that has been played by others for a period of time again and again. A sense of alienation arises spontaneously. I feel that I am not familiar with this character. This character did not naturally reach the current situation during my viewing. At this point, Super Mechanic did a good job in the first stage. It is the characters that drive the plot. In the narrative, each character spontaneously evolves to the corresponding stage based on the settings. The interaction of each character constitutes the plot. At the same time, the book advances the plot of the Mars Unification War too quickly. The protagonist is in a leadership position at the beginning, and the plot development and contact area are much narrower. However, the protagonist also personally goes off to do work such as infiltration and assassination from time to time, giving people the feeling of a dragon descendant going to use the toilet. This unification battle is like a dragonfly on the water, and it has been hastily done in the game stage that should be written down. The Holy Cardinals, as the first stage boss, are too little described and easily offline. As a boss, it has no corresponding effect at all. In the final battle, a lot of ink is devoted to the explanation of the situation, but no focus is placed on the actual people and things, creating a sense of paleness, as if listening to a summary narration. During the entire unification war, all the forces were in a state of background. I will not describe your situation until I talk about you. It feels like the image starts to be generated after the vision is swept over, including Terra's reaction, which is also described with lag and blur. There are too many plot rhythm problems such as this, which makes the Mars Unification War unsatisfactory to watch. There is always a feeling of skipping here and there, which leads to a relative failure in character creation. At this point, Super Mechanic has many more characters in the first stage, ranging from the garbage dump gang boss, Germinal's chief scientist, limited characters such as the old mechanic and his daughter who never appear again, to the Germinal leader who runs through the whole book, Hela Aurora, the protagonist of the planet who competes with Saint Sophia (I can't think of the name at the moment), etc. There is enough writing and enough stories to support these characters. I still remember the difficult black spider, that reason For the protagonist, the agent colleague who escaped from debt collection and later retired to open the Black Star Museum, etc. On the other hand, in this book, the stories of the characters who appear are mostly thin, and the descriptions of the characters are insufficient. As a result, there are too few memorable characters as of now, and this has to be considered for fun. Meme characters (Kaul, JOJO, etc.) Qi Qi Ba Ba has said a lot, but I still feel that it is a sigh. Although the integration level of the world view setting is quite exquisite, the entire world view is wasted even if the plot is grasped slightly.

As a fourth-day disaster novel, this book is well written. It avoids the biggest problem of the fourth-day disaster novel and balances the three aspects of the player, the natives, and the protagonist very well in the plot. There is no situation where one party is too strong and no one else affects the plot, and there is no situation where one party is just working for others, making people wonder why they want to participate in the plot. However, this book has a shortcoming, that is, the author likes to use a set word count. It is free now, but if it is still like this on the shelves, it will easily make people feel like they are losing money.

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The previous writing was okay, but the part about preparing for the rebellion was too confusing, with long paragraphs of nouns and explanations, as well as long procedures for activating various equipment, and the breakdown of each unit and squad. . . There isn't much actual plot in one chapter. . . . It reminds me of a person who cultivated immortality last year. At that time, there were relatively few AI articles. The first twenty chapters were well written. The protagonist's sect is a cosmic holy land with extremely rich resources. . . .

I hope to pay more attention to plot advancement, pure data system prompts, upgrade experience, etc. If I write too much, I feel like I haven't read it after reading a chapter. The actual plot is too little.

So far we have reached chapter 41 The fourth natural disaster article is a super god mechanic type The theme background is stars (yes, the stars themselves have war hammers sewn on them, so it can be regarded as a pure background of stars) Overall it is not bad, 7.5 Food and grass level So far we have chapter 41 , the progress of background import is basically completed The advantages are 1. Starry background, fourth natural disaster story, excellent setting 2. Cool writing, the plot is not uncomfortable at the moment The shortcomings also include a common problem with the fourth natural disaster type, panel problems. What I feel about this book is that the attributes and expertise of the protagonist have no real sense, and the combination of the panel and the actual expressiveness has no sense. There are a lot of player perspectives. Although the protagonist is the commander behind the scenes, there is still too little shaping of the protagonist's image.

There is a book about the Fourth Natural Disaster next to it. You can't win against the native army in a battle for supremacy. Meat is needed for resurrection. The fourth natural disaster army is the weakest among the three major forces in the battle for hegemony. The first major force is a brutal army that eats human flesh. They are not afraid of death. If they win, they will eat the corpses on the battlefield.

I feel that the author's writing is pretty good. The biggest problem is that there are too few novels. The author's grades are not good enough. I feel that I have chosen the wrong division. The science fiction and game divisions are already complete divisions. It may be better to go to light novels. Is it because the grades are not good enough that the grades are less, or is the grade not good enough because the grades are not good enough~ It's all the fault of the general environment!

I feel like online game writing is becoming less and less popular nowadays.

Let's talk about the advantages first. The setting is very rigorous and the plan is very thorough. What about the disadvantages? Talking about setting and planning will take up most of a chapter. I feel like I have been listening to the protagonist talk about the future and past for a long time. But the story is not advanced at all? ? ? When I read a novel, I read it for the story, not for you to ramble on. The excellence of the plot determines the novel, not the setting.

I'm not even in the mood to subscribe. If it's so slow, I'll have to wait for 50 chapters before reading.

My understanding of the author: Mars wants to change, Terra wants to change, change is right, change is necessary

There are stories about players and ✍🏻protagonists. I thought most of the protagonists in stories about the fourth natural disaster were transparent people.

It's okay, but too little and a little watery

The author can publish a copy of the memoir, for example, so that the player can tell what the protagonist is doing and why he is doing it.

It's okay, but the number of updates is a bit small When will the update be released? It's quite enjoyable to watch. If it doesn't explode some poison, it's probably a good food. I can only say that the quality is not too high, but the setting is quite attractive and the plot is quite enjoyable to watch. If it doesn't work, hurry up and post ten updates in a row

After reading this book, I ran back to play it. As a result, in version 4.4, The origin of the world was even jailed. But I am a firm believer in human supremacy. Well, I had the opportunity to universalize the government and settle down, and the jail was over 😢

When will the update time be changed?

May the divine stars illuminate our eternal path and guide us forward.

The overall evaluation of this book is generally on the upper side, but it is a small masterpiece. It is highly recommended for people who like it, such as me, a veteran player of Stars.

In today's update, I didn't see any requests for leave.

Author author, what about the A follow-up I on the moon and on the moon? Just leave it like that?

I've only read two chapters, and the protagonist, an NPC, is so awesome. Are you not afraid that the game official will forcefully close the game? Perform maintenance? It's possible to just remake the game directly.

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Will there be little gray? 🙂

It hasn't been updated yet, I feel bad