Dragon Raja: Lu Mingfei Learns to Make Cards in Another World

Humanity has developed less than one percent of Lu Mingfei

The description is very good, but it's a pity that it's a fan. The last thing fans need is to describe the protagonist's character.

I think I've seen this worldview before. It's a cat novel, right? The protagonist over there should be the young master of the noble family, the shy blond boy whom Lu Mingfei called aunt.

I feel like the writing is messy, here and there. And it's too watery

It's like this. Your readers, or the people who are attracted to read it, should all be here for the Dragon Clan fandom. You wrote the part about cards very well👌🏻The writing style is also good, but you write too much about the alien world. There is another main problem here. Other people's Lu Mingfei means that they travel back and forth like you. The world they travel through is generally recognized by the public, or the world where fandom often appears, which leads to a problem. , Even if your writing is very good, people may not want to see more plots in the card world. However, most of the fanfics started from Lu Mingfei's high school, and you reshaped his character from junior high school. I was attracted by this setting at the time, and I am a protagonist controller. I think the way you wrote Lu Mingfei's pretense and ejaculation were refreshing enough and not artificial. In addition, the treatment of the uncle's family is the most unique, which is what really attracts me. In summary, I want to say that if the author wants to attract more people and continue writing with high quality and quantity, you'd better cut off the plot of the other world. Of course, if you are just generating electricity purely for love and writing whatever comes to mind, then just pretend that I didn't say anything 😎

Author, is the timeline the new version or the old version? The new one seems to be from 2010, but the old one is definitely from 2009. In 2009, hundreds of thousands could still afford a decent house in second- and third-tier cities.

I feel like the theme of Zongwang shouldn't be used, it's too easy to mess up. It's better to write it as a traditional world-traveling story

The comprehensive network is gone. It seems that the purely card-making world has been transferred to each other? Card duel seems to only look at the card face? There is also the exploration of different worlds, and the traveling frog set is also said to have been briefly introduced?

How does the author plan to deal with the mother of the protagonist of the original novel? The Valkyrie and his maids are really attractive, and I really don't understand why the original intention was to separate the maids.

I feel like I can read it but I haven't written it clearly at all. It's all here and there.