Phantom Beast: Becoming the Strongest

Don't mix third person and first person, it's very confusing.

A rare fan of Chongmei. Although the writing is not good, I still read it carefully until I saved Bai Yu. I like Bai Yu and his daughter very much, but your writing is honest. . . Abandoned If you don't know how to write romance, don't write it. It's all for the sake of feelings. You don't need to write about romance.

There is no complete Chongmei fanfic, right? This book has many flaws, so read with caution. First, the "husband" in the extra episode of "Quanfa" was trolled, and the modern vocabulary of ancient immortals was mixed up. This fanfic, on the contrary, uses modern terms of address. Second, the character is childish. Regardless of the protagonist or the supporting role. The conversation was awkward to the extreme. It feels like the author is no more than 20 years old, or even a minor. Third, the pace is too fast, less than a hundred chapters, and the cultivation level is about to reach the top. Will it be the roulette level soon? This is the rhythm of entering the palace or the appendix. Since there is no intermediate option between poisonous weeds and grains, I have to give grains. 🎭Character: Sloppy 🎬 Plot: Awkward ✒️ Writing style: immature

Feel free to take a look for free Finally, I endured the habit of watching the previous one, and started to become wiser from saving Bai Yu. Let's stop here

Your fighting power is too broken. There are only a few peak immortals in the original work, and the human lords are all high-level immortals, and your immortality is too easy to achieve.

Not segmented? Reading a long paragraph gives me a headache

There were too few Chongmei fans, and they were all cut off.

The writing style is childish, immature, and a bit cultured

It's so uncomfortable to watch the first person and third person mixed together! ! What a mess! ! !

I just passed by, and I personally feel a little displeased, mainly because of the fanfics I have seen in the past few years, and you only have two of them, and they seem to have poor grades and become eunuchs.