The Beginning of Burial

The writing is okay, Chen Dongzhi Jue, but the story is too fake and empty. Let's make a normal plot and revive the light of legend.

To be honest, the writing is really good, but the story is too bad. Don't start with a grand narrative, it's meaningless, just a small character time travel + system + crisis. Don't be too superficial in character creation, don't make senseless ridicule, be realistic. I suggest you cut it, change the beginning, and start normally. If you have this kind of writing style, if you finish the story well, writing fantasy will take off sooner or later. Look at other people's plots, but it really can't be combined into a few books.

I have an idea. You can start by writing about a small sect that traveled to the ancient continent, then open your eyes and start the game. Don't write about the past life, go directly to the plot, set up a crisis (such as the original body and an outstanding disciple, or someone framed by someone in the sect), and then the protagonist's foundation is very poor. In the first chapter, write about the protagonist's end, then awaken the system, use the system to solve the crisis in the second and third chapters, and start normal practice in the fourth chapter. Don't start a supreme battle right from the start. That's just for fun. Write the bottom layer first and slowly introduce a larger world view.